Liberty

@savannah_grace2009

Oooh, sounds like fun!! I haven’t been doing a ton of RPing lately, so maybe I’ll hope in and do this one. 🙂

I’ll post my character description this afternoon.

@savannah_grace2009 Joke’s on me, I forgot I put it in the first sentence! But if you aren’t paying attention, it’s easy to miss. It’s vague, and you’d have to assume she was living there since she was born, so I should probably clarify that a little, but it’s there.

“A dull ache filled my heart as I took a last look around the house I had called…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 No, that’s a good question! I didn’t even realize I missed that, but she’s thirteen here at the beginning of the story.

@savannah_grace2009

I just picked up this book at a yard sale because I remembered you said you loved it, lol! Haven’t read it yet, but I’ll let you know what I think!

@esther-c

Awesome! Scripts are so much fun to write.

I’ve worked on two plays, one of which was a five minute skit for a homeschool end of year promotion and the other…a full length play…maybe will get finished one of these days.

We wrote the skit in a sort of half pantomime where the only character which actually speaks is the narrator (a…[Read more]

@grcr I know several others already commented on this, but I wanted to add one more thing about the descriptions that might help. Given that this is the first chapter of your book, I think it would be helpful to find a way to start it off with more action, or some way to hook the reader. It didn’t pull me in very well, but once I got past the…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 sure! That sounds cool!

@whalekeeper

It’s definitely a spectrum. I the child who incurred questions from the garage sale lady on whether I was mute or not – I the girl who still struggles to speak loud enough for people to hear, I – 

Am technically an extrovert. XD

Long life to horseradish! May its sparkles inhabit the sunlight forever.

@whalekeeper

Why thank you! *Bows dramatically*

No one is to blame if he gets called Little Horseradish (With Glitter). *Nods solemnly*

@whalekeeper

’cause when we finally get squeezed out so you can get to know us, we explode everywhere with suppressed creative sauce.

Is Sebastian an introverted extrovert? Or an extroverted introvert? Or horseradish mustard?! (With glitter.)

@lydibug

Aww, hedgehogs are adorable.

@grcr

Ooo, excerpts. Thank you for sharing! I like this Blair and Shannon. (Poetry, huzzah!)

I also relished the way you incorporated the poem he was reading into the opening. When the poem stopped and the dialogue began, it was like when the curtains on a stage are first pulled back.

I do agree that the descriptions were a little hard to get…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

YES Seb needs to be a graphic novel (and would probably be one of the only graphic novels I’ve ever read). One with Glitter and Color, and extra whip cream with sprinkles!!!

Honestly, Sebastian’s voice always reminds me of kid’s church stuff with it’s outlandish sparkle and unrealistic realness.

I’ll be stalking this page.

@whalekeeper

Wow. XD Hugo seems to have a habit of expressing himself too creatively for clarity. XD

Thanks for sharing! I shall now reference the poor ketchup bottle in vaguely shared humor at the first opportunity.

@s-tastet

Or any other of Ted Dekker’s books?

@s-tastet

Oh, okay! Yeah, I think I preferred AD30, but 33 was still good. It was really sad though – I won’t spoil XD

Have you read the Chosen series by Jerry B. Jenkins? It’s basically the show, but written as a book, and it’s SO good!! I liked all the insight into the characters. I’ve only seen a few episodes of the show, so I might be…[Read more]

@esther-c

Sounds fun!! Min and Allison gave pretty good examples. I don’t really have that much experience writing scripts, but I wish you luck!

@acancello

Lolol 😂