Power

@whalekeeper @looylin @kielah-h

Just to be clear, the flowers are bushes outside of the house. I don’t think I mentioned that.

Gabriel

“Was that your blood?”

Gabriel looked back at the rug, and nodded. He’d bled on the floor more times than he cared to tell her. He hoped she wouldn’t notice more faint stains.

“So are these the monsters you w…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Eek! Lol.

Wilhelm

He had been on the verge of telling Wolfgang that he wouldn’t aim for his sword – Wilhelm’s target would always be his opponent, not a weapon – when the boy vanished.

That door had a rough time of it that night. Wolfgang’s reentry rattled the cups left on their table.

“En garde!” Cried the madcap creature as…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

Wolfgang 

He deposited the heavy weapon on the table with a clatter. “You’d win straight off if I tried with that–– Or I might actually knock your head off. I’m going to get my sword… just don’t hack at it if you please.”

He spead to the door and vanished. Racing down the corridor he leapt in the air with a whoop befo…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

I’m wondering who is going to win this….

Wilhelm

He was in the middle of fitting his sheild onto his left arm. He kept his gaze on his work, but his eyebrows were rising into his hair. They were more trouble to keep in order than either his sword or his shield.

“Heavy weapons prepare us for pitched battle. Strength must be…[Read more]

@koshka @whalekeeper thank yall so much for the advice!!

I’m already feeling better. 😊

I don’t wanna procrastinate but I do feel like I need some parts more fleshed out-maybe I can get some advice/ideas there…

right now I’m really struggling with the beginning. I know those are always the hardest, and is apt to change (and mine has man…[Read more]

@loopylin

Aww. I love him. He looks like a slightly snarky sweet heart with a big destiny.

@elishavet-pidyon

Wolfgang 

He surveyed the shield before setting it on the table. “I don’t need one of those.” He lifted his left hand in the air and tried an experimental flick of his wrist and shuffle step. The sword point wobbled and struck the floor. Wolfgang frowned. “These are very heavy weapons you have. I don’t see the sense in them…[Read more]

@loopylin

Ooo! I love this!

I would be up for a writing call. XD

@godlyfantasy12

Oh man, that’s rough. I hate it when I want to write but can’t (or the evil nemesis, needing to write, but not wanting to).

As for when words won’t word…I don’t know if any of this will apply or be helpful, but, since I’ve always struggled to get words on a page, I’ve had to learn methods to get myself into writing. Sp…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Hehe.

By the way, his arming sword is a little under a yard long. His great sword is probably five feet, a precursor to the Zweihänder sword if he was in our world.

Wilhelm

“So instead you use flimsy weapons? I don’t see the wisdom of that. What about glaves and halberds? But nevermind. I’ve another trainer here somewhere.”…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon that’s a good idea! and yea I’ll probably find myself on here more often. I’m just struggling to get words out period…

@godlyfantasy12

I don’t have much advice, being in a similar situation myself. However, the thing that helps me the mostis just talking through plot holes and concepts. If you don’t have someone who can be a sounding board for you (in “real” life), I think most of us KeePers would be happy to be that. It’s nice to hear other opinions at the…[Read more]

I’m also…just struggling sometimes with this book. The concept, plot, characters, etc are good. I like it…but at the same time at points it feels flat…It needs more, I already have notes for things I need to add but its a little overwhelming…

I really wanna get it to the point I feel comfortable letting someone else read it and critique…[Read more]

@whalekeeper Thx @loopylin @keilah-h

Gabriel

“This is where he found me.” Gabriel stood, walking to the window and throwing back the curtain. Outside was a sea of delicate white flowers with pink centers, the origin of that sweet scent. “I had been bitten by a hydra, he stumbled across me looking for the person who was killing the monsters in…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

No worries. I like the response.

who says he’s leading a rebellion…..

Wolfgang 

He nodded eagerly, then eyed the sword with a critical glance. “I like you’d snap my rapier in two with that thing. We don’t use swords like yours nowadays you know. I wish we did,” he added with a longing glance toward the sharp sword…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Lol. He might need to learn to notice details if he’s going to lead a rebellion.

Also don’t remember if they already talked about family. Maybe I need to keep better track of details.

I kind of spoke for Wolfgang, but I tried to write it so you could change his lines as you like.

Wilhelm

“Reinhard is…?” Wilhelm looked back…[Read more]

@elishavet-pidyon

Wolfgang is far too scatterbrained. If anything he thinks it’s a costume or interesting traditional clothing. That boy doesn’t stop to breathe, let alone think things out like this.

Wolfgang 

“Wining the Olympics is one of the highest honors! I would love to fence in them, but I’m not sure that I would be skilled…[Read more]

@rae

I’m so sorry that happened.

I have a few thoughts, but I want to shoot you an email because I’d rather say what I have to say off-line.