Liberty

@jonas @hanako @freedomwriter76 @grcr @highscribeofaetherium

Nahim

At the entrance of a stranger, gun at ready Zahlin drew his sword. So did everyone else. That was it. He drew his gun and shot three blasts into the air and aimed it for the heart of the stranger. The sound of the shots echoed through the hall.

“That’s enough! Everyone stay…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

I think that’s the best intro yet! Just bursts in there with a gun in his hand! XD Love It!

@freedomwriter76

Thanks, I just felt in the mood.

@hanako @jonas @grcr @highscribe (to lazy to find your actual tag) @savannah_grace2009

Nahim

Before Ottoline could answer there was a shout of someone murdering each other. Nahim spun, alarmed, hand unhooking his sword ready for anything. Ellis, Zahlin and two new people Nahim hadn’t met were all in an argument, Zahlin looking ready to kill a…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Tis true

@janellebelovedpig

I love that poem!!

@savannah_grace2009

I mean, she could’ve had a crush before her family moved… but I didn’t think that far back lol. It doesn’t really matter for the sake of the story though. I’ll try to update this again soon.

@jonas @rae @savannah_grace2009 @hanako @highscribeofaetherium @esther-c @grcr @freedomwriter76 @mineralizedwritings @anyone-i-missed

Kari

Kari observed the conversations in the room as she slowly ate the food on the table before her. She was too hungry to care about whether or not she was being poisoned; besides, why would the queen want to…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Nahim

“She’s alright.” Nahim spun around. All it was was one of guys he had seen at the party. Nahim looked at Ottoline. She was still trembling a little, but she seemed relieved by the presence of the other man. “She’s just a little on edge.” ‘Yeh, she’s afraid of me.’ 

“Ottoline, that’s a pretty name, it fits you. Well, w…[Read more]

Woops! It might be tomorrow before I can look at your website. Eh! Tech, so many problems!

@devastate-lasting

Honestly (IF you want my opinion) I like your originally title. Though it’s your choice.

Ooh! A button I can push!

@savannah_grace2009

Oh man! This will be interesting.

Also, how domyiu correctly pronounce ‘Ottoline?’

@savannah_grace2009

“I-I-I’m Ottoline.” The girl clasped her hands. She was trembling.

“Are you alright?” ‘She better not be scared of me.’ “Are you chilled?”

@devastate-lasting

Hmmm…Now I think I might read this book if I had time.

Two comments:

1)

Outside there was a guy on a skateboard riding around the half-deserted lot in front of the store. He had blonde hair that was getting…

So I think that thses two sentences could potentially flow into each other better.

2) Ignore this one if you don’t…[Read more]

@hanako

Also, have I mentioned this already but I really like your pfp.

@jonas

If Ellis doesn’t like him, that could lead to some problems potentially.

@hanako

Thanks 🙂 I was hoping people would now like them!

@jonas

Yeah, even my Nahim, who sympathizes with people who’s homes are being/have been destroyed hates her now. How will they feel about Fennin?

@grcr

Yeah, I felt bad for her when I read it…

Well that tells me I haven’t failed as a writer.

@jonas

I think that the characters should be able to survive, unless they’re fighting an entire army of dragons or something, lol. They have multiple weapons that should be able to kill dragons fairly effectively, so if things get too serious, we can sort of cheat them out,

Yeah, I see what you mean.

@jonas

She originally was meant to be hardened by the pain of seeing her country fade away, but then she evolved. I’ve got to watch myself because her rapid growth from just an everyday demanding queen to a…well what she is has made her liked by me.