Tobias Hrothgar

@daisy-torres

Ooo, I LOVE this!!! ❤  It was funny in the beginning and really intense at the end, which I love!  And I like Tessa’s character, and of course, the antique roadshow guy.  Overall, it was really well written and I can’t wait to read the next chapter!! (which might be awhile because I’m pretty busy today, so….)  Thanks for sha…[Read more]

@kathleenramm

Ooo, fun idea!!  Let’s see…  None of my characters in Lioness are very fun/nice/not-scarred (heh heh 😬), so I’d probably be someone from As Dark As Mist and Shadow.  I think I’d be Murin, because she’s an awesome spy with an awesome sidekick who lives in an awesome place with an awesome attitude.  And she rides horses all the ti…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Congrats!!

Well, I’m still trying to balance two writing projects, as well as alpha-reading for Kayleigh.  My entire grade at my school got sent home because of a COVID case, so I have plenty of time on my hands now, lol!!  I’m not very far into either of my WIPs (about two chapters each), but since I have the time, I’ll p…[Read more]

@writerlexi1216

I love this sooo much!!!  Great job, Lexi!!! 🎉  To answer your questions,

1)  I really like Caira’s character, especially her internal monologue!!

2)  Yes, I would!!!  I really love the idea of the “Prodigy” and Deek… I mean, what else is there to say?

3)  I think the pacing is great!!

Great job!!!!! 💛

@writerlexi1216

Hey Lexi!!  I’m kinda late, but I’ll read this in a minute and give you some feedback soon!!  Super excited!!!!  Three cheers for being brave!!!!!!!!!!!!!! 🎊🎉😉

@e-k-seaver

Hey Em!!  I loved your story!!  Sooo good!!  I don’t really have many critiques, just watch out for some repetitive words.  And maybe give Celeste a stronger goal/personality trait?  I felt like I was reading from Melia’s POV a lot of the time (which wasn’t necessarily a bad thing 😉) cause Celeste isn’t a bold character.  I say this…[Read more]

@daisy-torres

Heyo!!!  Ooo YAY!!!  I love the title…

Oh. my. gosh.  I ADORE this simile sooo much!!!

Aaahh, my eyes are watering already!! 😢

You did it again–girl, you got skills!! 😃

*cue jaw drop*

Maybe instead of “this child” again, you could write “Bridgett”?  there was a little repetitiveness.  So sad!…[Read more]

…and one for Emiyn and her brother, Iszac: (i’m running out of ideas, people–they’re just so fun to make!!! 😂)

@devastate-lasting

thanks!!  haha? 😂  I didn’t know it was a unisex name… 🤔

@gracie-j

thanks!!

Here’s one for Emiyn and her dad:

Here’s one for the POVs (who are sisters), Aven and Emiyn:

@gracie-j, @devastate-lasting, @e-k-seaver, @daisy-torres, @scripter-of-kingdoms, @abigail-m, @issawriter7, @mkfairygirl, @writerlexi1216, @jenwriter17, @godlyfantasy12, @hallie-jean, @ribbonash, @wyn-rose

Hey everyone!!  I just want to thank you all for your tips/input/reading/offering-to-read/etc. and I want you to know how much I appreciate…[Read more]

for those of you who read my chapter, I changed Midhael’s name to Malia, because the original one was amazing in my twelve-year old head, but really hard to pronounce, lol!!

So this one is Malia’s:

Beautiful collages everyone!!!!!!!!!!

Here’s one for Aven’s BFF, Grove:

And her step-sister, Aven:

Here’s the collage for my MC, Emiyn:

@wyn-rose

Hey Wyn!!  Ooo, I’m so glad that you like Emiyn!!! Yes, I agree about the transition.  I didn’t really notice that, haha (that’s what y’all are for, right? 😜).  Also, I’m really glad you like the tone!  Yep, it’s my old friend show-don’t-tell again… we have a long history, lol!  And I totally get that about flashbacks instead of exp…[Read more]

@jodi-maile

(fyi, i don’t know why i tagged myself earlier–i do that when i’m thinking about two things at once, lol)

Nice!!  That’s really cool!

Yep, I get that.  I was like that for A LONG time, but I recently started planning and now it works better for me.  (interestingly, because my life choices are very different LOL…[Read more]