Elfwing

@joelle-stone

cool cool! okay! I still like it though 🙂

lol that must’ve been fun! It’s an epic movie.

No, actually, I don’t speak french. Though it is a beautiful sounding language. It’s more Ontario and Quebec that speak french, not so much the prairie provinces. I am learning Dutch, though!

Oh, sorry Lindir is in the movie, he’s the guy…[Read more]

@abigail-m

Thanks!

mwahaha, I love griffons, and I have created a general personality of dislike towards firebirds and also general orneriness and they decide if they like the humans, and will take them, not the other way round. XD

I like writing in the omniscient POV as well since I have at least 3 side plots going on at once haha.

that…[Read more]

@joelle-stone

thanks! oh, by the way, I love your profile picture!!

The quote is from Spirit: Stallion of the Cimerron one of my favorite movies.

Yeah, life is crazy here too, we happen to be moving halfway across Canada, from Alberta to Nova Scotia. XD

Yes! I wish they would have put Gildor in there; he’s so cool, and instead, they have…[Read more]

@gracie-j

oh man! that is epic! Filled with threat and mystery and danger and possible adrenaline rush for fleeing for your life *says all this in one breath and then finally breathes in *, oh… and maybe even romance? Wild guess since you said you love romance hehehe XD

@lydia-s

you’re is so funny! I love it! XD

@r-m-archer

Thanks, it was cool!

that was fun to see people’s writing styles, I mean, it’s not so evident since it’s one sentence and mostly dialogue, but still, it was fun!

@abigail-m

Hi!!!

I like Elfwing, but either one is fine!

Thanks! I have relatives with the last name Griffin, which was partly my inspiration for the inclusion of the creatures in my fantasy novels. what is your WIP about? or is it top secret? *looks around suspiciously

And YES that movie is EPIC!!! it is by far my favorite movie that I…[Read more]

@iluvhim18

hahaha! That’s funny! We’ll have to do it again after everyone else is done, yes.

so I took the liberty of combining all the sentences into a scene. I found it funny, but then again I have a dry sense of humor;

I was relieved that it was a mime instead of a traditional clown, then I wouldn’t have to be caught up in some unfunny joke that he wanted to play on me. She would show everyone that she was more then just a puppet. “…

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@lydia-s

yeah, poor Daphne… alas, Klaiom’s true love must die. XD so sympathetic of me

yeah, well it’s all for the sake of the novel, they do not die in vain, at least XD

yes, you all were very helpful, thanks!

see you around! 🙂

@kathleenramm

okay, I gladly accept! Though it will make absolutely no sense! XD

“I was saving lives, Mythia, and I smacked her lightly with my reins, which I regretted, because she was jumpy for the entire next day!”

@gracie-j

Phew! I am reassured, thank you! I feel more confident about the other ones I’m planning to write lol

I will say that if that kind of proposal appeared in my work it means someone else was writing for me and I will be hunting them down XD

Thanks! yes, I need to work on emotions in scenes to be sure, thanks for the feedback!

@gracie-j

okay so I am trying to figure out a really good way for my male MC to propose to the girl he loves… I wrote the proposal a while ago

*backstory;  Faeda (main character) is an orphan living on an island under attack, and there is literally a war about to explode at any second, so she’s seeing the troop about to leave (she doesn’t…[Read more]

@lydia-s

yes, she’s amazing with writing, truly gifted!

Yah, I wrote that part about a year ago, and I just went back and read it while listening to ‘The Eagles’ from the Return of the King soundtrack, and made myself cry… “why, Daphne? why did I kill youuuuu?” XD

haha no you make total sense! It sounds epic!!! betrayal of a family… oof its…[Read more]

@lydia-s

Yeah, guys crying makes me emotional XD  I haven’t actually seen it in real life very often, but I didn’t think they were sissy for it.

Lol yessss a good scene with people crying adds sympathy to the hurting character, totally. Someone I know is writing an novel, and the MC’s best friend said, “Crying isn’t weak. Or at least… I hope…[Read more]

@anika123

So I also read your chapters you posted, and I find the plot very intriguing!! It’s well made as far as the actual story, I found it exciting and curiosity invoking!

for improving the sentence structure, I would say to add more motion to the characters, wide eyes can be used for surprise or fear, and raised eyebrow for skepticism, gasp…[Read more]

@iluvhim18

oh ok cool

like i said i don’t know much about the story

glad to be of assistance!

@iluvhim18

what if she abdicates being queen? is she under 18? you could do where if they’re under 18 a lord protector can rule in the young monarch’s stead? This has happened in European countries with child monarchs…

idk if that is helpful or not…