Elishavet Elroi

@theshadow

I really like this chapter! Everything critical I was going to say @hybridlore already covered.

I really enjoy these characters. I like how Jack sticks up for his sister, and I’m eager to find out what happens and where Elina got her scar!

make sure to keep tagging me because I’m really enjoying this.

and those girls giving her a h…[Read more]

@theshadow

Fantastic! I’m so excited to read what you wrote!

@the_lost-journal

The rules are that you write at least 500 words, and when the deadline day comes, you post your story here.

Micah 7:8 Do not rejoice over me, my enemy; when I fall, I will arise. When I sit in darkness, the Lord WILL be a light to me.

No idea what that means…

Perhaps, I can share why I love this verse so much:

This verse is Is…[Read more]

@hybridlore

It looks great! This was a cool idea. I think you did a good job inserting a theme into such a tiny paragraph. Out of curiosity, how much do you have left in the word count?

Thanks!! Oh yes, that was so hard! I was going to keep it lighthearted and goofy, and then I was like, Hold on. And tried something a little different. 😛

Ummm… a…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

i really love the direction.

character development seems good and solid. But it’s hard to know that from just reading an outline.

again, it all depends on how you play it, but I was feeling Eustace and dragon change more than Kalmar and wolf. (Even though it is a wolf) I think you’re fine and should go for it. I can let you…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

I like this much better. I feel more comfortable, but it also plays into the allegory style better. (At least  in my opinion)

my only suggestion (besides fine combing because there were a few typos) is old be this paragraph.

I do not know what Alan thought as he used the spell, so instead of telling you that, let’s say he in…

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@koshka

Great! I’m looking forward to it!

@liberty

That gives me time. =) I sort of forgot too, but the story is nearly finished anyway.

@linus-smallprint   @keilah-h

thank you both for the sympathy and prayers!!

Great timing!

thank you!! I was proud of that one. 😂

oh dear! I hope you end up liking Roland then. 😅

I promise it was completely coincidental.
this time.

@esther-c

Awesome!

@keilah-h

Sure thing.

@calyhuge Yes…I think that applies to me even…I’ve done that before, and it doesn’t go well.

@grcr

No worries!! :))

@elishavet-pidyon

Lol! Frfr 🤣

@liberty

sounds great!! Tysm!!

@liberty @keilah-h

Thanks ladies!! I will definitely consider that!

@theducktator

Thank you!! Yes, I love it too!

@ellette-giselle @raxforge @esther-c @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @theshadow @keilah_h @koshka @freed_and_redeemed trailblazer @whalekeeper @theducktator @elishavet_pidyon @power @jonas

Please pardon me, everyone…I can’t believe I forgot about the deadline!!!!! So sorry about that…

Well, it looks like all things work together for good since Esthe…[Read more]

@hybridlore @ellette-giselle @raxforge @esther-c @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @theshadow @keilah-h

The others:@power  @calyhuge  @whalekeeper   @theducktator  @elishavet-pidyon @the_lost-journal  @trailblazer  @jonas @beth-torres @euodia-vision @thearcaneaxiom @smiley  @freed_and_redeemed @loopylin @felicity  @savannah_grace2009  @koshka

Please pard…[Read more]

@esther-c @keilah-h

Would some more time help?

Oh, I forgot to tag you:

@esther-c

A neat and sweet story! When I first read it, it seemed your writing was in a different time zone/tense than the italicized beginning. To me, it seemed like the narrative suddenly switched to more present tense…like the character was actually experiencing everything instead of writing it after it had already happened.

Maybe adding some past…[Read more]