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@linus-smallprint

That’s a pretty good addition to the scene! I don’t think that deviated from your story’s voice at all.

You’ll see. Then you will understand why other readers are mad at him. It wasn’t pretty.

Hehe, okay.

@linus-smallprint

even if it is his fault she was captured in the first place.

How did that happen exactly? Was it more of an ignorant blunder, or?

@linus-smallprint

Thank you. If you weren’t playing the advocate, would you take Ellette’s side?

I simply mean what I described. 👍 I’m not sure how it compares with the rest of your feedback discussions… I have very little context. XD

He he.

My mind reading powers are impeccable.

Thanks for the link by the way! I can’t guarantee I’ll read it…[Read more]

@theducktator

My brother is in Challenge 2, I am the frazzled senior trying to help him learn logic, debate, and Latin. 🙃

@ellette-giselle

Well, to be honest, I don’t know a lot of pree-teens who like to play dress-up and repeat whatever their sister tells them to say.

Good point. XD My siblings are a lot more willing to do stuff, but these are kids between the ages of 8 and 13. They still like to play “wolf fight” and “Indians.”

The funniest thing is, my most r…

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@ellette-giselle

Sadly, my biggest two never got filmed because that was the year all my guy actors were done dressing up and repeating lines. lol.

They were too cool for school, huh? XD

@rae @theshadow

Do you guys want to try joining up with another small group?

Aw, Barnes is trying to be the comforting grandmother to everyone!

*Gasp* How dare you, she isn’t even forty yet! 😂 I get what you mean. Honestly she would be a pretty grumpy grandma. The grandma who complains about kids but gives them cookies all the…[Read more]

@raxforge

I am the asker, lol. I’m just gauging interest in using a screenwriting format. 😛

Has anyone tried writing a screenplay? Or wants to?

Sometimes I can give a kid an ‘adult’ responsibility and they snap out of crying. I don’t know if that would work here, Rae, but she’s trying. XD

@rae @theshadow

Barnes

“I was thinking we start down this corridor along the edge of the castle, and scour the place for clues and people,” Barnes told Percival.

The group waited a few minutes for Reid to calm his brother, who remained stubbornly curled up. He was still agitated.

Barnes was used to people who looked much younger than their…[Read more]

Of course you can do whatever you want, I’m playing the other side’s advocate so you have balanced reasons for whatever you do.

@linus-smallprint

(also, anyone else who is reading this, what do you think?)

You have a very sensible writer voice, with hints of humor and warmth. I think because of your semi-calm tone, you don’t seem like the kind of person who would write a super intense POV scene of shame for Eric, at least not until the arc’s climax.

And from what I can…[Read more]

@esther-c @highscribeofaetherium

Yeah, I’ve noticed things are slowing down. 😔 The best way I can think of picking things up again would be to update the articles, add new material.

Does anyone remember the time they added a page for a new rank of KP writers? Anyone who wrote three of either articles, short stories, or poems? It was there one…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

I just decided to read that chapter completely out of order. I’ve only read up to chapter 5 besides this, I think, and that was a while ago. XD I can give some feedback about this chapter, as someone who read it without any context whatsoever.

I liked the sense of friendship I got from all the good guys, even if they couldn’t…[Read more]

@keilah-h

plus it all depends on where you caught them in their arcs.

I’m planning to use creative liberties because of this, lol. After all, if some of these people turn violent in the game, that’s not accurate to their canon internal values. This is alternate noncanon; the most moral, innocent character might defenestrate their…[Read more]

@esther-c

Awesommme, I’m glad that worked. For me, I want to add description in longer paragraphs because they have a softer sense of time, and you can afford to give the information in a solid chunk. And then like you said, actions and dialogue are shorter.

Not that I always follow my own thoughts! Buuut verbalizing this might help me stay consistent.

@loopylin

Yaayyy the Loops likey

Now I’m really curious what all the characters want their wishes to be. I think I know Dante’s maybe.

So, as it happens, I am curious too. XD I have some idea of how each character would act in a survival scenario, and everyone wants to survive, buuuuuut I don’t know what each character would wish for. I have gue…[Read more]

@keilah-h

I used Simublast, it was the first website I could find that didn’t take forever to load. 😌