Jaybird

@felicity

Wait, are you sure he wasn’t teasing you? 🤣 It was pretty obvious to me!

Oh, no, I know when he’s teasing, and he wasn’t teasing 🤣. Okay, good!! 😂

@esther-c

Took me a while to reply, but now I am! 😁

Yay! Thank you for taking the time to respond 😊!

First of all, I could really feel the sibling dynamic! Great job on that! Sibling dynam…

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@felicity

Oh my word!!! That’s super cold.

I think it’s cold in a lot of the US because of the arctic front. Yesterday was terrible. It didn’t go over 3 degrees Fahrenheit!! Today is a little better. Funny thing is, a week from now it will be 58. 😆

I expect we’ll see a polar bear soon

I wouldn’t doubt it. Lol 😂

@lightoverdarkness6

Took me a while to reply, but now I am! 😁

First of all, I could really feel the sibling dynamic! Great job on that! Sibling dynamics are my favorite!! I could also feel the tone: Sure, they were in a bad situation, but it didn’t get them down all the way, bc they had each other.

I’m already really liking your cha…[Read more]

@orielle21

I enjoyed it!! It was cute and simple!!

But for some critiques, here’s what I thought:

So, I noticed that the kids are going to school. But it’s Christmastime. So that would be weird if they were going to school that close to Christmas Day.

Secondly, I felt as if the dialogue was unnatural. So to help with the flow of dialogue, I s…[Read more]

@felicity

*clears throat* Yeah it’s true.

Um, we were having a bit of a joke. We were in the same room, both on KP, and when she said in her intro, “I’m a baby barista”, I put, “hey, my sister works at a coffee shop too!” and…well, we lost it.

Omg, that’s hilarious!!! I love it!! That sounds like something me and my cousin would do (We’re like s…[Read more]

@arien

One thing about writing style: sometimes using more descriptive words for “said” can be distracting and sound contrived.

Yeah, I use said too much. I’ve actually started having my grandma’s I-Pad next to me while I write, and the I-Pad has a list of words to use other than “Said.”

I know, it can be hard not to use “said” all the time, b…

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So, this is kind of what Dao looks like:

Well… 🤔 I think “deus es machina” is the right term. 😅

@felicity

I know!!

I really like Dao! I know that the fact that he suddenly showed up and saved them is kind of deus es machina, but it had to happen. 😁

I could probably ramble more on why I write… but… we’ll just keep it at that. 😜

@arien

Awesome topic idea!! I’ve been meaning to start something like this, but you did it for me!!

So, pretty much for as long as I can remember, I loved anything to do with stories!! I wrote them in school or for fun; my bff and I would play games after church about stories we made up; and I enjoyed putting on plays. I just loved it!! That c…[Read more]

This is ending up so much more different than I had originally intended. I love it!!!

I guess that chapter ended up longer than I had thought. XD

@godlyfantasy12 @felicity @lightoverdarkness6 @mineralizedwritings

Welp… I guess posting it on Wednesday didn’t happen. 🤦🏻‍♀️ 😅 But here it is!! Sorry for making y’all wait so long. I may have forgotten about it… *hides behind pillow* *throws pillow, clears throat, and resumes poise*

Anywho, I put a little bit of the end of the previous chapter…[Read more]

@orielle21

Unless all the rain that is coming down decides to melt everything.

That would be very sad. 😔

@lightoverdarkness6

Currently, he’s trying to get me to play piano for church!! But I’ve got stage fright 😅😨. Maybe I will sometime.

You totally should! When I was little, I didn’t have stage fright; then I did kind of get stage fright; and finally I have sort of overcome it. 😅 The more you get on stage and do it, the easier it becomes. I actua…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

Oh, I have heard that one on the radio before!! I didn’t know his name though. Yes, that’s a great song. He’s got a beautiful voice 😍! Thank you for sharing!

@loopylin @godlyfantasy12 @mineralizedwritings

I’m not gonna be able to RP much for the next few days, (I’m helping my mom get ready for Christmas!!) so, y’all can make Matthew and Lyla just do whatever. I trust y’all. Or you could pretend that they disappeared, or maybe you could have your charries  get separated from Matt and Lyla. Whatever…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

These are the two charries.