Jaybird

If so, then I believe there is a pretty good precedence to do so.

If not, then we likely shouldn’t do it either.

@stephie

I’ll answer your question with a question.

Did Peter, Philip, Stephen, Paul, Priscilla and Aquila, or ultimately Jesus tell anyone that their religion was false or that their god doesn’t exist?

@savannah_grace2009

Ohhhh my wordddd

Ok that actually makes so much sense. I felt like the story was moving too fast and wasn’t exactly sure how to slow it down.

Thanks for pointing that out!! <33

@grcr

Mmm. If that’s how other books do it, I guess it could work. I looked it up and some people say to extend the vowels and smooth con…

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@savannah_grace2009

Mmmm…that does make sense, I’m just not sure how to do that.

Instead of “hope”, my characters are trying to fix their problems themselves. Which might be a “false hope”, but I don’t really see it as hope. I understand what you mean, I’m just not exactly sure how to do that.

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@hybridlore

🥰

@theducktator

Thanks! It’s my first…and I’m pretty pleased with how it turned out. After thinking about it, though, I think I will add some pictures and edit some of the words. Guy has two sides of himself. and the board doesn’t really show the second side of him…so I’m thinking of updating it.

@elishavet-pidyon

Sorry…I looked for the Susan story but couldn’t find it. I found some others, but none of them compared to the one I read. It was short, but very beautiful, sweet, and Christian.

If you like, I can retell what I remember of the story.

@ellette-giselle

Ooh…we’re getting to see a little bit of Leon’s past!

So wait, are the only people at that place students? I don’t see much mention of villagers during that winter season. If there were villagers, did they move into the University as well?

Is their inn connected to the University? Because in that deep of snow… amid a b…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Me too!

@keilah-h

@hybridlore @elishavet-pidyon @ellette-giselle (In case you were wondering about Guy as well)

Here’s somewhat of a summary:

A man searching for redemption from his past…
 
A band of outlaws trying to make a difference…
 
A land twisted and poisoned by its cold-hearted rulers…
 

Guy is a young man living with a deep inner…

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@whalekeeper

WOW!! Those are awesome!

I don’t use references really. Unless it’s for outfits……….

@keilah-h

Nice!! I like it!

@linus-smallprint

I’ve been taking a swing at these documents.

Left several comments for you.

@linus-smallprint

Oh, so you did actually make them stay. But you’re zooming through this as well in order not to interfere with the pacing. That works.

Phew, glad it works. XD

I’m glad for this scene. Before I read this section, I was hoping your next section would have something like it. We’ve had many scenes of preaching the gospel, peopl…

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@keilah-h

haha! Nope, no electricity.

It’s a mix. The more advanced kingdoms have a middle-ages feel, while the others are more Roman, old Britania, etc.

@keilah-h

I see, that makes sense. XD

 I’m assuming this means your story’s setting is basically an alternate Europe. Is the Common Tongue an English equivalent or something else?

yeah, just about.

Yes, English.

ohhhhh ok! I like the style, it makes it different than the other two

Good. That’s the goal.

@hybridlore

Yes, I am.

@hybridlore

Yay!!! *dance of victory*

😂😂😂 Talk about a rude awakening!

Lolol.

Well, Leon was hit in the face!!

I’m interested in Leon’s backstory more now. He seems to be hiding something from Julian and the others. It will be interesting to see him go back to where he used to fight.

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@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

NEXT SECTION!!!

Imperial Winters are not very exciting, so I’m going to try to cover the whole time in this next section. We’ll see if I can pull it off.

The fifteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
December 2nd
The Empire

Early this morning, I wa…

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@liberty

they showed any arena.

Not my characters in it.

😉

We shall have to see.

@ellette-giselle

Well, your moodboards did show that.

@liberty

 

Well, I’m guessing someone is going to get thrown into a colosseum. You have five guys there…some of them are bound to get hurt…or killed. It just has to happen.

*shocked gasp* what have I ever done to my characters to make you think such dreadful things!

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