@savannah_grace2009
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I didn’t realize I put this in the wrong forum hahaha, I meant to put it in the Chat Chat
ooops XD
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(the real ones will know)Are any of you guys on instagram?? if so you should let me know so I can follow you!
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(the real ones will know)I’m not gonna make the youtube one because it’s too much work hahaha
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(the real ones will know)@whalekeeper @theducktator @esther-c
Umm guys I need some help.
I think my story has outgrown all the powers and stuff. it just makes it complicated!!
The more I read books nowadays there are a LOT of books out there similar to mine. Like, there are all the rich people with powers, and they have control over the people who don’t have powers. And somehow a girl without powers always overthrows the rich people without powers and saves her people. which is how my story kind of goes.
Do you think it would be good to have the only people with powers be the Pythonos? I would still keep the different races, but just make it so everyone didn’t have powers. (It’s also really hard to write about people with powers without making it really cringe and cliche.) Everyone would still dislike the Paynes. And the Pythonos would still have powers.
Actually it might make it hit harder when the Pythonos come and take over, because nobody else has powers.
What do you think? I am gonna miss the powers because they were so fun! But I’m just trying to figure out how to make my book less cliche lol
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GUYSSSS
I found a song that is like the theme song of my Andromeda book
It’s called Commodity by Remedy Drive!! It fits sooo well
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(the real ones will know)Guys I have failed XD
I fell off the face of the earth again!! I will post the links either today or tomorrow for sure hahaha I’m so sorry for the delay!!!
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(the real ones will know)sup dawgs
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(the real ones will know)Thank you!!!
I like it because it makes sense–they don’t want a child ruling their country and it’s something that I haven’t seen a lot of fantasy books incorporate.
I’m still fleshing out how Wadsat connects to all of it. I’m thinking that maybe some Paynes are so poor that they have to sell themselves into slavery to pay the bills, and some come to Andromeda to find work.
In this new draft, I’m adding a twist–Paynes aren’t the only ones that are poor. Some Andromedans are poor as well, but Paynes are the new immigrants that can be exploited by the rich.
Also–I’m changing something else too. The Paynes are now a seperate race, and my book won’t mention humans at all. They’re simply a race of people that don’t have powers, not a mix of Andromedan and human.
There’s several reasons why I did this. I’ve realized that the conflict where literally everybody hates Paynes seems a little extreme and doesn’t make a lot of sense, plus it’s very cliche and a lot of other fantasy books have this setup where the powerful people HATE the people without powers, and the people without powers are being exterminated or worked to death. I want to make it so that other non-Paynes struggle too. I just feel like it makes a lot more sense that way.
Thank you! I’ve been working pretty hard on the setup and worldbuilding. Recently I’ve read a couple fantasy books that quite frankly belong in the trash. The worldbuilding was horrible, the characters were so annoying and it inspired me to write better than that XD
Thanks for the encouragement!!!
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(the real ones will know)Also to clarify, I’m working on figuring out wars for Outcry (my main book with Sef and Lilitu and all them). What I just posted was for that book and NOT a new one. Sorry if that was confusing!
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(the real ones will know)Okay, so I have some new ideas.
First I’m going to tell you about each government and political settings and then explain what my ideas are.
Andromeda
They’re set up similar to an oligarchy, like each race (Azer, Aquino, Estrello, and Pitt) send representatives to Lir and they meet to discuss rules. Often, the representatives’ families are very rich and powerful. So the laws made are more geared towards the rich. Similar to the late 1800s, the enonomy is very competitive, and there’s several very rich people with monopolies that try to control the market. Poor people are exploited and have low wages and poor working conditions.
Wadsat
Wadsat is where the Paynes come from. Some Paynes travel to Andromeda to find work, and since Paynes are new immigrants, then the Andromedans hire them as servants for low wages. Paynes work in factories as well. In previous years, Paynes were kidnapped and sold into slavery. Although that was years ago, racism is still very real and present. However now, Paynes are seen as a way for the rich people to produce merchandise for cheap, since they don’t feel guilty about paying Paynes less.
Wadsat has a democracy. They have a president and Paynes vote, like the US.
Erstonia
Erstonia is a monarchy. There is a king and a royal family, surrounded by a court of nobles and advisors.
The war:
Marcurious’s Father, King Robick is a good man and king (yes, I just changed that recently. I’m changing Marcurious’s backstory a lot!!!) however, after the Queen got sick and died, the king went off the deep end. He started drinking and being lax in his duties, and the stress was getting to him. His people began to question his competence and started to think maybe he shouldn’t be king anymore.
Anyways, then King Robick dies, and his younger brother Koen takes the throne (because in Erstonia, if the king dies and his son isn’t 21 yet, the court votes on which of the king’s brothers will rule next. When the brother dies, the crown passes to the prince.). Koen is a bad man, he’s very impulsive and is power hungry. He wants to invade Andromeda, because Andromeda has resources like iron, salt, oil, and coal that Erstonia doesn’t have.
Koen wants to just invade, but the court advises against it. Andromeda is very rich, and they have a good military, and Andromeda is separated from Erstonia by water, so it would not be very smart to just take ships and invade like that. Plus, Andromeda and Erstonia have fought before in the last hundred years, and the last war was very costly. War is expensive, so both countries wanted to avoid the war.
Andromeda fears getting into a war with Erstonia, but they’re worried that if they sell Erstonia their resources, they will become to powerful. Anyways, Andromeda and Erstonia arrange a meeting in Lir, Andromeda so that they can figure out how to negotiate without starting a war.
The Pythonos have wanted to take over Andromeda for a long time, and as tensions rise between the two countries they take a chance.
There’s a group of Paynes and poor races that are a terrorist group, and they target the rich families and the delegates. They’re tired of the way the government is run. The Pythonos hire the group to cause a commotion at the meeting. They end up sneaking in and poisoning the Azer delegate, and he dies mid-meeting. Everything erupts in chaos. The Andromedans are convinced that the Erstonians poisoned the delegate, and fighting starts.
The king escapes, but Marcurious and Livia (Livia’s dad is now the Aquino delegate) are taken as hostages by the terrorist group, because it’s not enough for the terrorists to get paid by the Pythonos. They want some spare cash out of it.
This is how the war starts, and how Marcurious and Livia meet.
What do you think?
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I made a board for Marky Boy lol
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That sounds so fun!!!
Yeah, we’re about 10 hours from Lakeside. Montana is pretty big hahaha
Wow that’s crazy that you know lots of people that do YWAM! I only know one XDXD and that’s because she’s my cousin…most people in the area don’t even know what that is hahaha and we have a base in our state! I hadn’t even really heard of YWAM until this September lol
I have a youth group, but it’s complicated…I don’t really enjoy going, and it all got weird when my mom passed away. I have a lot of bitterness and hard feelings associated with my youth group, it feels like everyone kind of distanced themselves from me. None of the kids know what to say to me and they have such different lives, I don’t feel like I can talk to them anymore at all. Honestly the youth group feels a little shallow and fake.
I know it’s not their fault, but I just haven’t felt ready to go back. And I am perfectly okay with that haha…it’s very hard not to see them as shallow and fake. Several act like Christians but don’t live it outside of youth group, and it never felt that uplifting to go there. It didn’t challenge me in my faith at all, and I never felt that connected. It was kind of clique-y.
Maybe someday I’ll feel like going again but as of now I just feel like I’d just kind of shut people out and be kind of angry and crabby the whole time. It’s no one’s fault and I’m not holding a grudge, but I think it’s just because of losing my mom. I have no idea if that makes any sense but yeah…
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