Elishavet Elroi

@rae

Oh, he’s really fascinating! I enjoy how his backstory is intertwined with his present.

Does his scarring play a half symbolic role? For instance, I also have a character who bears intense burn scars from an incident when he was a child. (Although they’re on his hands, feet, and neck [the burns on his face were light and did not scar])…[Read more]

@rae

Hi! (I’m Elishavet [obviously] and I don’t remember if I’ve met or otherwise greeted you because my brain just will not let me, so welcome to the Kingdom of Pen! It’s an honor to meet you, hopefully for the first time.)

I adore how unique your world is, even as you employ tropes and tools used elsewhere. It’s obviously your creation, and I…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

O.O

That was so horrid and so sweet. I feel sorry for all those characters. So many emotions….

BUT ISABEL IS ADORABLE AND HEART WRENCHING. War is never so dark as when its affect is seen in children. But it’s never so full of hope as when it’s seen through their eyes.

Also, the line where Leon wondered if she’d recognize him…[Read more]

WIPs!!! Huzzah!!

Thanks for tagging me, @freedomwriter76 ! I don’t know how much I’ll be on, considering this is the last half of the FALL 1 semester at the college I’m at, but I’ll certainly be interested in what is going on here.

Ah, yes, I think I’ll spy on this site and maybe join in from the shadows from time to time.

Also,

Hi @joy-calle…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Leon seeking Riker is much more powerful – even if he doesn’t succeed. He might not know where exactly to look, but Leon looking for Riker shows his heart. I like it.

Also, another thing I’ve been meaning to mention to you: I was reading an autobiography that made me think of you. It was by Benjamin Urshan, a minister born in…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Manyfelicitationsandjoyouswishes!

I’m so excited for you! That’s awesome! (And I echo another: you work at the rate of an “actual” author. XD)

*Flings confetti*

*Can’t remember your favorite cookie*

*Offers you a chocolate chip cookie*

*And ice cream*

*And a handful of raspberries* 😉

This is the first in a trilogy, right? 

@whalekeeper

It’s definitely a spectrum. I the child who incurred questions from the garage sale lady on whether I was mute or not – I the girl who still struggles to speak loud enough for people to hear, I – 

Am technically an extrovert. XD

Long life to horseradish! May its sparkles inhabit the sunlight forever.

@whalekeeper

’cause when we finally get squeezed out so you can get to know us, we explode everywhere with suppressed creative sauce.

Is Sebastian an introverted extrovert? Or an extroverted introvert? Or horseradish mustard?! (With glitter.)

@grcr

Ooo, excerpts. Thank you for sharing! I like this Blair and Shannon. (Poetry, huzzah!)

I also relished the way you incorporated the poem he was reading into the opening. When the poem stopped and the dialogue began, it was like when the curtains on a stage are first pulled back.

I do agree that the descriptions were a little hard to get…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Wow. XD Hugo seems to have a habit of expressing himself too creatively for clarity. XD

Thanks for sharing! I shall now reference the poor ketchup bottle in vaguely shared humor at the first opportunity.

Oh, in actual years, Tripkin and Dalton are more like seven years old… I think? They measure time differently, and can live an unnaturally long time(for real squirrels).

@godlyfantasy12

Mine walk sometimes on their hind legs, but run on all fours. (If a squirrel runs. XD I’m not sure what the right word for ground flying is.) If anyone has read Mistmantle, they’re a lot like that. (very animal like, but also of course, able to do things real squirrels can’t.)

Tripkin is around twelve, come to think of it, and…[Read more]

Okay, here’s the entry. Y’all’s characters sound like such fun!

Because of my Squiggle Things small size, the normal/slightly choppy conditions write like Euroclydon. XD

Tripkin

“High side!” The words tore from his throat in two rough syllables. His dark furred friend flung himself up the tipping slope to join Tripkin.

Their raft evened out.…[Read more]

Dalton

Treeknife. It’s what he is and what he will be as far down the road as he can see. It was a Treeknife that found him as a tiny kit, and it was a Treeknife who raised him up to be the squirrel he is. Oakorn was everything – a father, a mentor, and a friend. Little does Dalton realize, he was everything to that old Treeknife in return: a…[Read more]

@koshka

Ahoy! Count me in.

*Is subscribing*

@grcr

Realistic is great! I like to stick to that route per usual. I am intrigued by these uniforms though; how are they powerful? in what ways? What do they look like?

Lol, yes!! I need a cloak too! My siblings and I always try to make medieval clothes but we have never succeeded.

Medieval clothing is beautimous. It’s very simple too (or at…[Read more]

@grcr

Greetings and welcome to the Kingdom of Pen! I’m called Elishavet around here, and I write medieval fantasy too, as well as the random poem, flash fiction, and well, randomness.

So how fantastic is your book world? I have two main WIPs which are neither of them magical – although one does have some fantastic elements like fire captured in…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Thanks for the notes, it helps.

But as for your excerpt, WHAT IS GOING TO HAPPEN TO THE BABY?

I mean, I guess he assumes silence and thus saves the lives of those he can. Or at least I hope he is able to because something tells me the guilt associated with “betraying” someone else would be the worst kind of torment to…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Narnia? O.O My native land!!!

Peter and Lucy were always my favorites, but I love all the Pevensie siblings. And a whole bunch of other characters like Caspian the Tenth, Puddleglum, Aravis, Shasta, Rilian, Glimfeather, Reepicheep, Digory, Emeth, Jewel, Trumpkin…..(is it really possible to name them all?)

Nevertheless, my…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Thank You!!! It’s an experiment. 😉

Is there anything you liked/thoughts/suggestions?

And yes, I think she is turning to kidnapping. XD