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@lightoverdarkness6 @felicity @freedomwriter76 @theloonyone @mineralizedwritings

@felicity, the thing that Len gave to Amidala is definitely important. Sometimes I actually forget to mention it in future chapters 😅, but it will play a big role in the future! 😏

Next two chapters! (I already have like twenty written, so that’s why I’m getting the…[Read more]

@sarafini @godlyfantasy12

Yeah. I was just thinking Ev would try to make her jealous, but now that I think about it, they’d then have to have a conversation about it. That may kind of ruin the whole dynamic in my head for the actual book. 😅
I may just have him act like that with any girl, cause I’m playing around with that facet of his…[Read more]

@felicity

I know right? Sam is the absolute hero!!!!! (I mean, I guess Frodo went through a lot, so, I’ll give him a little credit.

Yes!! He is! “I can’t carry it for you…but I can carry you!” I LOVE that part. So sweet😢🥰. Yeah, I’m sorry Frodo, you went through a lot too😅😭.

Now THAT is one of the best parts ever! Gimli and Legolas having a co…

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@godlyfantasy12
Girl!!! That looks so good!!!!! I ❤️ it!!

@felicity

I didn’t find myself confused at all bc you had the character’s names at the start of each chapter. I write in two POVs all the time. The way I signal it’s someone different it by starting each first sentence of the chapter with their name. (Well, at least most of the time)

Thanks for the feedback! 😀

Yep! You’re welcome!!

@sarafini

It may work better if you do change Jasmine’s age. 😅 But it’s up to you. I have my characters work around it.

@sarafini

O:  I like Wilder’s idea better than what I said lol

@sarafini

So you have a story with some kind of villain or evil that wants to mind control people and they are using either implants or headbands to do that. Is that right?

I’m not sure what the tribulation is (something to do with Revelations?) but I think that implants would look a lot better and less clunky than headbands. But if you used h…[Read more]

lol Merry and Pippin are the best XD

@felicity

I love it so far!! I can really feel the characters’ personalities. And you’re doing a great job writing in present tense. Like, I’ve tried it before, and I just can’t do it right. 😅 So, awesome job! I can’t wait to read more!!

@felicity @lightoverdarkness

Lol! I don’t remember those parts in the movies.

In the movies, I didn’t really like Frodo either. (I’ve also only read the first LotR book, so maybe he actually is a great character 😅)

@koshka

Great idea for a topic!! I’ll definitely be on this thread as I research more my Civil War idea!

@felicity @freedomwriter76

Thanks!!

@keilah-h

Sure!! My charries are not the only ones in the group, so I’ll have to ask the rest of the group, but I’m totally good with it😊👍! Which characters are yours? Other than Kad 😉.

@loopylin @mineralizedwritings @freedomwriter76 @theloonyone @e-m-trepke

Can @keilah-h join her characters to one of our groups?

@e-m-trepke

I only joined thi…

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@arien

I agree, the movies messed up Frodo. (I haven’t seen them all, just from what I know and what people have told me. I like how you said he’s just . . . there, LOL.

Yes! I like him still, he’s got some good parts in the movies, but yeah he’s better in the books😂😅.

@loopylin

yeah, I did 😊

Awesome😀! It looks really good 👍.

@felicity

Yeah, I do too. Don’t worry about his name!! It’s like a form of Alexander. 😀 Yes, it’s so sad, but…I won’t spoil anything so…

Okay! Oh that’s cool! Okay…😭

Exactly! Frodo is just..there. 😀  Legolas is like this perfect being that can do anything, including crazy stuff like running up oliphants without getting hurt, and during non-activ…

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@keilah-h
Cool!!

@koshka

Yes, I play violin!! I use the Essential Elements but my teacher is gonna start me on Suzuki soon.

@felicity

I’m learning Spanish right now. After I learn Spanish, I actually want to learn French next.

@freedomwriter76 @koshka @felicity

Thank you all sooooo much!!! All your tips and info are super helpful!! I’ll try to keep you all updated as the story progresses!

And @felicity

The theme will probably be forgiveness.

@sarafini Does Jasmine have freckles?