Elishavet Elroi

@godlyfantasy12 @koshka @freedomwriter @keilah-h @wilder-w

Oh! I was just thinking about what my charries would do at lunch! Y’all are awesome.

By the way, I feel kinda like I need to put on a content warning. Nothing is really stated, but some pretty nasty things are aludes to, including addiction, abuse, profanity, and immorality.…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @koshka @keilah-h @godlyfantasy12

Let’s see…

Viktor

As soon as the man walked up, Viktor heard Reúven’s voice in a low mutter.

“What fine boots. Very much the officer.”

Viktor’s eyes went wide. He spread his feet and gripped his sword, ready. Esen shifted on his shoulders to raise her crest in answer to his…[Read more]

@arien

Oh! I love it. The characters are intriguing, the setting/world is interesting, and the concept is really fun. I want to read the rest!

I especially liked the way you describe the characters bit by bit. The piece where the candlelight is illuminating Aedan’s face was an especially fine part to read. I love the way it formed his features…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Viktor

“Ah, thanks anyway! I’ll find him after class.”

Concern flooded through him, filling his eyes and face. He leaned forward and touched the back of her seat.

“Is this a… brother?”

She sighed. “My little brother.”

“When did he disappear? Is this like him?”

Grimm gave a low, sympathetic laugh and Jocelyn huffed. “He s…[Read more]

@keilah-h @godlyfantasy12 @freedomwriter76 @koshka @wilder-w

Ok!

Reúven & others

Well, here they were. Literature right off the top. Reúven pulled a chair out for Liora and he and Viktor sat down on either side.

The teacher had stepped out to talk with another teacher in the hall, letting the  students settle in before class started. She wa…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Actually, I don’t know. XD

Lyn and Grimm might be fun, since they haven’t really run into each other very much in the other RP.

And Lynn may have some fun.

@keilah-h @godlyfantasy12 @freedomwriter76 @koshka @wilder-w

The poor baby!

Also, I have an idea for a scene for later after Alwin has met some more charries in which he gets knocked over and… his backpack falls open. 

But for now…

Alwin

An annoying buzz sounded overhead, calling Alwin’s attention to his slow feet. He sped up, his worn t…[Read more]

@wilder-w @keilah-h @godlyfantasy12 (November!!!) @koshka @freedomwriter76

Reúven

Golden sunlight splashed across the crowd of students, staining everything in light. Reúven squinted at the brightness and shifted his eyes away.

Better to not burn spots into his vision.

Viktor walked beside him like a young soldier going to court martial. The b…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

I’m just going through the forum, and what should meet my eyes?

THAT SCENE WAS AWESOME! And hilarious, and sooo sweet! I love the way Riker swaps from understanding friend to protective brother. It’s perfect!

@godlyfantasy12

I can! Should I hop in with my threesome?

@starofthenorth

Hmmm, that was really fun to read! I love the “Christopher is king” dynamic to pieces!

As for critiques, I would basically repeat everyone else. From what you asked, I don’t think you’re intending to make them feminist etc., so I would bring the emphasis off of the catch words and more on the characters. It’s Briana against…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76. @koshka. @wilder-w. @keilah-h. @godlyfantasy12.

Alwin

Another day.

Alwin shuffled wearily down the hall toward his classroom. The halls were crowded with students wrapped in conversation, exchanging schedules, rifling through backpacks, and heading to class. Bleary eyes blinked in dumbfoundment at the bright spirits of the…[Read more]

OH! And I can hardly believe I didn’t explain their set up.

Ok.

Viktor is now living with his uncle, Micha, and cousin, Reúven. A friend of Micha with unmentionable connections in government located Viktor and got Micha custody of him and his sisters Alyona and Nadían. Alyona is 13, and Nadían is 12, and they decided not to have Alyona come that early.

@freedomwriter76. @koshka. @wilder-w. @keilah-h. @godlyfantasy12.

I’m on for now!!

So, before I go for Alwin, I’ll introduce the rest of my charries.

Also, I think the invisible country this AU is in is involved in combat in a far off country. It’s not a war close to home, so nobody really notices it except for those involved. (And sorry, I…[Read more]

I haven’t seen the LOTR movies either, because I’m also sensitive and I agree with you about the characters. From what I know, they completely misunderstood Eowyn. And Faramir.

YES!!! Ugh. I’ve heard the same.

I mean, she was mistaken and proud at times, but on the inside she’s actually struggling with some real fears and insecurities. AND Far…[Read more]

@arien

Greetings and salutations! Welcome to the Kingdom of Pen. The community here is indeed great. We’re glad you’re here!

I’m called Elishavet around here, and I mostly write realistic medieval fantasy (so I can blend my two favorite genres: Clean, medieval fantasy and Historical fiction), with the occasional poem.

I have read LotR, but I’m…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @koshka @godlyfantasy12 @keilah-h

Winifrith

The door was flung open, sending Winifrith three steps back, eyes wide. The draft wafted cold over her like sudden dread.

Her eyes met those of a tall man standing with his hands on the little shoulders of a young lass.

“Hello there,” he gave a gentle smile “No need to be afrai…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Yeah! I’ll get right to it. Sorry it hasn’t happened yet.

@keilah-h

I don’t mind you asking at all!

It is a little nasty, though. And complacated.

You see, as a result of his upbringing and several bad choices, he has multiple substance addictions. He knows it’s bad for him, but it’s the only coping mechanism he has.

But as most addictions are, this substance abuse is only the symptoms of the problem…[Read more]

By the way, he’s been addicted since he was nine.