Liberty

@whalekeeper

Yep, makes sense. One thing that threw me out a little was how Nahim stuttered a bit, and his shivery response. I haven’t seen much of this character but for some reason I picture him as the stoic, silent warrior type. The stuttering especially sounds like a younger man or boy – the type like in Way of Kings, with the boy who was dra…

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@rae

I’m going to pop in and give my tidbit (because that’s so much more fun than homework).

1. Some scenes need to be short, some long, depending on what’s being delt with. This one may be short, but it’s a good length for the subject.

2. No? It just felt like a wrap up description of Mandin/a scene conclusion/transition to whatever was coming…[Read more]

this is the first fanfic I’ve done anything on in weeks XD

I have an idea that started today that’s living rent-free in my head…may never make it onto paper, but I’m just gonna rant about it here bc I want to XD

House of Heroes; led by Duke Nicholas Joseph Furion, a noble who seeks to bring peace to the land: white, blue, and yellow.

Holds the northern part of the land, the largest portion, full of…[Read more]

@princesachronicle22 @keilah-h

OK! Here we go!

Everton

The figure who looked most like a man let out a deep laugh. “Attack? I could break every bone in your body without using a weapon, human.” The man—who Ev could now tell had blue skin—lowered the spear he held. Adrian stepped out from the around the corner, shooting Ev a disapproving glare.…[Read more]

@rae Hiiiiiiiii!!!

First off, your descriptions are absolutely FABULOUS, girl!! Like, I can see this scene so much <3

and now for your questions…

1. Not at all! I think it’s a good length for a scene!
2. nope, I don’t think so!
3. Yessssss, very much so! I really loved the body language and it really conveyed Nahim’s feelings/emotions/fears…

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@princesachronicle22 @keilah-h

I’m sorry it’s been an eternity since I’ve RPed!! 😭 I’ll try my best to get the next RP written and posted this afternoon. I should have time. (Not that I didn’t have time before… I was just being lazy… XD)

@beth-torres

Ahhhh, I’m backkkk. Sorry it’s been like f o r e v e r 😭 I have no good excuse except procrastination, lol. XDD

Fynn

“Awesome.” Fynn grinned, rubbing his hands together. “Then into the dark we go.” He dramatically turned on his heel and led them out of the classroom. “The hallways are spooky in the dark.” Fynn wasn’t sure why…[Read more]

That’s a lot more code than last time I tried to post a pic….

Aaaaannnnddddd…. Nerp

Test, test…

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@freed_and_redeemed

Rae actually asked this same question a while back, and what she told you is basically what I would’ve said. Koshka’s advice was really good too. So yeah, I basically have nothing else to add. I feel like they covered everything I can think of. 😉

@theducktator

Ooh we did!! We were right in the path of totality. It was amazing!! Definitely unforgettable! I don’t even know how to describe it. Because the lighting kept getting funky, it was a little eerie, until it got as dark as it is right when the sun dips below the horizon. It’s so cool!!

@highscribeofaetherium @freed_and_redeemed @jonas @whalekeeper @loopylin @keilah-h @theducktator @whoever-cares

Hey,I need help knowing if this scene feels forced or anything.

The context is that Mandin invited Nahim to a festival that Mandin’s family was having, and Nahim promised to finally tell Mandin his traumatic backstory.

Evening came,…

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@freed_and_redeemed

My advice as a middle-grade writer and a YA reader:

1. Stick as much as possible to inner turmoil. Instead of focusing on how much the outward character is being damaged, focus on how the inner character is coping/struggling/whatever.

2. Instead of portraying each individual blow/whatever, gloss it all together into a simple…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

Yeah, I had to do this same thing last month… Poor Nahim was totally broken…

Anyways, what I personally did was not focus much on the physical, but went more for the thoughts and emotions of my MC. It was still awful, but not in a gruesome way.

I did mention the body language a couple times of the one being tortured, but…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Yes, I’ve been thinking about that for the past couple months. For whatever reason, skinwalkers ad hydras have been popping into my head every time I think about it…

I’ll begin brainstorming but for now let us set up our characters. Idk, maybe we make up someone who can get captured by a dragon and everyone goes to save them 🤷🏻‍♀️…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Silvanis

“Of course you’re a dragon! I’m not stupid, despite popular opinion. And no, no other dragons-” Silvanis stopped, looking around. “Well, minus the one outside. He doesn’t appear to have a rifle, but my vision can kinda get blurry through walls so don’t trust me. Can’t tell his color but doesn’t appear to have a feminine build.…[Read more]

@theducktator @highscribeofaetherium @keilah-h

We weren’t in totality, but we got about 90% I think. I saw it first at work, where one of my managers had a pair of glasses, and then after I got home, we had a pair my aunt gave us. I was able to get a picture through the glasses, but unfortunately I don’t think Wyoh would approve of me trying to post one.