The Ducktator

Drafting a short story. :15

@ellette-giselle

Aww! Jonathan and Amber and Leo were so cute. 🥰

Poor 618. And 621. That government! 😡

@whalekeeper HAHAHA

it is though

Researching other ethnic backgrounds feels so much harder than I want it to be. So many different places, so many different people.

@ellette-giselle

Thank you very much!

Of course! *Tips hat*

That was really helpful about the description thing. I think that makes more sense. I wonder too if I over-did the “buzz” words in dystopian literature because I was trying to cut down on description. XD I’ll totally look at that.

I get that. Descriptive words have so many different quali…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Yay! Jonathan and Michael are back!!

These were great chapters. I can’t wait for 618 (Rory?) to meet the rebellion. (I’m assuming that will happen, anyway.)

@liberty, I think they were your comments? I really hope you’re wrong about Michael dying. 🥺😢

I was going to share my thoughts, but then this thread would start to become redundant, lol! I pretty much agree with what everyone else has said. And as for the passage people keep referencing about food offered to idols and becoming a stumbling block, that’s 1 Corinthians 8.

Oh cheese and crackers, now I’m worried everyone’s gonna think I’m a horrible person

I just released that band might cause you pain to look up because the Google search makes them look satanic. 😅😭 They do not worship a demon, point blank, and I can explain that if need be.

@theshadow

Hey! 🙂 I haven’t thought about this in a long time, but I agree with everyone else on this thread. Just because a genre of music has been used to spread bad messages does not mean the genre itself is bad.

Take jazz, for example. There are many different jazz songs, and these songs have been the backdrop for cozy, peaceful memories…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Characters:

~Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?

Some of the characters had very compelling characteristics, like Jim’s human decency and Evan with his likable dialogue. They all served their roles and were decently memorable. Jonathan was my favorite because he was the POV…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I’m trying to fill out these feedback questions before I lose track of what’s happening. *Types furiously*

Someone suggested I cut the last section of the blurb and leave it with the part about Jonathan’s friendship because it has more of a cliffhanger. What do you think?

I say remove the part about tragedy striking, and only…[Read more]

@theshadow

Instead of giving you a direct answer, I am going to give you a few things to think through from both sides of the argument.

I don’t believe that just because something has been invented by a Godless person does not mean it is wrong. Consider this: If we take a look at the book of Genesis, it was Jubal who invented instruments.…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

That’s so exciting!! I know you’ve got some help already, but if you need another set of eyes or another opinion, I’m here! 🤗

@theshadow

This sounds like something my OCD brain would get stuck on as well. I don’t think music is evil just for being a certain type of music, but everyone will always have different opinions about this and if it is OCD, talking about it and trying to come up with a logical answer sounds good, but it’s not going to help.

It’s up to you if yo…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Well, I’m back from vacation and I have finished your book!

Sorry for the lack of comments. Often, while I was reading it, I didn’t even have Wi-fi or Data, so most of my feedback will be my answers to your questions I found on page 15 of this forum.

Overall, it was an exciting story with interesting characters. I can see why…[Read more]

also what did you do to the URL to get it to temporarily admin-ify you?

@linus-smallprint It’s cool how you took classes or something for this kinda thing!

That would be cool too, I’d totally give my feedback if you did it.

@whalekeepe @hybridlore @keilah-h @esther-c

I would stay away from things like WIX. I can’t remember what it was, but while they are easier to make, there were reasons my instructors gave me to avoid these. Security might have been one of them. (Then again, Kingdom Pen isn’t. Because of my knowledge of WordPress, I was able to find an admin login…[Read more]