Felicity

@freedomwriter76 @elishavet-pidyon  @godlyfantasy12

Almarrin

The elf smiled. “Êl síla erin lû e-govaned vîn, Dolunay, Nyx. I am Inglor Avelorion, and this is my friend Almarrin Woden.”

Almarrin bowed, but his attention was moving on. “Classes, Inglor.”

“Brother,” Inglor clamped a hand on his arm. “Are these your manners?”

“I bowe…[Read more]

@starofthenorth

I like it! That does give me e bit of background.

@starofthenorth

I’m so sorry I’m just now responding😢😬. I accidentally refreshed the page about 5 times🤦🏻‍♀️😂. I think I know this response by heart now😂😅🤦🏻‍♀️.

Thank you! 😊. Yes, I’m excited.

1. Oh cool! Bettas are so pretty. But, yeah, they can be mean. If I get a betta, it’s gonna be in its own tank. I just looked up the clown pleco, and the…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings @koshka @felicity @madelyn @theloonyone @elishavet-pidyon @godlyfantasy12 @whalekeeper

Here is another scene I wrote. This is after Christopher and Briana have been captured and have escaped. Christopher was fighting off a guard and told Briana to run. They just met again.

“I see you’re angry at me for doing what you told me…

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That’s up to you of course.

or maybe after class? so they don’t have to worry about teachers XD and of course that’s up to u.

@arien

I really like it! I love the character’s immediately, and want to know what happens next! 😀

The only thing I might suggest is just making it a little longer, for a first chapter it was pretty short. That’s just me though, I like to describe things a lot, therefore my chapters are a bit long. A lot of the description you used of the mc’s…[Read more]

Also…has Paxton met Jakob yet? I mean they did in passing I believe…

Ik he hasn’t met Reuben! Both our quiet boys (tho mine legit doesn’t talk rn XD) OH AND THEY BOTH PAINT 😍 Paxton will probably see the paint splatters and be intrigued, but of course be a bit wary approaching him…

hey maybe Jakob, Wolfgang and Reuben could have the same…[Read more]

@mineralizedwritings

I like your ideas!

I think Briana is trying to prove that she’s not useless. She was brought up in an army fort, and her mother died when Briana was ten. (Briana has no sisters) So she’s always held the strain of being “the girl” in a fort–no doubt doing housekeeping duties and the like. And she doesn’t like that.

So…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 ahh Erich, I luv u lol!! But don’t go getting into trouble!! Tho…I feel like that’s where we’re heading!!

@elishavet-pidyon u on and want to RP with Reúven and them meeting Lyn and Grimm?

I’m finally on for a while!

@koshka @wilder-w @keilah-h

@madelyn

Aw thanks!!

I love to see the build-up of emotion in Christopher’s body language before he snaps at her.

I agree. I love body language lol. 🙂

Also, I think it’d really add to the heartbreak of the scene if you included an undercurrent of pain, of the awareness they both have that they’re breaking the relationship they had. Even thoug…

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@freedomwriter76 AGGGGHHHH THE SUSPENSSSEEEEEE 😫😫😫😫

@freedomwriter76 EZRAAAA YESSS!!! And if he found out what just happened to poor Paxton he’d really be mad!

@koshka agh I love him!

Luna

Sister?

Luna’s smile grew. She giggled at the words. She didn’t have any siblings, though she’d always wanted one. Many of the adults and elders of her commune tended to call her Little Sister, or youngling. Little one. Little elf. A variety of sweet nicknames they’d given her over the years…

But, it was curious h…[Read more]

@starofthenorth

Lol, I was so focused on intitail thought I forgot to say how good it was! Also, it makes so much more sense with christopher having anxiety, I can really feel for him more with knowing that. Also I think this is going to turn out really cute 😀

It was really good, and like I’d love to read more. 😁 Love the tension, but like how…[Read more]

@starofthenorth

Heyooo

Everybody else said so many things that there’s not much left for me to say XD

First, great job with the intensity of the scene!!! 😀 😀 😀

As far as ideas to make it better, I love to see the build-up of emotion in Christopher’s body language before he snaps at her. I can see at the first little bit that he’s trying to…[Read more]

@starofthenorth

You can quote someone by copying what he or she says into the reply box, then selecting it and hitting the ” symbol in the left corner (after the bold and italics symbols)

Just testing 😁😂

lol thanks!

@madelyn

Thank you. 😉

Hey, that’s really helpful! Can’t wait till I’m a wise jester (at least I’m wise, even if I am a goof)

I trust your Thanksgiving was amazing and the turkey did not shoot out of the oven (look up the poem “The Turkey Shot Out of the Oven”) lol

@starofthenorth

Congrats on your upgrade 😉 😉 😉

Here, someone posted this once and I saved it for future reference…

• Your first post, you are a Bumbling Henchman
• 20 posts, you become a Charismatic Rebel
• 50 posts: Wise Jester
• 100 posts: Loyal Sidekick
• 300 posts: Knight in Shining Armor
• 1000 posts: Eccentric Mentor
• 2000 posts:…

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@freedomwriter76

Go pound em, Ezra!!!!

@freedomwriter76 @elishavet-pidyon  @godlyfantasy12

Yes, the Alven have pointed ears, but they’re regular size. (Luna is adorable)

Inglor

Most of the students here walked in shadow as if fear itself lurked in the corners. They also gave Almarrin and him a wide berth. He frowned, the dance in his step diminishing.

Then a smile, one bright,…[Read more]