Liberty

@grcr

I don’t know who got shot!

@rae I like both pictures! The second one looks like he’s moving, which I think is neat. The only thing I’d like better about the other is that I do like the wind coming from behind him/how it pushes his hair forward and frames his face. I’m enjoying imagining them happening right after each other in a scene, like he turned around. 😀

@hybridlore

lol, thanks. XD

True, true.

We’ve become proficient in anarchy. Says a lot about the quality of our group…. Not sure what, but it says a lot of it.

@grcr

Good scene! I’m still not really sure what happened at the end… but yeah, I was expecting the dad to die too. 😅🥲

I like the siblings too (although their names are confusing, haha.)

@theducktator

Yay! Hope you feel better soon!

@ellette-giselle Haha, your signature! XD

@grcr

You are very welcome!!

Okay sounds good.

Okay, for a little more editorial feedback…..

and Emrysrushed

Second to last paragraph, you just need a space there.

And then structurally,

Put your right hand to your chest…”

This seems a little odd, because 1. it is one of the more standard ways of swearing an oath, and 2. as a sol…[Read more]

@grcr

Ooo! This is interesting!!

(I actually thought the dad was gonna die in this chapter from scene 1…. so I’m relieved that he made it. XD)

A few typos I caught, but at this point I’m not sure what sort of feedback you’re looking for, so let me know. This is interesting and I’m eager to keep reading if you post more!

So man y kids… and…[Read more]

@theducktator

lol. No prob. XD

@loopylin

Rory

“Push you? If you’re sure…..” He stared in confusion for several moments. Then, bracing his hands against the back of the chair, he gave it a shove and let go, waiting to see what would happen.

@whalekeeper

Oh my goodness! He’s such a good sport tho to reply like that! XD

@theducktator

I’m glad you got through it with no huge mistakes. Colds always settle in my ears and I get sinus infections. Really bad ones. Colds can be nasty. I’ve never gotten dizzy from one though…… I think? 😄

Praying that it clears up.

@esther-c

praying for you, Esther!

@whalekeeper

Sorry that I haven’t been replying as soon as usual. A raffle I was hosting on Unvale ended and I’m trying to organize and get the winners their prizes.

Gabriel Mai

“Because it’s a secret, and we aren’t that close. To be honest, the only people I know from that village who I trust not to gossip about it is Master, Isabella and her…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Gabriel Mai

“No. I don’t have anyone like that. Isabella is simply the one who gives me cinnamon buns while making some sort of banter comment.” Gabriel shook his head.

I will say Isabella most definitely has a crush on him, though he’s oblivious because he has no idea what that looks like XD.

@whalekeeper

Gabriel Mai

Gabriel clapped, genuinely smiling under his mask. “Just like that! No, only the Fourth knows I can throw hatchets. To my acquaintances, they would say I’d be the first one to die if a monster attacked because I have no self-preservation and they think I have no training,” Gabriel chuckled, amused by their opinions. “No,…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Gabriel Mai

Gabriel smiled softly. “Take a step closer to the tree before you throw again, it should properly rotate and lodge in the tree that way,” He took the hatchet and lodged it perfectly in the tree. He retrieved it for Lucy before speaking again. “I’ve seen such games at festivals. I never participated, though I have been…[Read more]