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freedom replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 5 months ago
@esther-c @keilah-h @ellette-giselle @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @godlyfantasy12 (btw, I’ve been LOVING the scenes you’ve been posting, girl🤩) @rae @theducktator @grcr @anyone-else-idk-lol
Y’all want a Riker scene for Book #3? 🫣
well here it is anyway (part of it at least)
What did Leon know?
As far as Riker knew, Leon had a good, loving…
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Koshka replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
I also liked the way Leon realizes he’s dying, and that he doesn’t have much time left to work here. The urgency that comes over his actions was real to me.
And then the whole “you’re crazy but I still kinda admire your attitude” thing was funny, but unfortunately real.
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
By the way, in The War to End All Wars, the guy actually gave his life to the other man. It was so sad…the story is about these American soldiers who are captured by the Japanese.
I don’t remember all the details, but one of the prisoners was caught doing something…and he and two other men were going to be executed. But the…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
So, this is really cazy because I never thought this scene was one of my best!! 😂
It’s a stunning scene! I LOVE it!!
I’m so happy! I posted it and I was like, “Liberty’s gonna love this!!!”
You were so right!
So, what do you think of Kareem and his story???!
I really like him, and he’s very intriguing. He sounds like a charact…[Read more]
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Koshka replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
Okay. XD
- It directly applied to today. Ian was hopeless. Utterly hopeless. And there really wasn’t anything better than Heaven itself to offer him. Most people today are already living in hell. They need to know heaven is real.
- We saw that suicide attempt coming, even though you didn’t spell that out. And then you thwarted a…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
I’VE BEEN WAITING FOR YOU TO READ THIS SECTION!!!!!!!!!
I’m so happy! I posted it and I was like, “Liberty’s gonna love this!!!”
Haha!!! I’m so glad I threw you a loop!!
Good! I’m glad you were scared for him! 😂
I’m so HAPPY!!!!!!!
So, this is really cazy because I never thought this scene was one of my best!!…[Read more]
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Liberty replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
ROLF!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Oh my gosh, Ellette!! I literally cried happy tears when I read that!!!
WOW oh WOW!!!!!!
I’m SO happy! This entire section was phenomenal!!! The part when Leon saves Ian…when Leon…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
Oh my word!! 😂
Huh, this was never one of my best scenes in my mind. That’s funny how that does that. 🤣
Also, Ian’s conversion was one of my favorites to date for a number of reasons.
Ooooo!!! TELL ME!!
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Koshka replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
Where did you come from?!?! 😂
*Wiggles fingers mysteriously* Narnia…
I wonder what is hooking everyone so much about this section?! Why do y’all like it so much?
I guess it felt well balanced to me, better than some of the others. You did more show than tell; your characters were interacting with each other and their own st…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Narrow Path Trilogy – Book II: The Sword in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
I’m a bit missy with the point of view in there,
Messy…. I believe.
Yes. I feel like correcting people’s grammar today.
Maybe I’ve been writing too many Nazi POVs.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 5 months ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Ahhh!!!
Where did you come from?!?! 😂
I wrote a chapter worthy of koshka comments!!!! 🥳
haha! I’m glad you didn’t see him coming.
Ooo, I’m glad you liked it.
I wonder what is hooking everyone so much about this section?! Why do y’all like it so much? 😂
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Koshka replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
It’s Rolf! XD I was expecting someone from Vandalia or somewhere like that, not Rolf.
And yeah. I actually read the chapters in my email to avoid spoiling, although it does mean I often forget to comment.
But oooooo, I liked this chapter. Definitely ready for the next one.
(And I still don’t think this book is darker than the…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Lololol.
Huh, that’s funny. I guess there is a sort of connection there.
I just find the whole idea of his story interesting, and the different ways he has gone about fighting the slave-trade.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
*gaspeth*
CHEATER!!!
🤣
Although, why did he change his name?
Hmm. wouldn’t you like to know.
Wow! Really? Well then, lucky Ian.
btw, what do you think of their new owner, Kareem Omar?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
Did you see it coming that it would be Rolf, or did that catch you by surprise?
Oh what? Now your loyalties have shifted?!! I see. So is Ian the new favorite?
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Flames of Hope Saga Book 3: Land of Shadows in the forum Novel Critique Requests 1 year, 6 months ago
@hybridlore @linus-smallprint @koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @liberty
NEXT SECTION!!
Time passed, and Leon’s wounds began to heal, leaving deep scaring in many places. However, his strength was harder to regain. Without good food, and surviving on only two meals a day, he had already begun to weaken. After the beating and…
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Esther replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 1 year, 6 months ago
No worries! That’s still serious and important and I’ll keep praying 🙏🏻🫶🏻
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 6 months ago
Ooo. Hmmm. I wonder which one is going to have the least people……..
Prob. the top floor.
Rory
Rory looked up as the door opened. Leo stepped out and Rory followed him into the hallway. It was quiet here with no students running about. It seemed… not peaceful. Peaceful was the church. No, this was… stiff. It almost felt…[Read more]
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Koshka replied to the topic Fantasy/Modern School AU RP in the forum General Writing Discussions 1 year, 6 months ago
Leo
The elevator rattled on its assent, nearly drowning out the kid’s quiet words. Leo leaned back against the smooth metal wall an, enjoying the rythmic click of well built machinery even if it was a bit rough. His thumbs hooked into his belt.
“Ah, me too, kid. A title’d probably make it that much harder to be inconspicuous.”…[Read more]
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