@lrose5
Active 2 years ago- Rank: Wise Jester
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Koshka replied to the topic Character Castle! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year ago
Alright, first quick descriptions.
Jayson Barans
Appearance: 5′ 10″, wavy brown hair, hazel eyes, lightly suntanned caucasian. 17 years of age.
Nationality: Canadian American. {Polish, Native, English, Irish.
Pastimes: cross country running, martial arts, books, viola, parkour, firearms.
Religion: Apostolic…[Read more]
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Koshka replied to the topic The Moonlit Sea and Me in the forum Poetry Critiques 1 year ago
Beautiful. The way you used layered meanings of words is making me want to get my violin out and sing. I love the ambiguous speaker who could be just anyone; you, me, a fairy child…it makes my imagination shiver.
I don’t have any real critiques, but as I just ran across this two months after it was posted, I suppose that doesn’t…[Read more]
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Koshka replied to the topic Character Castle! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year ago
Ahh, good. *Sigh* At least he doesn’t break your reader’s hearts too much.
Also, and this is random, but I just love the name Yosef. It’s one of those names that just feels perfect.
*Contemplates whether these two would help calm anything.*
*Crickets*
The more I think about this, would y’all mind if I did add…[Read more]
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Koshka replied to the topic Character Castle! in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year ago
*a stalker appears from the shadows*
Isaiah lost SON? You Killed Judah? 0_0
And Eleanor…what has your author done to you?
*Glances at characters*
*Contemplates inserting two in this sadly mistreated group*
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Linyang Zhang replied to the topic hi (again) in the forum Start HERE 1 year ago
@scripter-of-kingdoms already at 2 pages aye?
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Linyang Zhang replied to the topic What is going on anymore in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year ago
@rae Interesting, is this like a sci-fi?
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Linyang Zhang replied to the topic What is going on anymore in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year ago
@rae thank youuuu
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Linyang Zhang replied to the topic What is going on anymore in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year ago
@rae Lol, no worries!
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Linyang Zhang replied to the topic What is going on anymore in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year ago
@rae Also, I guess my favorite color is blue. Haha. Yeah.
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Linyang Zhang replied to the topic What is going on anymore in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year ago
@rae Hmm, I mean, my drafting title for this book was Past the Waves and the Firefly Lights, I don’t know if that’s any better, but I changed it to Jacobson’s once I established the name for the shop since I thought it might fit a bit better… Not sure though, heh.
I have a lot of writing posted on my website, actually. Which, not gonna lie, n…[Read more]
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Linyang Zhang replied to the topic What is going on anymore in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year ago
@rae Oop sorry a lot of things happened between when I last replied and now, haha. Let me find it…
Outside there was a guy on a skateboard riding around the half-deserted lot in front of the store. He had blonde hair that was getting in need of a hair cut, and wire glasses perched dangerously on the end of his nose as he attempted a flip.…[Read more]
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Linyang Zhang replied to the topic What is going on anymore in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year ago
@rae Interesting, interesting. I’ll give you a quick rundown of the couple of works from the past few years which I would more seriously consider publishing, in order that I wrote them.
Jacobson’s – Joey Garcia, working at a small seaside shop called Jacobson’s, is ready for yet another listless summer in his stagnant life. But after a customer…[Read more]
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Linyang Zhang replied to the topic What is going on anymore in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year ago
@rae Wow, that’s kinda embarassing for me, I was kinda hoping all my posts from those times would be buried, hahaha.
Well, I’m still ploughing through college, trying to think about what I’m gonna do after graduation. I want to write, but I don’t know how realistic that is. I’ve completed a couple novels that I feel are decent quality at this…[Read more]
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Elishavet Elroi replied to the topic Help, I Don't Understand Keepers of the Lost Cities in the forum Fantasy 1 year ago
Okay, completely unconnected, and I’ll disappear after this because I have never read KotLC, but…
If elves are vegetarian, why do they hunt deer in the Hobbit?
I mean, I am the person who has never seen the movies and despite not living under a rock still clings to a black haired, green eyed Legolas. I have also only read two stories from the…[Read more]
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Elishavet Elroi replied to the topic A Place to share/write whatever we’re working on: Worldbuilding, plot, etc in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year ago
It’s definitely been a while! A lot of things have conspired to keep me off KP. (Mainly College and Bible Quizzing) I’m still here though. How have you been?
Thank you, I await thy assessment in eagerness.
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Elishavet Elroi replied to the topic A Place to share/write whatever we’re working on: Worldbuilding, plot, etc in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year ago
@freedomwriter76 @koshka @sunny421 @godlyfantasy12 @Idon’tknowwho @anyone
So I’ve finally managed to write the rough draft for the opening scene of book one of project Heirs of Ashes. I desperately need thoughts and critiques on it, and ideas for the plot. Really just anything will probably help.
For those who don’t know, HoA is an ad…[Read more]
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Elishavet Elroi replied to the topic A Place to share/write whatever we’re working on: Worldbuilding, plot, etc in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year ago
I’m dumbfounded. This story is getting heartwrenching. (Which is, I suppose the equivalent of saying, “good job!” XD)
I do find it interesting how you are contrasting two different alcoholics. It foreshadows trouble if Leon doesn’t find healing and repentance. •_•
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Elishavet Elroi replied to the topic The Lost Island (An Animal Fantasy RolePlay) in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year ago
Let’s see….
Trippin
Silence reigned over the shore. The waves boke with muted care upon the rocks, and the wind watched them flee away listlessly. Even the birds in the trees on the bluff above only dared to whisper. But then again, the best gossip is shared under one’s breath.
The best gossip, like a new addition of matchwood to the…[Read more]
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Elishavet Elroi replied to the topic Igua…the story that's going nowhere in the forum Fantasy 1 year ago
Oh, he’s really fascinating! I enjoy how his backstory is intertwined with his present.
Does his scarring play a half symbolic role? For instance, I also have a character who bears intense burn scars from an incident when he was a child. (Although they’re on his hands, feet, and neck [the burns on his face were light and did not scar])…[Read more]
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Koshka replied to the topic The Lost Island (An Animal Fantasy RolePlay) in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year ago
Wow. It’s been a bit since my last post on here.
The twins.
The island was silent but for the crashing waves and the distant music of wind in trees. Zlatan blinked up at the crescent moon, pale in the star cast sky.
“The lady smiles tonight.” Vulka’s voice was low. His brother rumbled in agreement. A soft murmur of some fluttering night bird…[Read more]
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