My style…I’m not really sure where it has come from, except that almost all the poetry I’ve read was written before the 1940’s.

The meter here is roughly 7-8 syllables with a pause of cadence in the middle of each line. The rhythm is One and TWO and Three and FOUR. I hope that helps and isn’t more confusing.

Ah, slant rhyme. I have…[Read more]

Here’s the poem I’ve been struggling with. The first and fourth stanzas irritate me the most.

I also have no idea who to tag for this anymore (the last thing I submitted for critiques was some time ago) but feel free to tag anyone.

Oh, I’ve done that soo many times… the interesting rabbit holes we find. I believe the last one I fell down was the difference was Scottish sayings and proverbs. I didn’t find what I was looking for, but as I now can no longer remember what that was everything is fine. XD

Ah, freeverse…

Freeverse is a thing

That I cannot…[Read more]

Ooo, I do prefer Ending Verse #4. It continues in the same voice as the preceding poem, while resolving the whole thing in a smooth switch of tone. (If that made any sense)

I think it would benefit from a little more structure, it need not be much more than you already have.

But that’s all according to the artist’s interpretation. It…[Read more]

Ooo, I like this poem.

I’m not the most amazing of a poet, but I’ll post any polishing I can think of in a bit.

Thanks for sharing!

Glad the post is now up!

I think it must’ve marked it as spam before because I edited it a few times?

That’s my best guess. The site tends to get a bit finicky when making edits. I’m not sure the exact cause of why this is, but I’ll be looking into it!

Thanks for letting me know about this issue! Spam marking is an automated program and unfortunately, it is quite faulty and unrightfully marks perfectly fine posts as spam. I’m currently looking into ways to make adjustments to this program so that it’s more accurate with its spam marking.

Have you been able to get your…[Read more]

My only real comment is that your transition about a fourth of the way through from longer to shorter lines felt a little bit awkward? You came out of it very well at the end, but going into it and shifting the cadence of the poem felt a bit…[Read more]

Hi! I’ve had that happen before, especially if I’m editing it, and someone makes a post in the same area of the forum. Basically if someone else makes a post while yours is still in the process of being posted, the KP ghost steals the slower post 😜

I’m sorry I can’t fix anything! I’ll tag @kathleenramm

But she’s not on here a lot…[Read more]

Beautiful. The way you used layered meanings of words is making me want to get my violin out and sing. I love the ambiguous speaker who could be just anyone; you, me, a fairy child…it makes my imagination shiver.

I don’t have any real critiques, but as I just ran across this two months after it was posted, I suppose that doesn’t…[Read more]

I know, right! My endings usually end up with the action tailing off and then an abrupt start. AKA, not good. 😂

Yes, try to get it published! I think you can publish poetry on the KP blog. You could send it in there.

I think the second one,

“But I am neither bird nor wife and my dreams

Are shining, a full moon tonight:”

Has a better flow to it  🙂

I don’t know how I missed this, but want to say that I love this poem! The lines…

“And what dreams do I

Hold close in my heart?

Is the sailing of my boat a start?”

and

“But I am not a bird nor a wife, and my dreams

Are shining, a full moon tonight:

The darker my night, the

Brighter my dreams,”

Those are perfect, beautiful…[Read more]

I could tell from the poem that you had been around the sea a lot. You spoke as if you knew it.

I have the same trouble with endings, though I don’t write poetry. We’re in the same boat (no pun intended).

You’re welcome! 😊

I’m not a poetry expert, so you might want to take my opinion with a grain of salt. But here goes!

I love your imagery, you did a good job with that. I got a clear picture in my mind.

The only thing I would say is … I really can’t tell who is speaking. I’m assuming it’s a sailor, but I really don’t know.

Also, the last four lines…[Read more]

Thank you!

Thanks!

I realize this chat is over a year old, but wanted to share that I have gotten into raps, poems, and the like. I got to record one about God’s grace: https://youtu.be/yrHhTPSYUr0

Those are great! Here is one of mine I found, I wrote it for some of my best friends who were leaving the neighborhood a few years ago.  Its dosent really rhyme, but the words flow great together!

The neighborhood By- Allison C

Everything you said, everything you did

Changed the ne…[Read more]

Yw!!

@overcomer

Of course! 😉

Oof I know how that is 😂😅 Good luck! 😀

Oooh, fun! 😁 Good luck!!

It’ll actually be for two separate projects. One is a middle-grade contemporary novel, and the other is a YA fantasy. If you’re up for helping me brainstorm, either (or both!) need work, so anyone who can, pretty much? I’ll give the tags here, and then put…[Read more]

The problem is, I don’t get out much. Honestly, I’m pretty picky about what I read, so modern secular works are very rarely added to the list, and I am pretty clueless about what’s actually on the shelves. I know I…[Read more]

What do you like to rap about?

Yuh, sibling relationships ftw. When is a story not better with a sibling, or sibling-like relationship?

Since it’s your favorite, how many sibling duos have you written, and do you have a favorite one you’ve written?

@overcomer

Yeah, there definitely is something special with brother friendships.

Maybe because it’s rarer…[Read more]

Hi! I don’t think we’ve met. I’m Tráhia the Minstrel, here on the forum.

Yeah, I think those are some of the reasons I like writing bromances too.

Nice to meet you!

I know it’s so hard to choose!

I like your perspective of how Sauron, though he wasn’t physically present throughout the story, he was mentally present throughout the trilogy. By constantly tempting anyone near with The Ring. He may not have been charging at the front his army trying to stop Frodo from is mission, but he was in…[Read more]

Ahem. I don’t know if any of you will recognize me (or are even still here) but I’m back….
I can’t tell you all how happy I am to be back here, even though KP isn’t running anymore.
To anyone I haven’t met yet, *waves hello* you’ll…[Read more]

@Overcomer If you see an Elizabeth Flournoy on your doc then, that’s me, using one of my sisters’ account because I don’t have one. Just so you’re warned, it’s not an intruding bot or anything. 😉 And since it’s technically yours first, if you want I can wait to beta-read it ’til you’ve already done so, ’cause that’d be totally fine. I…[Read more]

Here’s a doc for you. https://docs.google.com/document/d/1BIHK8v-ag07-tPraj6QWrbf_BVN2P_PjySIw87Ljfyg/edit?usp=sharing

First, so you don’t write the wrong book. For instance, if I know I want to write for seminal-Christians aged 30-45 who are in the military, that will keep me from writing a children’s fairy tale. Knowing your target audience also helps you maintain a core unity between all…[Read more]

I promised several of you (and I’ve forgotten exactly who *cringes*) to let you know when I had my blog up and…[Read more]

I’m excited to announce that on October 2nd KP will hosting a panel discussion dedicated to the topic of speculative fiction!

Yes, fantasy, sci-fi, the stuff we love. I hope you’ll be there. 😀 😀 😀

Here’s the link.…[Read more]

It is my pleasure to introduce you all to the new Kingdom Pen site–now faster /and/ mobile-friendly. 😀

As you may notice, it looks quite different. And while I think I’ve caught all the bugs, there may still be some that have evaded my eagle-eye. So if you find something, drop us a note here or email us at kingdompenmag@gmail.com.…[Read more]

This is actually not a question about writing specifically… but rather, I want to know what you guys think about mentorship. As in, finding a mentor who will help you along…[Read more]