Beth

@trailblazer

I love the story! I agree with @hybridlore that it wasn’t too summary-y but it would be nice to see how the interaction with Lillian Sara and Jennie went.

I love the dancing scene! I love Libbie and Albert, they’re so cute together! (It’s fine if that’s not what you’re going for but I just like “shipping” people in my stories and…[Read more]

@trailblazer @esther-c @acancello @freedomwriter76 @mineralizedwritings @grcr

Ottoline

She sighed with relief as Lane looked away from her scars and turned his attention to the girl in the doorway. But she knew it was only a matter of time before they would get brought up.

“Oh, no, it’s not my statue, or my house even…” the bewildered girl…[Read more]

@grcr I love it!!!

Ottoline

“Do not worry,” Amir turned his warm eyes to the trembling boy. “She only shoots deer. Lucky for you.” Lane nodded.

“It’s not my statue,” Ottoline scoffed, rolling her eyes. “I couldn’t care less if you broke it or not.” Lane sighed with relief, brushing the hair out of his eyes.

“Just do not scare her, or she might…[Read more]

@grcr

yep! lol

@grcr @acancello @mineralizedwritings @freedomwriter76 @esther-c

Ottoline

She stepped inside the building, and stopped dead in her tracks.

“What is this place?” she asked in awe. Brightly colored streamers fluttered from the ceiling, multicolored lights lit up the room, and the stone floor shone. A strange kind of music filled the room. She…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

I totally understand your concern.

I’d say that in the first chapter that’s in his POV, showcase his positive character traits, but also give us a glimpse into his internal conflict so we see that he isn’t as perfect as he seems on the outside. Slowly revealing his backstory like you said you’d do will also help readers start t…[Read more]

@loopylin

NOOOOOooooo not again 😓

Btw, your signature is hilarious 😂 I love it.

@whalekeeper @everyone

I’m late, but everyone had such good points on this! I love reading about this topic, since that’s something I think about a lot.

Tbh, a lot of my worlds are really similar to each other, and so I haven’t really experimented with this a lot, although it would be interesting to try different things. I usually try to focus…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

I really like that scene! Their brother dynamic is so good XD

@acancello

Gotcha! 😁 Tell your brother I said happy birthday! I know, XD it is weird.

Happy first day of fall everyone!!

@savannah_grace2009 @freedomwriter76 @acancello @mineralizedwritings @trailblazer @grcr

Ok! I finally got it! Here ya are!

(And fyi, so far I’ve decided that the language they speak in Amir’s country is Farsi, or something very close to it, so if he talks in a different language, that’s what it is.)

(Oh, and I’m assuming we decided on the bal…[Read more]

@jonas

Ok cool!

@jonas

Maybe.

@jonas

No, I meant my submission to the forum. I’ve never seen the moderation feature before. If you want, you can contact them to see if it got lost or is just being moderated still.

@jonas

Ok, but you COULD.

No it doesn’t have anything to do with Clydak.

Ok.

Also, I would wait a bit before reposting.  My submission took at least a week to process. And the forum directors have a lot of other stuff  to manage.

@jonas

That sounds great so far! Question: ‘magical abilities’ is pretty vague. Can you  expand on what the swords can do? How is it related to Arcweaving?

This sounds very useful for planetary travel, too.

WAIT, does this somehow have anything  to do with Clydak??

@freedomwriter76

I’m so excited!!!!

@jonas

That is correct. Conversation over.

@jonas

Yes 😁

And Mere Christianity was on the schedule, yes, but due to a variety of events, we decided to wait until next term.

@fernweh_grace

I posted from my phone, but apparently it lost its way *facepalm*

Anyway, hello! I’m Jonas Cloaked Mystery’s (younger and infinitely more mature) sister. You can call me Bridget, or HighScribe. I love literally EVERY SINGLE one of those authors you mentioned, and the books, too (except for Mere Christianity and Phantastees, which…[Read more]