Enid

@linus-smallprint

awesome! Glad I could be of help.

I think we’re all a little defensive of our stuff. 😂

I remember when you kept criticizing Aaron I was crushed because he’s a lot like me and I felt like you were criticizing me and saying I was a cardboard cutout. It took a few weeks for me to separate myself from him and see your cri…[Read more]

@theshadow

I really like this chapter! Everything critical I was going to say @hybridlore already covered.

I really enjoy these characters. I like how Jack sticks up for his sister, and I’m eager to find out what happens and where Elina got her scar!

make sure to keep tagging me because I’m really enjoying this.

and those girls giving her a h…[Read more]

@theshadow

Sorry it took me a day to get back to you. Even though you said you didn’t like this first chapter much, I think it has potential. It introduces the characters and their world pretty well. It is a very short chapter. Is that normal throughout the book, or is this the exception? It’s fine to have shorter chapters, but I think it might…[Read more]

@liberty

Feb. 15 sounds good, thx

@esther-c Gotcha! A P.S. would be fun, but it might lessen the impact of the ending, so it depends on what you do. As it is right now, it doesn’t scream “actual letter” to me. It’s kind of like a thank-you-note (not exactly, but I don’t know how else to explain it.) or just a note. With a word count as short as yours, that’s fine, but maybe it’d…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

As a reader, is this a direction you would be satisfied to see the story take?

Yes

What do you think of the character development you see in this (specifically for Alan, Martha, Eric, and Cyrus)?

Seems solid.

Now that you’ve seen some more, what are your thoughts on the similarities between Eric and Kalmar?

I think it’s d…[Read more]

I just found out there will be no more pennies.😭😭😭They were my favorite coin. RIP.

@loopylin

As are 95% of the people in the roleplay, lol. You’d fit right in :]

Lol, okay. I think I will add a couple characters there.

@theducktator

but I’m homeschooled, and therefore kind of clueless

As are 95% of the people in the roleplay, lol. You’d fit right in :]

@jonas

I may, but I’d need to read through, like, 40 pages, as that’s not one I stalk.😂

@loopylin

I’ve been thinking about joining the school RP, but I’m homeschooled, and therefore kind of clueless. I did however, read through all 400+ pages on a whim once, so there’s that.😂

@hybridlore

It looks great! This was a cool idea. I think you did a good job inserting a theme into such a tiny paragraph. Out of curiosity, how much do you have left in the word count?

Thanks!! Oh yes, that was so hard! I was going to keep it lighthearted and goofy, and then I was like, Hold on. And tried something a little different. 😛

Ummm… a…[Read more]

I started scrolling through old topics and feeling all nostalgic. Anyone remember the sleepover rp? And I think we had a movie theater rp at some point too

@theducktator You could also probably join the character castle, one of the oldest still active role plays on here. I don’t think it’s completely dead yet. Just gotta tag some people.

@hybridlore

I don’t know who’s in charge of the others… I’m sure whalekeeper would know.

Most roleplays don’t have one person in charge usually. That’s something that’s unique to the adventure rp. We usually just agree to some basic rules and then kinda do whatever

@theducktator  There’s the fantasy school role play that’s still active, though people seem to be busy right now so it’s not moving very much. We just started a new day so your characters could easily join and go to whatever kind of class you want them to take.

@the_lost-journal

Wow, that was creepy. I guess I don’t like horror. But it was pretty well-written, I think. It was cool how you tied the ending into the beginning.

If you want feedback faster in the future, I would tag people, otherwise your post gets buried underneath all the other topics and we have to go scrolling for it. Although, if you e…[Read more]

@theducktator

Lolol! I would ask @jonas since he’s the leader of the Adventure one. I don’t know who’s in charge of the others… I’m sure @whalekeeper would know.

@esther-c

It looks great! This was a cool idea. I think you did a good job inserting a theme into such a tiny paragraph. Out of curiosity, how much do you have left in the word count?

Also, are you planning to add a name at the top?

@linus-smallprint

i really love the direction.

character development seems good and solid. But it’s hard to know that from just reading an outline.

again, it all depends on how you play it, but I was feeling Eustace and dragon change more than Kalmar and wolf. (Even though it is a wolf) I think you’re fine and should go for it. I can let you…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

I like this much better. I feel more comfortable, but it also plays into the allegory style better. (At least  in my opinion)

my only suggestion (besides fine combing because there were a few typos) is old be this paragraph.

I do not know what Alan thought as he used the spell, so instead of telling you that, let’s say he in…

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