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@godlyfantasy12 @koshka @joy-caroline

@anyone-else-that-is-interested.

Okay, so I have started the rough draft for the first book in my Kingdom of Shadows series. (The one with Alwin and the rest) I do need help on the editing, but since it’s rough draft I’d just mostly like to hear all y’all’s thoughts on it.

By the way, untill I wrote it, I’d…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

RIKER!!!!!

That’s awesome. And it makes so much sense. Having his father come from an abusive background is perfect. It will be soooo beautiful to see play out!

*On edge of seat*

(By the way, have you ever read To Love a Broken Winged Angel? by LaJoyce Martin? It doesn’t have anything to do with your setting, except for the…[Read more]

@freedomwriter76

Ok, so I only just got on here after a week, and here is this!!! Oh, I love these characters!

And the history nerd inside me is about to run up the walls.

Riker…. Leon…. Y’all both need a good hug. And God. Wow.

By the way, I love that Riker is a former SS. I’m so, so, SO glad Leon forgives him- for both their sakes I am…[Read more]

Oh, and yours are very good. You did so well making just a few words tell so much.

@starshiness

Oh yes! I do love seeing how much can be related in just a few words. It’s one thing that make poetry such a fun challenge.

(The baby shoes story is heartbreaking.)

I think some of my favorites are from the Bible (Like “God shall provide himself a sacrifice”. Can I get an amen?), but of course I didn’t write them.

I’ll have to get…[Read more]

@starshiness

Most fascinating! You display a very interesting thought.

AND the character it Describes is totally a favorite kind with me.

Good job!

*Looks back over it*

Woa! I just caught the last sentence. Ok, that’s neat.

As for critiques, I would say that the paragraph where you go into authenticity doesn’t quite fit the same flow as the…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12 (Wow! The world grows smaller every day. It was soooo good. I hope they were exceedingly blessed!) @emilysf @koshka

Finally, here it is!!

Viktor

The rest of the group wasn’t following. Or at least, not quickly, and not completely. Viktor gritted his teeth and darted a glance behind him.

He saw a nightmare.

His nightmare all…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

What?! Really?!

The one at Lufkin?

I don’t know if I can ask for names, but that’s awesome.

I had a response written, but it just got obliterated, so I shall to rewrite it in the next few minutes.

@godlyfantasy12

….and that was NOT one or two hours…and it’ll be a little longer till I get it in, but not as long as that was. 😂😬

Actually…

Yes! I’m at the Texas District Youth Camp. *Whoop*

It’s the last day though.

*Sniff*

But it’s been amazing!!!!!

(Hallelujah!)

@godlyfantasy12

Yes! I’m sorry it’s been a while. I’m at church camp, and haven’t had much time or energy left for the forum.

However, I’ll get something up in the next hour or two.

@keilah-h @e-m-trepke @power

That’s kinda funny–not really, being sick is not fun–but I was also sick last week. Glad to hear you are better! Also, I just thought it was amusing that you guys call Everett, “Dark,” to shorten his alias sometimes because he hates when people give him nicknames. 🙂

Anyway…!

Everett

He side-glanced his…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

I can’t hold them in. *Sigh* maybe a few won’t hurt the system.

What are November’s uncontrollable powers?

How did he escape being killed?

Who exactly is his father?

About how old are these characters when the explosion comes?

Did Eder know?

What color eyes does Corvina have? (Sorry if you already said somewhere and I just…[Read more]

@godlyfantasy12

I. Did. Not. See. That. Coming.

Wow. No wonder his father is so awful…wait. is he really his Dad? (You don’t have to answer if you don’t want to.)

This will definitely stay here!

And now so many questions are piling up in my head that I’d better not start asking any more. The forum may not be able to take it. XD

@godlyfantasy12

YES I DO!!!!!

@godlyfantasy12

(Yeah, I just read the actually helpful stuff, skipped over the rest, and marked out the language with a black pen.)

Oh November! You are putting me into a rhyming mood, which is not exactly safe, at least for my bedtime schedule.

Seriously though, the poor BABY!!

@godlyfantasy12

Go on, go on! *Florishes one hand*

(You’ve read ‘Save the Cat!’ too?)

Poor November…

*deep, heartfelt sigh*

@freedomwriter76

Wow. You just wrote that today? This is first draft? I am…

*Groan*

You painted a vivid picture of this character in my head, and when he screamed I heard him. I have a definite love/hate relationship with this type of character. They wring my heart.

Because they’re real.

They’re all around us.

@freedomwriter76

Awesome!

Yeah, the only good series I’ve found is Promise of Zion, by Robert Elmer.

Weird random question; are your Jewish MCs Messianic, Orthodox, or something in between? (I’m supposing they’re not just by heritage, but they could be, I suppose.)

@freedomwriter76

Thank you!

*Having snooped through all the rest of this board*

I love that you’re writing stories during the healing period after WWII! I haven’t found many good books set in that time (well, besides a couple nonfiction stuff, but anyhoo).