Evelyn

@iluvhim18

Hmm… Does she have to be a princess in order to be at the tournament? If so, perhaps her coronation got put on hold for some reason. Is there a required mourning period for the heir to the throne before they take the crown? Was there some trouble at the palace? Perhaps a jealous upstart or a plot to kill her required her to flee from…[Read more]

@lewilliams

Hey, so glad you joined us! 😀

Oh, I hope you can write one someday! They’re so much fun… XD Seriously, if I can create something like some of the IRL proposals I’ve heard, I will be so happy!

So, my favorite proposal scene is pretty long, so I’m going to pare it down a bit. I’ll just skip to where things start moving along. ;)…[Read more]

@iluvhim18

(Wow, I’m honored to have been the first to do it!)

Yeah, it would be rather odd for a 16-year-old to propose, wouldn’t it? lol But I’m so happy that you’re nearing the first one you’ll write! They’re so much fun… XD

@gracie-j

Yay, hello! Glad you popped over.

I have to admit I do love a good Mr. Darcy-type character. And though…[Read more]

@lydia-s

Yeah, guys crying makes me emotional XD  I haven’t actually seen it in real life very often, but I didn’t think they were sissy for it.

Lol yessss a good scene with people crying adds sympathy to the hurting character, totally. Someone I know is writing an novel, and the MC’s best friend said, “Crying isn’t weak. Or at least… I hope…[Read more]

@devastate-lasting

That’s so cool!

@elfwing

*sighs happily again* Oh my… Teary, emotional scenes with men in them? You have seriously just described one of my all-time favorite scenes to write. XD

As Elizabeth and JC said, I don’t think it weakens the manliness of a man to show him crying. I know I enjoy a good emotional scene involving guys… 😛 Anyway, I feel like that…[Read more]

@lewilliams

Well, thank you. <3 And I bet it was so exciting to finish! 😀

Thank you so much! That was super helpful. 🙂

@elanor

She looks gorgeous! I go to a barn in the summer, and my equine bestie is a bay Thoroughbred. She’s super pretty and super sweet. 😉 Was your horse a Paint?

Ah, Tolkien, the master storyteller. He ranks high among my own personal favorites, partly because of how gifted he was. I haven’t heard of the other two authors you mentioned before…[Read more]

@anika123

So I also read your chapters you posted, and I find the plot very intriguing!! It’s well made as far as the actual story, I found it exciting and curiosity invoking!

for improving the sentence structure, I would say to add more motion to the characters, wide eyes can be used for surprise or fear, and raised eyebrow for skepticism, gasp…[Read more]

@iluvhim18

oh ok cool

like i said i don’t know much about the story

glad to be of assistance!

@iluvhim18

what if she abdicates being queen? is she under 18? you could do where if they’re under 18 a lord protector can rule in the young monarch’s stead? This has happened in European countries with child monarchs…

idk if that is helpful or not…

@beth-darlene

That’s awesome! 😀

@devastate-lasting

ok cool!

yes… she’s part Silyan, and then she has Brennavaian, Elphin, Star-Eye, Phelanian, Bardan and Peluvaro in her bloodline too.  she’s 5’4″, ash-blonde hair and eyes that shift colors and is a little tigress when you make her mad, which is a bad idea, since she has Bardan (griffin morpher) in her, and Peluvaro (owl…[Read more]

@elfwing Whoa, that sounds amazing! Reminds me vaguely of this movie I once watched called Maquia…

Is your main character part of the Silyans?

@ariel-f Ah, I’ve been meaning to read some Star Wars books. I have, mainly, one that’s been sitting by my couch for years. The movie adaptions are really good though.

Oh, you should try it sometime! It’s quite good!

Ah, unfortunately I am not talented enough to write such a beautiful lyric. It’s a translation from Kenshi Yonezu’s “Campanella”,…[Read more]

@iluvhim18

Yeah tears are odd things…

Haha yeah i do the same, and I’m 17 lol,

well, thanks everybody! I have figured it out i think! 🙂

@iluvhim18

this is true about sadness; and a good reminder for not making writing too dramatic

And yeah it totally depends on the person! I have been starting to boycott making characters cry with sad things, usually I use things like them going tense, “eyes dulling”, “looking weary”, “jaw clenched”, etc… but I have those heartbroken scenes…[Read more]

@joy-caroline

yes, I have a timeline of close to thirty years in the series right now, with gaps of up to ten years between some of them.