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Yeah, that makes so much sense!

Oh yeah, I get that. I have a lot of writing knowledge, I just don’t always apply it 💀😂

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 I have some idea of how each character would act in a survival scenario, and everyone wants to survive, buuuuuut I don’t know what each character would wish for.

tbh I’m not sure what my guys would wish for either. They’re confusing.

plus it all depends on where you caught them in their arcs.

@whalekeeper

No girl, I love it! I think the key to writing chaotic scenes is pacing. Like if you have a lot of long sentences people are going to get confused, but in your case, you stuck to shorter/mid-length sentences and sprinkled in only a few long ones. It worked really well 👌

@whalekeeper

Love it!! I love your writing style so much actually! I’m not sure what it is, but something about it makes it easy and engaging to read 🤩

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“My microwave lasagna…”

Everyone stopped to stare at a slouched man in sunglasses, Joe. He shrugged. “I’m still hungry.”

Hehe I love it

Now I’m really curious what all the characters want their wishes to be. I think I know Dante’s maybe.

And Joe would probably just ask for a cup of coffee or for a mute button for his overly talk…[Read more]

@whalekeeper Cool, I’ll check it out.

@whalekeeper kind of a cool writer’s choice, everyone sees the lines as from different characters.

@whalekeeper ohh ok, in other words it could be your character speaking if you want.

although hats are a THING in Mundy’s home world. You do NOT mess with someone’s hat. So it stand to reason he’d be ticked off at them for taking it.

@whalekeeper lol missed that

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“My gun -”

“My original clothes are gone, hat and all. I feel violated.”

Crosshair and Mundy?

@raxforge @grcr @loopylin @whalekeeper @jonas @ellette-giselle @hybridlore

Baron (Brutus)—with Group 1, Elderstrand edge

Pain. Brutus moaned as he lay on the ground, regretting greatly his decision to use that attack. Tears pricked at his eyes. The last time he had been hurt this bad was when he fought Max, but then, then his father was beside…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

You said ‘need’ a lot, does that mean you would only talk about death if you need to, not at any other time?

Yes.

And what time in a story would you believe it is a necessary time?

When a character does die. Characters die, there is no doubt about. Sometimes you need a character to die to improve another character’s ark. I’m just say…[Read more]

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Ben Gunn and Flare – Group 1, Everstrand edge

As soon as Flare realized he was on the ground, he was up again ready to fight. Ben was a little slower but got up quickly. All the Ironwalkers were still on the ground, but they started to get up.

“Quick, back to the roof.” T…[Read more]

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Thanks 👍

@whalekeeper

So you wouldn’t write about death in any circumstance because it might offend people?

Not necessarily, it is okay to write about death in some senses, but in this case, I can’t see anything good coming from writing about death right now. If I need to offend people, I will. But I don’t see a need.

Do you find it unlikable to t…

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Y’all are so sweet 💕 Thank you

Hope you enjoy your ice cream party. That sounds fun :]

@raxforge yay!

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Baron (Brutus)—with group 1, Elderstrand edge

Brutus sighed. Why did he even care? Here his body was tearing itself apart and he wanted to go back to help Flare and Ben and the boy.

Mustering his strength, Brutus got back up from where he lay, gritting his teeth as he…[Read more]

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Ben Gunn and Flare – Group 1, Everstrand edge

Flare looked down from the roof top at the kid who just became unconscious as Ironwalkers surrounded him. He drew his sword.

“Flare don’t-” Ben didn’t finish his sentence when Flare jumped down. When he landed, he ran towards the…[Read more]