Elishavet Elroi

Okay, I just had to give Viktor some movement.

And great job, y’all! I’m enjoying reading these so, do much.

Viktor

Vikor shifted uncomfortably, conscious of the stranger’s questioning gaze.

He didn’t know if it was his hands or something else about him that had piqued the other boy’s… What was it? Suspicion? Amusement? Irritation?

The…[Read more]

Ocran

Ocran moved on down the passage, pausing now and again to wrap his wounded hand.

The filthy little beast.

He stopped at a window to clear his head in the fresh air.

They had escaped, again, and things were becoming strikingly familiar.

The Hawk had flown, and fledglings with him. Not even the news that the Hawk’s wife had died ever…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Sounds great to me!

@godlyfantasy12

Amen!

It’s awful when one’s reply just vanishes.

@godlyfantasy12

Learning languages can be really hard, but they sure do help for name inspiration!

But it doesn’t help when it’s all in the language itself. XD

I feel your pain.

For the reason I am replying to you is tgat I am learning Hebrew.

Now please note that that is present tense! 😉 I’m not very far in.

Sometimes looking up things…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Actually, yes! Here it is.

“@elishavet-pidyon OH BOI OCRAN BE MAAAAAD BRUH XD

Jocelyn & Nyx

”Maybe give me a bit more warning next time before TOSSING ME INTO THE AIR?!”

”Sorry, love.” Jocelyn chuckled. “Though your expression was priceless!”

Nyx pouted. “You could’ve filled me in!”

“Umm, when exactly?” She…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Thanks! This is SO MUCH FUN!!

Ocran

”Lord Governor?! Two titles in one?!” She gasped in apparent admiration, “How amazing is that?! Nyx! Did you hear that!”

The beast wasn’t paying her any mind, of course, and instead was fairly foaming at the mouth in rage.

She stroked it’s head.

“Ah, ah, now Nyx, do be nice! Is that anyw…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Poor November!!

I think the scene is dramatic and highly interesting. Obviously, there is a lot going on in the background. I think the dialogue is very good, and definitely has my curiosity triggered.

(Random, but if you ever want good examples of verbal abuse in books, I don’t know if you’ve read it or would be interested, but…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Ok! XD yeah, I almost went back and added more, but I didn’t want to clog the gears.

Ahem.

Ocran

There she was. The impertinent young girl with her nasty creature.

The girl, Jocelyn or whatever it was, smiled up at him, her teeth glowing bright in the light of the torches.

What was she getting at? She aught to be on her knees…[Read more]

@annabelle

Bwahahaha! Glad to shake the foundations upon which you built your view of these books!

(Okay, maybe just teasing a little…)

I will admit that although I like Maraly, I don’t think the two personalities would work well together. I don’t know, but I think that I think Kalmar has changed a lot since then, and that he will continue to…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Aw, good! Because, just warning: more are definitely coming. XD

(Yes! Actually The Shepherd/Lord is what they call Jesus, but the kings and princes of Eirtan are also called Shepherds. [and I’ll let you guess about the other titles he refers to 😉 ])

Sounds good to me!

Ocran

He was getting close. More than once he had caught…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

…and I’m back!

Ocran

The castle corridors wound on and on, and the light from the windows was mostly moonlight now. He had changed his torch thrice since the hunt began.

He would catch her, and when she did she’d pay for it. She showed too much if that easy bravery, that unquenchable friendliness that more than bordered on…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Yes!! This is fun. I’ll have to take a pause in after this to get ready for church tonight, but maybe I can hop back on later.

Ocran

Aha! Someone was holding a one-sided conversation down the left hall. Definitely that Jocelyn girl.

He sped up the hall, passing darkening windows on his left.

He’d catch her soon. He always…[Read more]

@annabelle

Ok, just hopping on here and completely interupting because-

*Tries to hold in tirade.*

Did you just couple Kalmar with Maraly?

No. Not at all.

For one, can a character make a friend without it becoming a love interest, please? (Ok, that was my frustration at a different book speaking, sorry.)

Still, not Maraly. If we’re going to…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Whoo hoo! Nyx is so good. XD

Ocran

The girl smiled at his rebuke.

“Now darling, don’t worry,” she said to the little beast, or she had better be talking to it, because darling would be the crowning insult of her many rude comments. “I’m sure he didn’t mean.”

The creature was nothing abated. It continued to hiss and spit, s…[Read more]

@maryg3

Good!I’m really glad it helped. Sometimes my illustrations do worse than nothing. XD

@r-m-archer

Ooh, neat! I have a culture that avoids living on land, too, with more Maori and Hawaiian influence on the language and some Viking inspiration planned for their culture (and their hair, because Viking braids are epic).

Thanks! Yours sounds pretty neat too. Viking braids are great. My sisters and I actually do a variation of one of…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Hahahahaha! Sorry, I was working on my math and trying not to pay attention to my phone.

Ocran

The girl waved her hand as if she were talking to a fellow child. Extremely impertinent. Ocran glowered, but she remained undeterred.

“Hiya! Name’s Jocelyn, and this here’s my darling Nyx!” The Nyx creature bounded to it’s feet when…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

So, I just went ahead and started his part.

Okay…. Random idea sparker

Ocran

A girl came hurtling down the passage, her long hair flying behind her like a comet’s tail, an excited gleam in her eyes.

“Who are you, and what are you doing?” Ocran thundered.

She skidded to a halt, her eyes wide. A little foxish creature tumbled to a stop beside her.