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Liberty replied to the topic Looking for feedback on my first book! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 day ago
@esther
Wait, you’re acting in a play?
Awww! I love Huskies! I’d love to have one someday. Buddy is some sort of mix. Perhaps a Pit Bull/Plott Hound. He’s brindle and looks like a hound dog. Acts like one, too.
Thank you for keeping us in your prayers! I’ll plan to do the same!
By the way, have you ever been in YWW before? I’ve thought about…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic Looking for feedback on my first book! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 day ago
@ esther
That’s truly strange. Oh, well. I thought I would just post one of the stories I wrote. It’s a school paper, so that’s why there’s no dialogue in it. I thought the story would have stronger emotion and flow better if I wrote it longer and added dialogue, but as I had certain boundaries since this was a school project, I couldn’t do that.…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic Looking for feedback on my first book! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 weeks ago
Oh dear! Well, if you want to, you can send me your email, and I can share the Google Docs file with you. That’s totally up to you, though.
Sorry that the link isn’t working! I hope it’s not like this for everyone.
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Liberty replied to the topic Looking for feedback on my first book! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 weeks ago
Oh, no! Sorry, just forget what I posted above. That’s not what worked!! I don’t know why the new link doesn’t open with you just clicking it. However, this is how I got it to work. I highlighted it by lightly clicking it, not so it would open, but just so it would highlight the entire line by itself. Then, I copied it (using…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic Looking for feedback on my first book! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 weeks ago
Oh, I clicked the new link and it says there’s an error, but if you click and hold with two fingers, the option should appear “Open Link in New Tab.” If you click that, it should open. Of course, I’m using a mac. I think it’s a right-click on a PC to get the options panel.
Let me know if this works!
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Liberty replied to the topic Looking for feedback on my first book! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 weeks ago
file:///Users/barrydurmaz/Downloads/Into%20the%20Mind%20of%20Liberty/IntotheMindofLiberty.html
Okay, I’ve posted it here again but made it clickable. Does this work?
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Liberty replied to the topic Looking for feedback on my first book! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 weeks ago
Are you using an iPhone or a computer? On my computer, it works fine. If it’s not working on your computer, I’ll have to find a different way to post it.
Hey, Esther, is it working for you?
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Liberty replied to the topic Looking for feedback on my first book! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 weeks ago
Well, a lot is going on concerning family relations. Not ones in my immediate family, but with our other relatives. My grandmother is moving out here soon, so a lot is going to change. There are going to be a lot of opportunities to deny myself and serve and love others. There’s also still tension concerning some other matters in the…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic Looking for feedback on my first book! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 weeks ago
Yes! I’m glad to be here, again!
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Liberty replied to the topic Looking for feedback on my first book! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 weeks, 1 day ago
Thanks a lot! And no pressure! It’s not like you have to read the entire thing! Whatever you wish to read.
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Liberty replied to the topic Looking for feedback on my first book! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 weeks, 1 day ago
@esther
Sorry, everyone!
Thank you, Trailblazer, for helping me!
Here is the link to read my book:
file:///Users/barrydurmaz/Downloads/Into%20the%20Mind%20of%20Liberty/IntotheMindofLiberty.html
Make sure you copy the entire line.
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Liberty replied to the topic Looking for feedback on my first book! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 weeks, 2 days ago
Okay, I’ll try that.
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Liberty started the topic Looking for feedback on my first book! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 weeks, 2 days ago
@esther
Hi everyone!
I’ve not been on KP in a while…I kind of forgot about it during life, but recently I’ve steadily worked on my first-ever printed book! I didn’t say published, because I’m not publishing it. At least, not yet. Currently,…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic Revolutionary War story idea in the forum Historical 2 months, 1 week ago
Anyway as far as the last names, would they use, for example, Mr. Gill and Mr. Edes, or just Gill and Edes? I think for friend and family level I’m gonna stick with first names for the sake of the reader, but otherwise I’ll try to keep some formality.
Either would work.
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Liberty replied to the topic Revolutionary War story idea in the forum Historical 2 months, 2 weeks ago
1, does it draw you in and make you want to read more?
It certainly does for me! There’s suspense concerning the potential arrest of people, and the growing excitement of a war possibly coming.
And 2, does it sound historically accurate to you?
Most of it does. I did note that some of the speech wouldn’t have been used back then.…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic My first short story contest entree! Critiques appreciated in the forum Short Story Critiques 2 months, 2 weeks ago
You pinpointed some great areas for me to work on.
With a sudden toss of his head, he dashed back the emotions threatening to overpower him. His peace shattered, and Thornbriar walked back to the forest.
I just feel like it flows better. And a little side note… Shortly after this sentence, you take a sentence or two to describe t…
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Liberty replied to the topic My first short story contest entree! Critiques appreciated in the forum Short Story Critiques 2 months, 2 weeks ago
@ester-c
Thanks! I’ll be looking foreward to your feedback!
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Liberty started the topic My first short story contest entree! Critiques appreciated in the forum Short Story Critiques 2 months, 2 weeks ago
@esther
So, this is my first story contest ever… It’s flash fiction (no more than 1200 words).
This story is a scene from Thorn, my future Wip.
Please tell me what you think! Advice, feedback, or anything you want to say about this written story. Thanks you all!
Here goes:
2/19/2024
A Thorn Reborn
Thornbriar stood at the edge of…[Read more]
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