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@gwyndalf-the-wise

Oooo I really like that scene! =D

Thank ya!!! 🥰

However I don’t have any feedback/suggestions for you right now, sorry.

You’re good!! 🙂

@katthewriter

NP, I recommend next time sitting on Earth’s shoulder, or better yet, in one of it’s Mother Nature’s pockets. It’s a lot harder to fall from those positions.

@princesachronicle22

Yeah, I’ve considered a few options like that, but my main problem is, that this has already happened in the book. Simply a side characters view point of the scenario. She is assumed to be in leauge with the villains, but this is how I’m showing that she wasn’t at all.

So it was hard for me to state it as a full flash…

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@mineralizedwritings

That sounds like a really good idea!! 😀

You’re welcome!! 🙂

@thearcaneaxiom

Cool! You can be vague if you want. I am curious, but for the sake spoilers, I can be patient.

Alright! 👍

I’m really bad at that, when I’m asked about something about my worldbuilding, even though it would be a spoiler, I just kinda dump it all out. I need to work on being more vague.

Lol XD

Yeah. My siblings don’t like it when…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Ok, yeah that makes sense. Thanks for clarifying! I would love to hear more, because you make it sound man made to a extent, but it’s also clearly a magical or beyond technological structure, so I want to understand the lore you got going now.

That’s a really good question… because I’m still figuring some things out. XD

I know wh…[Read more]

@otherworldlyhistorian

Great idea!!

I really need to worldbuild for Aletheia more. 🤦🏻‍♀️ This will help me finally get to the religions. I have a feeling they’ll be pretty close to real-world religions, since their world is very similar to ours, but I’m not sure yet. 🤔

@freedomwriter76

Have you RPed next for Will/the brothers, or did I miss it?

(I think my last RP is on pg. 348)

@princesachronicle22

Anwyn cringed, knowing that it was the sound of the strange foot coverings these savages chose to wear.

*gasp* Oh my word, is she talking about shoes?? That’s awesome!! XD I felt confused like she was at our human world, but in a good way. I could really see the world through her eyes, so great job!! 😄

As for the t…[Read more]

@acancello

I really like it!! I get a feel for the characters even more than the other way you had it. (For me, getting a feel for the characters is really important. 🙂 ) I loved the description!! 😄 Great job!!

@mineralizedwritings

I think the first one is pretty good, but I think they all need to be more parallel. (This is something I’ve struggled with in naming the books in my trilogy) It always depends on the series in how your naming them. For example, the titles from WFS are exactly parallel. On the Edge of the Dark Sea of Darkness, North! Or Be Ea…[Read more]

@lightoverdarkness6

Aww I love the sunrise part! And sweet Ami…and Ev!!

Yes, I love those two!! 🥰

These two paragraphs were my favorites. You did them so amazingly well! I love how she’s realizing that God created it, and thanking him for it with her joy. ❤❤❤

Thank you so much!!! 😊❤️

I love how Ami views nature like that. (I have another cha…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

I love that!!! I could really see the sunrise in my head, and it was sooo good!!! AMAZING job, girl!!! 💖💖💖💖

Thank you so much!!! 😄😊🥰❤️

That means a lot!! ❤️

@thearcaneaxiom

How well simulated is the Orb’s sunrise? Would it look cartoonishly fake? Like a yellow spot going up and down, or does the Orb make it look far more like t…

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@mineralizedwritings

I love those 😍😍!! Yes, I think it can work. It sounds good! 🙂

@esther-c

Aww I love the sunrise part! And sweet Ami…and Ev!!

Slowly, the sky grew lighter, and the edge of the sun began to peek over the horizon. The dew glistened in its light. It illuminated the sky with hues of rose, peach, and daffodil. The sunlight…

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@princesachronicle22

Wow!!!! That’s SOOO good girl!! I love the detail and how clear it is. 😍😍😍😍

I have that problem too, like smoothly transitioning scenes, especially for memories and flashbacks.

Hmm…well, you could connect the next scene with maybe Anwyn like wincing at the memory, or some kind of reaction.

Or maybe Vermilion could say…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Ah, I would, but my family is about to go out to eat! I’ll try to get one in tonight, if not, then tomorrow. 🙂 Sorry!

@godlyfantasy12

Aww Aaron!! He’s so precious and sweet <3<3

And…that picture…Wow. Just WOW. XD

@freedomwriter76

Happy Birthday!!!

I hope your birthday is AMAZING!!!! 🥳🎉🎈🎊💖

Thank you so much 😊🥰💖!!!!! It has been pretty amazing so far 🥰

Aww Liam!! Riker!! And Cameron!!

XDXD Damien!! He’s so cute.

@godlyfantasy12

im also wondering if Vance is still going to get away with Bren because that group is getting large… but I also am enjoying t…

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