Liberty

@loopylin

Cute!

Dragon^2  XD

The dragon gives me so. Many. Questions. (How would a creature like that swallow? What happens when it has to yawn? Sneeze? Cough? Can it eat with both mouths?)

@hybridlore

Yeah. That’ll do it.

@ellette-giselle

I knoww. It does seem to work with his backstory, though. Poor guy. Ten years in slavery…

@hybridlore

Hmm. Interesting.

Yes, he does have a funny personality. He’s slightly messed up tho. Like, weirdly morbid and also cheerful in a odd mix.

@ellette-giselle

I like him! He has a funny personality. I think he might become a Christian eventually.

@loopylin @raxforge

Sypher

“Super powers?” He frowned, his eyes falling to the desk in front of him. Tiny water droplets crowded together giving the wood a bubbled, speckledy look. Syph shooed them away.

“Super powers. I like that, but…” His brother’s voice, angry and scared, echoed from a not distant enough memory. “No, I’m a water Sprite.…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Haha! Yes, Ian is going to be trouble. In fact, he’s going to _______________

What do you think of Albee? (btw, I love that I gave him a big long name. 😂 It’s just so funny to me, because it totally doesn’t fit him.)

@ellette-giselle

Great section!! It seemed pretty realistic. Oof, Ian’s going to be trouble 😬

I can’t wait for the next one!

@theshadow

I’ve written a handful of contemporary (not finished them though lol), and I’m by no means an expert in this field, but I’d say it really comes down to adding conflict, even if it’s as simple as a strained relationship with a family member. I don’t know your characters, and I’ve also never read The Penderwicks so it’s hard to know h…[Read more]

@raxforge    @theducktator

He reached for his knife.

He’s gonna die.

Don’t stab already dead men. It doesn’t pay off. Ask Gimli

@hybridlore  @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

For anyone interested in the song that I showed part of, here it is:

(It’s a medieval song from the Underground Church.)

@hybridlore  @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

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Leon looked at the shafts of sunlight moving across the floor of the hold as the ship rocked up and down in the waves. He and Rolf had been held captive down here for over two weeks. The ship had come to a stop at two other places, and they h…

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@theducktator

Thank you! 🥰

@esther-c

Thanks!! 🤗

@hybridlore

Praying for you!! 🙏🏻 💕

@hybridlore
@keilah-h

okay!! Thanks for the suggestions!! I’ll rework a few scenes.

@liberty

oh man. I have had some of the WORST sprains ever!! One took almost two months to heal!
Roland’s is not as severe, and he has been off of it for four days and as you can see he starts limping when they travel again.

Oooh! I love Dian!

you just love sailor characters. 😝

Is that why you like him? Or for other reasons too?

As for what w…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Yeah, that would be a cool scene! I’ll have to try to see if I can fit something like that into the story.

@theshadow

Okay, great! 😊

@godlyfantasy12

Ohhh, I’m kind of in a similar position as I’m writing the second draft of a WIP. I’m keeping some scenes, shuffling some around, and adding new ones. It’s been a fun juggling act 🥴😂

I don’t know how much of a plotter you are, but having a big picture idea of your plot is going to be super helpful. You don’t necessarily…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Sorry, didn’t get tagged yesterday. I think Linus has a valid concern about the scene with Julian and Dian, but moving the scene where Julian shares the Gospel with him to a day or so later would fix it, in my opinion.

I think it was nice to see Julian argue with God a little bit. It’s slightly a different reaction than you…[Read more]