TheArcaneAxiom

@thearcaneaxiom

Here’s Sef’s reaction:

Chapter 4: Stolen

***revisal, the new segment at the end****

“Hush,” Cassian squeezed her tighter. Sef sobbed into his shoulder.

“I hate you!” she yelled in his ear. At that moment, she really believed it.

“Yes, I know,” he smiled sadly, knowingly. Sef soon got tired of crying and struggling and so she…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Think of it like your giving your readers a plate with a cheeseburger, but when they reach out to grab it, you pull it away, and throw a burrito at them. Sure burrito’s are great, but the readers were excited for that cheeseburger, and maybe a burrito is better served pushed towards them on a plate, instead of thrown at their f…

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@savannah_grace2009

Okay, now I understand the plot so far. I agree with @thearcaneaxiom that this chapter feels like a jump. One thing to consider might be to actually not show what happens to Neveah until later in the story, instead of following her. That way you could linearly follow Sef and Lillitu up through this chapter. Cutting to Neveah…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Oh, sorry, it is chapter 6!

Well, two years have passed, and Sef has been abused, so that changes her personality a little bit. They both get older and more mature. What do you mean by different, like personality?

@thearcaneaxiom

I haven’t developed him as far as personality or motivations go yet, but I eventually will.

Yeah, the main reason I originally didn’t have those two powers, was because they didn’t seem very useful—and they still aren’t, but I realized that they didn’t really need to be useful anyway.

I haven’t figured out all the reasons behin…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

I’m putting more thought into the 4th chapter. Then I’m going to make it so Lilitu gets 2 chapters. What do you think of the revisal?

Chapter 4: A theif

“Git your grubby fingers off that bread!” Lilitu froze. He looked longingly at the loaf of bread which might as well have been a bar of gold, before turning to face the e…[Read more]

@highscribeofaetherium @thearcaneaxiom @savannah_grace2009 @grcr @hybridlore
I have created a new character, the villain:

Vilsayor
Vilsayor is a high-ranking nobleman and the leader of a conspiracy to unleash an ancient being from the core of the planet, using Resonance Crystals. He embezzles Resonance Crystals for his followers to use. He has…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Do you think that the Paynes of the labor camp would use names still, but perhaps only in hushed tones especially around Pythonos?

Yeah I think so.

 An issue that I’m beginning to see now however is that it still feels like there’s no continuity of characters. Who do the readers connect to? Once they get to know one set of char…

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@thearcaneaxiom

Yeah I get what all you’re saying. Tying into the culture thing, is that stuff like this has been done, but not very often from the approach I’ve been taking. I can’t remember ever reading a fantasy story or work similar to it that took strong cultures and ties to Africa of all places. (: All I know is that Wakanda (which I have…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Sorry it took awhile to get to this. I just haven’t had much time the past few days to sit down and just reply.

You asked if there are any fantastical elements in this world, and that is something that I’ve been debating about a lot lately. In the very original story, there was one tribal nation that had control over dragons, but…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

Well Alcatraz is probably the most likely to not be part of the multiverse, because it’s intended for a younger audience. The multiverse wouldn’t have to include every non-Cosmere story, so if there’s any that don’t seem to fit, they might just not be part of it.

@thearcaneaxiom

Has anyone asked him about the multiverse series? (He probably wouldn’t admit it, though.) It’s pretty crazy how ambitious he is. He already has this huge epic saga (the Cosmere) and then also writes a bunch of unrelated series/stanalone stories that may end up being another connected multiverse.

@thearcaneaxiom

Yeah, the reason he removed it from the Cosmere was because it included earth.

@thearcaneaxiom

Ohhh! So you’re saying his books other than the Cosmere might be a multiverse? That makes more sense. The Rithmatist was originally going to be part of the Cosmere though, but obviously if they are all connected, he could have just changed it then.

@thearcaneaxiom

lol. It probably won’t be too long before I’m in the same boat. It sounds like I can get most of the things I haven’t read yet in Arcanum Unbounded, so I just need that, Elantris, the secret projects, and white sands. I’m a super fast reader. I read SA 1 – 4 in about a month, and Mistborn Era 1 (on audiobook) in like two and a h…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

So what is still on my to do is Elantris, Hope of Elantris, Stormlight 3, 3.5, and 4, and Warbreaker. That’s better than I thought actually, I must be missing something… but I don’t know.

That sounds about right to me. It sounds like you’ve read most of the side stories, and are only missing some of Stormlight, Elantris, and War…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom
Ok, nice! I don’t only care about things that are important to the Cosmere, I’m more interested in the ones that are, so Elantris, WaW, Secret History, and SA 2.5 and 3.5 are at the top of my reading list for now, but after that I’ll look into some of the others.
What books in Arcanum Unbounded were too spoilery? What’s even in…[Read more]

@thearcaneaxiom

I have thought about what you said about the problems with Ottoline’s character, and have decided on a few new things about her history. I was thinking that instead of just the “laboratory”, that they take the Paynes to a work camp to build tools and new technology. Then if they become sick, or get out of line, then the Pythonos…[Read more]