@theducktator
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hybridlore replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 3 days, 20 hours ago
Come on, Ellette! You’re gonna leave me on that!? Your cliffhangers…
Just teasing. I like Julian’s reaction—it feels very realistic like Linus said, even though I’m not a boy so I don’t know exactly how men react to those situations. As far as I know, it looks good.
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 3 days, 20 hours ago
@anyone who cares which will probably be nobody but ehh.
I have been learning to animate in Blender…..
and I believe I have partaken in one of the most glorious feelings known to man:
animating something and watching it move by itself, and thinking that this has been your greatest creation thus far.
Was this how God felt when he created…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Prayer Requests for Anyone in the forum Mission, Calling & Ethics 3 days, 21 hours ago
@the_lost-journal @theducktator I get into enough ruckuses with my 1 younger brother, anything more than that would be C R A Z Y.
Other than Kefa’s “My brothers probably hate me” problem, what’s it like?
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Mood Boards/Aesthetics in the forum Characters 3 days, 21 hours ago
oh and you’re welcome for the feedback!
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Mood Boards/Aesthetics in the forum Characters 3 days, 21 hours ago
@freed_and_redeemed oooh I like it!
have you already started the 3rd book?
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 3 days, 22 hours ago
@ellette-giselle ohhh cool! yeah Tron’s soundtrack is a great one to have on in the background when you’re writing, or sometimes I put it on when I’m in the car on a long trip.
This is from the TV show, which was pretty god but only lasted like 1 season.
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-GRCR- replied to the topic Art Sharing For All 🙂 in the forum Art 3 days, 22 hours ago
bored so im sharing more pics. this one is of all the main characters of my current/most important wip, TPE.
(starting from the girl on the phone and swirling out to the boy on the pillow: Evelyn, Leif, Cameron, Jara, Henson, Kiran, Blaine, Frin, Iniko, Lily, Ira (in the far back), and Flaz.)
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 3 days, 22 hours ago
@ellette-giselle I don’t think you’re playing with demonic powers.
Putting an actual detailed ritual by the Imperial priests could be, for example, but simply the mention that a pagan temple has an evil presence hovering over it is, if anything, as realistic as you can make it.
The music track? Oh, it’s funny cause it is a synth-heavy…[Read more]
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Keilah H. replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 3 days, 23 hours ago
@ellette-giselle what you said about the temple feeling evil to Joseph makes sense to me. I, personally, have never been to any form of pagan temple (not even the ruins of one, that I can remember anyway) , but honestly the very fact that I would be standing in what was once used for or currently used for the worship of a false god (especially if…[Read more]
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freedom replied to the topic Mood Boards/Aesthetics in the forum Characters 3 days, 23 hours ago
@theducktator @ellette-giselle @rae @keilah-h @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @anyone-else
Riker Aesthetic for the 3rd book👀
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freedom replied to the topic Mood Boards/Aesthetics in the forum Characters 4 days ago
and Bucky aesthetic (for fun)
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freedom replied to the topic Mood Boards/Aesthetics in the forum Characters 4 days ago
@ellette-giselle @theducktator @rae @keilah-h Thanks y’all! 😁
@keilah
like in Freedom’s Fire you see him as mostly heartless and cruel, but in all the other books he is more humanized–he has a brother, he has a family, he has reasons for why he did what he did. Not that they were good reasons, mind you, but it means that it upsets you that…
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 days ago
Forth section:
Joseph looked up at Darrien. His face was white, and his finger’s tightened on the door frame. He used his other hand to gently push Joseph back. “Please, the children had nothing to do with it, nor did the women. I was the one who hid him. Take me but leave the others.”
This felt unessasary. Julian only said t…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 days, 1 hour ago
Poor Linus. You’ll have so much catching up to do. Sorry.
Yeah, yesterday was rather busy. Oh well. I have time today.
(By the way, I should let you know that I’m not bothering to read the feedback others are giving you, so if anything has come up that you want more thought on, please let me know.)
Feedback for the third se…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 days, 1 hour ago
Feedback for the second section:
Don’t have too much to say about this one. Joseph kind of falling back to where he was before, but it is easy to see why.
He could hear Noah and Sabina praying together, and for a moment he thought Aaron was captured, for this was how it had been.
This is a nice peak back into what they were all…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 days, 1 hour ago
NEXT SECTION!!!!!!
Okay, that’s a lot of exclamation marks. You know five exclamation marks is a sure sign of madness, right? But you couldn’t settle for five, you went for six. (But who am I kidding, we’re all authors. Madness is sure to come with that.) Ellette, what are you doing to Joseph?
Feedback for the first of those…[Read more]
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Linus Smallprint replied to the topic The Veil of Night– second book in The Flames of Hope Saga in the forum Novel Critique Requests 4 days, 1 hour ago
Wooph! Got a lot to catch up on! Let’s see how far I get before I have class…
It was actually not Betsy. It was Corrie and Betsy’s Niece, Peter and Reuben’s brother, and it was Peter and Reuben who were under the table because someone had seen them with the Jews and informed on them. (At least, that’s what it say’s in Corrie’…
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Keilah H. replied to the topic Talking about are Fanfics in the forum General Writing Discussions 4 days, 2 hours ago
@rae you–
you actually liked it??
wow.
thank you!
three months of my life weren’t wasted writing this!
My only mental note is it was pretty obvious that Spy was Huntresses and Scouts father from the point that Huntress entered his room and saw his stuff.
This is probably a relic of earlier drafts, in which Huntress figured it out while she…[Read more]
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RAE replied to the topic Talking about are Fanfics in the forum General Writing Discussions 4 days, 4 hours ago
Oh, wait, I only read it for five hours…still totally worth it!!!!!!!
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RAE replied to the topic Talking about are Fanfics in the forum General Writing Discussions 4 days, 4 hours ago
So…I started reading and couldn’t stop.
I found myself really enjoying the story, and I forgot about critisims until now. My only mental note is it was pretty obvious that Spy was Huntresses and Scouts father from the point that Huntress entered his room and saw his stuff. That and sometimes it feels like the scenes are too short,…[Read more]
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