Ava Blue

He’d bled on the floor more times than he cared to tell her. He hoped she wouldn’t notice more faint stains.

Bruh

@godlyfantasy12

So you’re trying to present Ara’s world to the reader before the inciting incident happens, and you don’t know how to translate the inner world to the outer world?
If so, wait a minute. We have the same problem. I’m trying to write the same thing. XD

The best I can say is to come up with a meaningful, but normal situation that re…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Eek! Lol.

Wilhelm

He had been on the verge of telling Wolfgang that he wouldn’t aim for his sword – Wilhelm’s target would always be his opponent, not a weapon – when the boy vanished.

That door had a rough time of it that night. Wolfgang’s reentry rattled the cups left on their table.

“En garde!” Cried the madcap creature as…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I’m wondering who is going to win this….

Wilhelm

He was in the middle of fitting his sheild onto his left arm. He kept his gaze on his work, but his eyebrows were rising into his hair. They were more trouble to keep in order than either his sword or his shield.

“Heavy weapons prepare us for pitched battle. Strength must be…[Read more]

@loopylin

Aww. I love him. He looks like a slightly snarky sweet heart with a big destiny.

I was just reminded that I have an old Ellis drawing that I never shared (I don’t think?)@anyonewhowantstosee

the outfit isn’t really accurate but it’s close enough. Also the skin color and background colors are kinda weird but it’s fine

Also yeah, like @elishavet-pidyon said! Writing calls! I’m not sure how to make it accessible to everyone because not everyone uses Google chat. Which is what I normally use for calls. But we can figure it out.

@godlyfantasy12

You wrote more than 50k words, which is a lot of emotional effort when writing the series of your dreams. So first off, that’s awesome. You’ll have plenty of material to edit. You’re definitely burnt out from that. That sounds normal to me.

I’m currently at an ADORABLE bookshop/cafe and slowly wanting and feeling the nudge to g…

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@ellette-giselle

Hehe.

By the way, his arming sword is a little under a yard long. His great sword is probably five feet, a precursor to the Zweihänder sword if he was in our world.

Wilhelm

“So instead you use flimsy weapons? I don’t see the wisdom of that. What about glaves and halberds? But nevermind. I’ve another trainer here somewhere.”…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

I don’t have much advice, being in a similar situation myself. However, the thing that helps me the mostis just talking through plot holes and concepts. If you don’t have someone who can be a sounding board for you (in “real” life), I think most of us KeePers would be happy to be that. It’s nice to hear other opinions at the…[Read more]

@loopylin

Callum

The Stormwatcher legacy was impressive. Scary, even. Callum could imagine having visions, since he already knew half of the experience. Ellis had something to contribute to his family – something helpful. Maybe it didn’t require much ingenuity, which was something Callum needed because he had no born powers. But it sounded…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

Ellis

“Yes.” Ellis paused, thinking of how to explain. He had never had to before. He lightly touched his forehead where the blue diamond-shaped mark was. “I have a sort of extra eye. When it opens, I can see important moments in time. Many of my ancestors had the same ability, and they were able to use it to defend our kingd…[Read more]

@rae @keilah-h @loopylin

Lucille

Hydras were from storybooks, and even then, Lucy wasn’t exactly sure what they were. They sounded worse than a copperhead at any rate.

“Was that your blood?” she asked, pointing at the rug.

@rae

Let your crew know. You shouldn’t be concerned about how strong or weak you look.  That’s a minor issue. Falling over is a major issue. I’m not trying to wildly speculate, but isn’t there a possibility that you lose balance on a boat and pitch over? If you don’t tell anyone, there’s a risk of hitting your head or worse.

Many, many people…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Lol. He might need to learn to notice details if he’s going to lead a rebellion.

Also don’t remember if they already talked about family. Maybe I need to keep better track of details.

I kind of spoke for Wolfgang, but I tried to write it so you could change his lines as you like.

Wilhelm

“Reinhard is…?” Wilhelm looked back…[Read more]

@rae

Works with me :] I will switch them on the doc

@keilah-h @loopylin

Lucille

“Is this where you lived with that old man? Your master?” Lucy asked.

@loopylin

Callum

Somewhere in Callum’s echoing headspace, Ellis’ voice rose to the surface. It took a minute to process everything he said. He was friendly. Understanding, even.

It was rather dark outside, and crickets had begun their evening song, but lamps lit up the bench from either side. The lights were like splotches of butter-colored pai…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I’m amused that Wolfgang hasn’t connected the dots, especially considering Wilhelm’s 11th cent clothing, rooms, and culture. XD I know he thinks it’s impossible, but something should be tickling his subconscious by now.

Wilhelm

Either this boy was confused or Wilhelm was. Or perhaps both. The idea that knights were antiquated…[Read more]