Jaybird

@rae

Do any of you play-punch their older brother in the stomach as you pass by?

Or, get really mad when someone insults him, but insult him yourself all the time?

I doooo 😂

I actually do it to my younger siblings more often than my older brother. 🤭🤣

@freedomwriter76 @smiley
Eleanor. XD
Jayson

“Who are you?!”

Civilians. Great. No firearms necessary. I latched my watch back on my wrist and scrunched my eyebrows at the young lady. Faint British accent, over aggressive manner. Probably scared out of her witts if I had learned anything in Psyc.

Raphael slid his hands in his pockets with a sma…[Read more]

Note: we are still sorting out Raphael’s family history/denomination, so, besides knowing that they’re very observant, that’s kinda in the air. While he does end up messianic, he’s not quite there yet.

@freedomwriter76 @smiley

These two are written in a style that is way not my usual limited omniscient view, part of the reason they’re now joining this castle. So if the voice jumps around a bit, blame Jay.

Jayson Barans

Long gloomy halls after long muggy stairways. Just a few minutes in this place and the dark ages were making a lot more…[Read more]

@smiley @freedomwriter76

Alright, first quick descriptions.

Jayson Barans

Appearance: 5′ 10″, wavy brown hair, hazel eyes, lightly suntanned caucasian. 17 years of age.

Nationality: Canadian American. {Polish, Native, English, Irish.

Pastimes: cross country running, martial arts, books, viola, parkour, firearms.

Religion: Apostolic…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

That’s me ALL THE TIME!!! I thought I was the only one!!!!

OH MY GOODNESS girl you are NOT the only one XDXD Ikr!!!! It’s just like ooooo I rlly love this idea….let’s start a google doc titled short story and not come back to it for seven months shall we??

XD

What’s some of your favorite prompts? 😀

@scripter-of-kingdoms O…[Read more]

@overcomer

Beautiful. The way you used layered meanings of words is making me want to get my violin out and sing. I love the ambiguous speaker who could be just anyone; you, me, a fairy child…it makes my imagination shiver.

I don’t have any real critiques, but as I just ran across this two months after it was posted, I suppose that doesn’t…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @smiley

Ahh, good. *Sigh* At least he doesn’t break your reader’s hearts too much.

Also, and this is random, but I just love the name Yosef. It’s one of those names that just feels perfect.

*Contemplates whether these two would help calm anything.*

*Crickets*

The more I think about this, would y’all mind if I did add…[Read more]

*a stalker appears from the shadows*

@freedomwriter76 @smiley

Isaiah lost SON? You Killed Judah? 0_0

And Eleanor…what has your author done to you?

*Glances at characters*

*Contemplates inserting two in this sadly mistreated group*

@jonas @highscribeofaetherium @savannah_grace2009 @acancello @trailblazer @oh-man-I-feel-like-I’m-missing-someone-sorry-whoever-I-forgot-😭-😂

(Ok, well that last tag was just obnoxious and probably unnecessary. 🤣)

Alrighty! I’m adding in a villain who needs a lot of development.

Firouz Kian al Ezhdeha 

He’s 6 feet tall and has blue eyes, but th…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @euodia-vision

Ok, so my siblings and I watched the Hawkeye show like last month, and now I love Clint even more, especially in this RP. 😂

@freedomwriter76

Hey girl!!

I was thinking about ya today and wanted to ask how you’re doing? And how’s it going with finalizing Freedom’s Fire? What are you doing for publishing?

@jonas

I can add in a villain. I just have to choose which one. Then I’ll introduce him here later.

I’ll try to RP for my charries today 🙂

@euodia-vision @freedomwriter76

Yeah, I’m fine with that! It’d be helpful if you could write a RP for Clint tho, Freedom. 😅 Cuz I don’t know where to start with my characters. XD

@euodia-vision (literally almost tagged myself 🤦🏻‍♀️😂)

Ok! Thanks!!

And I think most if not all offer cash/monetary prizes. 👀😂

@EVERYONE (I’d tag everyone I’ve interacted with on KP, but that’s a lot of people. XD)

Hey everyone!

So Jerry Jenkins (an incredible author if you didn’t know 😉 ) has an article with tons of different writing contests in 2024. I’m definitely planning to thoroughly look through all of them at some point, because I want to start submittin…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @grcr @rae @mineralizedwritings

Thanks you so much guys!! All your advice has helped so much! I feel much more confident about editing this chapter now. ❤️

(And Rae, I would never get rid of the donut scene EVER. I love it too. 🥰😁)

@grcr

It is hard to say much without knowing much of your book, but I do agree with what Sara said as far as openings…

Ok! If you do wanna read the chapter, I posted it like two posts above this one.

I guess it depends on the reader, but personally, I like books that paint some of the picture in the first (and even second) chapter… even if it seem…

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