Felicity

@orielle21

I enjoyed it!! It was cute and simple!!

But for some critiques, here’s what I thought:

So, I noticed that the kids are going to school. But it’s Christmastime. So that would be weird if they were going to school that close to Christmas Day.

Secondly, I felt as if the dialogue was unnatural. So to help with the flow of dialogue, I s…[Read more]

@arien

@freedomwriter76 @godlyfantasy12 @starofthenorth @keilah-h @esther-c @lightoverdarkness6 @felicity @whalekeeper @theloonyone @loopylin @wilder-w @mineralizedwritings @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @ava-blue @folith-feolin @power @sarafini @madelyn

Enjoy the story if you care to read it….and please critique it as honestly as possible!! &…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12 yeah probably a good idea for us not to get into that.

@whalekeeper @folith-feolin

YAY I CAN HELP WITH THIS!!

So my father is preacher, and a teacher on liberties, and finding your own, etc.

He does teach against Witchcraft, and believes Harry Potter delves into that, but also believes people must find their own liberties and we’re not going to hate or shun you for reading it obviously, b…[Read more]

The reason for Harry Potter is the witchcraft.

They deal with literal witchcraft in Harry Potter. They do not in KOTLC, so…it’s not the same thing 😊 but yes if we could keep the HP talk to a minimum to non-existent since most of us are not allowed to delve into those things that would be great

@keilah-h BAHAHAH XD no offense taken! Nyx would actually be very proud to hear he affected Crosshair in such a way XD!!!

@lightoverdarkness6

YES WAY!!!! XD Yes, It is!! Lol, yeah! Well, how can you not? They’re cute, sweet, and have great voices! XD That’s cool too!!

XD XD XD

@felicity

*clears throat* Yeah it’s true.

Um, we were having a bit of a joke. We were in the same room, both on KP, and when she said in her intro, “I’m a baby barista”, I put, “hey, my sister works at a coffee shop too!” and…well, we lost it.

Omg, that’s hilarious!!! I love it!! That sounds like something me and my cousin would do (We’re like s…[Read more]

@loopylin ha that’s cute!

@godlyfantasy12 OOH I LOVE YOUR DRAGON IDEA!!! (at least back when the dragons and elves were friends) I’m currently writing a fanfic/AU where each member of my family and a bunch of my friends have dragons…

@theloonyone @esther-c

Feather

“Yes. There’s only ever been dragons and humans on my planet. My bro…[Read more]

@arien

One thing about writing style: sometimes using more descriptive words for “said” can be distracting and sound contrived.

Yeah, I use said too much. I’ve actually started having my grandma’s I-Pad next to me while I write, and the I-Pad has a list of words to use other than “Said.”

I know, it can be hard not to use “said” all the time, b…

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@whalekeeper Not exactly. My parents wouldn’t let me read harry potter but were fine with KOTLC.

@whalekeeper Honestly, I see that. I get all of those. Honestly, I had more of a problem with the person who complained about the Wingfeather Saga, because 1) that was a Christian series with a message, 2) that author was inexperienced and got better over time, and 3) he called it complete trash, and I personally only reserve that title for…[Read more]

@sarafini

Haha, I was able to get from my email to a specific forum to the forums page, but not to recent topics 😊

Lol, I bet that was confusing!

@felicity

heh…why am I always on my laptop when you look up?

*pauses, looks up, scratches head, looks back at laptop*

*grins*

@keilah-h

My brother likes ravens and crows because they’re really smart.

Did you or your brother ever read Jean Craighead George’s book Charlie’s Raven? I LOVE that book and it actually was an inspiration for my book.

@lightoverdarkness6

He’s fun. Currently, he’s trying to get me to play piano for church!! But I’ve got stage fright 😅😨. Maybe I will sometime.

OH, you should!! I play for youth group . . . I was so scared at first, but now it’s just normal. You get used to it!

@felicity

Ok, we had an arctic front come in, so the wind chill is literally -26 here.…

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@arien has a really great idea.

@lightoverdarkness6

Great job! I love your characters!!

Ah, yes, put the whole bottle of hot sauce in.

That reminds me of (sorry, @arien) when my sister put a whole can of chipotle peppers into soup instead of one single pepper . . . I ate it anyway. My dad actually enjoyed it . . . lol

But as to critiques?

I personally feel Asher and Iris a…[Read more]