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@grcr I know several others already commented on this, but I wanted to add one more thing about the descriptions that might help. Given that this is the first chapter of your book, I think it would be helpful to find a way to start it off with more action, or some way to hook the reader. It didn’t pull me in very well, but once I got past the…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 sure! That sounds cool!

@whalekeeper

It’s definitely a spectrum. I the child who incurred questions from the garage sale lady on whether I was mute or not – I the girl who still struggles to speak loud enough for people to hear, I – 

Am technically an extrovert. XD

Long life to horseradish! May its sparkles inhabit the sunlight forever.

@whalekeeper

Why thank you! *Bows dramatically*

No one is to blame if he gets called Little Horseradish (With Glitter). *Nods solemnly*

@whalekeeper

’cause when we finally get squeezed out so you can get to know us, we explode everywhere with suppressed creative sauce.

Is Sebastian an introverted extrovert? Or an extroverted introvert? Or horseradish mustard?! (With glitter.)

@lydibug

Aww, hedgehogs are adorable.

@grcr

Ooo, excerpts. Thank you for sharing! I like this Blair and Shannon. (Poetry, huzzah!)

I also relished the way you incorporated the poem he was reading into the opening. When the poem stopped and the dialogue began, it was like when the curtains on a stage are first pulled back.

I do agree that the descriptions were a little hard to get…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

YES Seb needs to be a graphic novel (and would probably be one of the only graphic novels I’ve ever read). One with Glitter and Color, and extra whip cream with sprinkles!!!

Honestly, Sebastian’s voice always reminds me of kid’s church stuff with it’s outlandish sparkle and unrealistic realness.

I’ll be stalking this page.

@whalekeeper

Wow. XD Hugo seems to have a habit of expressing himself too creatively for clarity. XD

Thanks for sharing! I shall now reference the poor ketchup bottle in vaguely shared humor at the first opportunity.

@s-tastet

Or any other of Ted Dekker’s books?

@s-tastet

Oh, okay! Yeah, I think I preferred AD30, but 33 was still good. It was really sad though – I won’t spoil XD

Have you read the Chosen series by Jerry B. Jenkins? It’s basically the show, but written as a book, and it’s SO good!! I liked all the insight into the characters. I’ve only seen a few episodes of the show, so I might be…[Read more]

@esther-c

Sounds fun!! Min and Allison gave pretty good examples. I don’t really have that much experience writing scripts, but I wish you luck!

@acancello

Lolol 😂

@savannah_grace2009 That is so good! So well written, and it makes me want to read more!

@freedomwriter76 That’s fun! I have a contemporary fiction that’s a meshing of the lives of several girls, and I’ve been trying to figure out if I can keep it that way or if I need to split it and write each of them their own book in a series. I started it a number of years ago but now I’ve been looking at it and thinking that I have too many main…[Read more]

@lydia-s that is so sweet! Don’t throw it out!

@freedomwriter76 Definitely!

I had some ideas about starting a series to include the different historical fiction WIPs (maybe they’d be part of the same family line or something) but we’ll see what happens with that. At this point I think they’re probably better as stand-alone.

@freedomwriter76 I agree, ancient history doesn’t hold as much weight for me. I enjoy history overall, but American history is definitely the most interesting to me. The American Revolution is a favorite of mine (I have another WIP from that era but it’s not very fleshed out yet) and I have a few ideas for another one set during the Great…[Read more]