Elishavet Elroi

@godlyfantasy12 @koshka @freedomwriter76 @keilah-h

By the way, Reúven’s “usual” is a quick, anonymous strike to a nervous shut down point. I thought it might give a decent way to clear off Hitchens for the moment, especially since I can’t see either of my boys, or any of the others in this group, standing still right then. XD

Also, I’m guessing…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12 …definitely. @koshka @freedomwriter76 @keilah-h

Viktor

The slug, Hitchens had his blade to Arabella’s throat. Viktor exchanged a wide-eyed glance with Reúven and unlooped his rod from his belt. Reúven had drawn his knife, and was quickly moving behind the man, his eyes glittering.

Then it happened. A wave of terror ripped t…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12 @koshka @freedomwriter76 @keilah-h @wilder-w

This is going to be awesome!

Reúven & Friends

The hall outside the cafeteria reeked of ravioli and broccoli. Reúven wrinkled his nose and considered his choices.

An MRE, or school lunch?

He glanced in the trashcan as they stepped inside.

MRE.

He would rather trust the d…[Read more]

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Winton Aetheling

Some people, when they see the evil of the world, hide their eyes and try to forget. Some grow hard and insensitive. But some see it, and without loving the wickedness, reach for those entangled. Those some love even when it hurts, reach even past hope, and don’t give up…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Actually, I LOVE THIS IDEA.

Ok, what if he’s an unofficial-official school counselor? A kind of social worker. Then he’d be in the position to talk to students, and we’ll just say that here he also has the ability to hold small meeting/ club style classes. (There would definitely be food.) Lilith puts up with him because it puts…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

YESS!!!!

So, in the series, Alwin is reached by a man with a burden for the children of the serfs. (Kinda like bus ministry) Alwin, who first comes because there’s food, realizes that they have something. From a very young age he had the understanding that all those who said they served the King were really just serving an empty…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Lol! I get that! I actually prefer that too.

You should have seen what I had written as a going sparking thought for this RP. It used the word “cursor”. XD

Anyway, yeah. I blanked it like that because I was expeirementing with how to say without saying things, but I am WAAYY more comfortable with leaving even the intent…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12 @koshka @freedomwriter @keilah-h @wilder-w

Oh! I was just thinking about what my charries would do at lunch! Y’all are awesome.

By the way, I feel kinda like I need to put on a content warning. Nothing is really stated, but some pretty nasty things are aludes to, including addiction, abuse, profanity, and immorality.…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76 @koshka @keilah-h @godlyfantasy12

Let’s see…

Viktor

As soon as the man walked up, Viktor heard Reúven’s voice in a low mutter.

“What fine boots. Very much the officer.”

Viktor’s eyes went wide. He spread his feet and gripped his sword, ready. Esen shifted on his shoulders to raise her crest in answer to his…[Read more]

@arien

Oh! I love it. The characters are intriguing, the setting/world is interesting, and the concept is really fun. I want to read the rest!

I especially liked the way you describe the characters bit by bit. The piece where the candlelight is illuminating Aedan’s face was an especially fine part to read. I love the way it formed his features…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Viktor

“Ah, thanks anyway! I’ll find him after class.”

Concern flooded through him, filling his eyes and face. He leaned forward and touched the back of her seat.

“Is this a… brother?”

She sighed. “My little brother.”

“When did he disappear? Is this like him?”

Grimm gave a low, sympathetic laugh and Jocelyn huffed. “He s…[Read more]

@keilah-h @godlyfantasy12 @freedomwriter76 @koshka @wilder-w

Ok!

Reúven & others

Well, here they were. Literature right off the top. Reúven pulled a chair out for Liora and he and Viktor sat down on either side.

The teacher had stepped out to talk with another teacher in the hall, letting the  students settle in before class started. She wa…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

Actually, I don’t know. XD

Lyn and Grimm might be fun, since they haven’t really run into each other very much in the other RP.

And Lynn may have some fun.

@keilah-h @godlyfantasy12 @freedomwriter76 @koshka @wilder-w

The poor baby!

Also, I have an idea for a scene for later after Alwin has met some more charries in which he gets knocked over and… his backpack falls open. 

But for now…

Alwin

An annoying buzz sounded overhead, calling Alwin’s attention to his slow feet. He sped up, his worn t…[Read more]

@wilder-w @keilah-h @godlyfantasy12 (November!!!) @koshka @freedomwriter76

Reúven

Golden sunlight splashed across the crowd of students, staining everything in light. Reúven squinted at the brightness and shifted his eyes away.

Better to not burn spots into his vision.

Viktor walked beside him like a young soldier going to court martial. The b…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

I’m just going through the forum, and what should meet my eyes?

THAT SCENE WAS AWESOME! And hilarious, and sooo sweet! I love the way Riker swaps from understanding friend to protective brother. It’s perfect!

@godlyfantasy12

I can! Should I hop in with my threesome?

@starofthenorth

Hmmm, that was really fun to read! I love the “Christopher is king” dynamic to pieces!

As for critiques, I would basically repeat everyone else. From what you asked, I don’t think you’re intending to make them feminist etc., so I would bring the emphasis off of the catch words and more on the characters. It’s Briana against…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76. @koshka. @wilder-w. @keilah-h. @godlyfantasy12.

Alwin

Another day.

Alwin shuffled wearily down the hall toward his classroom. The halls were crowded with students wrapped in conversation, exchanging schedules, rifling through backpacks, and heading to class. Bleary eyes blinked in dumbfoundment at the bright spirits of the…[Read more]

OH! And I can hardly believe I didn’t explain their set up.

Ok.

Viktor is now living with his uncle, Micha, and cousin, Reúven. A friend of Micha with unmentionable connections in government located Viktor and got Micha custody of him and his sisters Alyona and Nadían. Alyona is 13, and Nadían is 12, and they decided not to have Alyona come that early.