Beth

@esther-c

You’re good! 🙂

@trailblazer

I thought the same thing as hybridlore, lol. Otherwise, great!

That whole thing about Albert wanting to kiss Libbie and Bert actually kissing Clara made me cringe (which is a good thing!) because how awkward would that be???? AHHHH! But it’s good! I like it!

@sarafini

OH MY GOSH I LOVE ADVENTURES IN ODYSSEY!!!!

but i probably won’t join….because I would rather just rant about Odyssey in general. So should I make a post thread where we can just “argue” about conspiracy theories, the way things “should have gone” (we’d be kind while arguing, of course, haha) or just talk about all things Odyssey?

@mineralizedwritings

It’s totally fine! Don’t feel bad! (Now I feel bad for making you feel bad! lol)

It does kind of sound like her though, so I see where you’re coming from.

Yeah, I really don’t want the romance to be the main reason for the abuse, because that just sounds “cruel” to put my characters so much for the sake of an unhealthy…[Read more]

@trailblazer

Yeah, I think so! Just might make it a little easier to understand XD I mean, in hindsight, they were at a corn shucking thing. I should’ve known they were talking about CORN ears XXD

@power @hybridlore

Great advice!

@mineralizedwritings

Ottoline from “Character Party” isn’t the one I was asking the question for, though, it’s an entirely different character. (If you check out my WIP page on KP, you’ll see it.)

@trailblazer

Nope, I think it’s just you XD I didn’t notice anything seeming weird, except I didn’t understand when Albert said, “We’ll see who gets the red ear of corn tonight!” until Dr. Hawley opened it. Anyway, I like Clara and him together so far!

@spinner4him

Actually, yes. I have been stepped on before six times, by six different horse on the same foot. I work at a stable that has 39 +/- horses, so it’s bound to happen.

It’s not a brand, it’s type of cheese and my personal favorite, try it sometimes It’s really good with celery or rice cakes.

Glad to here you like kp, hope to see you…[Read more]

@rae

Okay, I was just making sure! Hmm…. yeah, I would just tag anyone you know/people who asked about your WIP, but of course you don’t have to. It just helps them to see it.

I know that @loopylin and @kyronthearcanin write science fiction, so maybe they would be interested to read it? Sorry, I don’t know who you’ve met yet. Or maybe @whalekee…[Read more]

Hey, if you want to see my writing WIP, I started a topic called “Criticism on a revision draft” My first two chapters are on there.

@hybridlore @freedomwriter76 @euodia-vision @jonas @mineralizedwritings @anyone-else-who-might-have-slight-interest

If I just tagged you and you aren’t interested, feel free to go away.

So…If you’re still around, and haven’t read the first chapter, look up. If you’re still around and you have read the first chapter, look down.

CHAPTER 2-…[Read more]

@grcr

Thanks! Of course!

@hybridlore

I do know how to tag people, but who would be interested? I do have two friends, but at the time I posted that, they we nonexistent. Should I just tag people I know?

I like your idea of adding Nahim in, it’s probably the only advice I’ve gotten about this chapter that doesn’t ruin my purpose at all.

Actually, funny you should…[Read more]

@trailblazer

Sorry I never replied to this, but I still read it! I like where it’s going, lol. It’ll be interesting to see if Clara finds a husband XD

@jonas

I use it to mean negative traits, but you’re right, it’s a little confusing. I’ll change that.

@esther-c @freedomwriter76 @euodia-vision @smiley @whalekeeper @kyronthearcanin @savannah_grace2009 @rae @highscribeofaetherium @jonas @spinner4him @aranel

@rae

Hi!! Sorry, I would’ve gotten to this earlier, I just didn’t even see it. Do you know how to tag people already or did you just not know who to tag?

It seems interesting so far! I think the biggest thing I noticed was that your paragraphs are really long — I think it would be easier to read if you split the paragraphs up, but that’s sort…[Read more]

I just have to show you this…

@freedomwriter76

It looks so good!!

The poor boiii!! 😭