Orielle2023

@orielle21

Nice story! I love the Little House feel.

I guess one thing I would say: when the Grants arrive, it seems like Pa automatically assumes they’re new to pioneer land. Maybe you could say he sees that their wagon is full of furniture and other belongings, or say something else so it’s obvious they’re new? Do what you want though!

I’m…[Read more]

@arien @starofthenorth @theloonyone @loopylin @lightoverdarkness6 @felicity @esther-c @whalekeeper @orielle21 @freedomwriter76

@booksandbeakers ( I know you said you weren’t super tech savy, so I figured I’d make sure you knew how to find all the chapters here, there’s roughly ten and I wasn’t sure you’d read them all, because your reply was…[Read more]

@orielle21

Thank you so much! 💛

Idk exactly what my style of flashbacks is, but it comes from the fact I wanted my seriestot be a graphic novel, and flashbacks just tend to happen when a character is in there own thoughts for a bit in graphic novels. I’m glad you like it! 😁

And who could be behind that door?

@orielle21

Lol I just remembered he’s my profile cover photo thingy too

@orielle21

OH MY GOODNESS! You are super talented!!!!!! XD XD

Thank you!! 💛💛

It took me a lot of tries to find my style with chibis, everyone does them a little differently, so it’s hard to use other artists work for reference. (which is in general how i learn with art 😂, just copy other peoples stuff until you get it right)

I am going to…

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@orielle21 Cool! That sounds interesting!

@orielle21

Oops tagged you wrong ^^

@felicity @orielle21

Lol, the whole thing of you two not telling us you’re sisters…XD

I do the same thing sometimes XD

At my old youth group, my sister and I didn’t tell new people we were siblings, because idk, why? It’s a bit hard to keep up in person. We each tried to make friends there on our own so it wasn’t super obvious. We had a…[Read more]

@orielle21

Fun story! I liked your Bensnickle (Or however his name is spelled). Writing wise there aren’t very many things I’d tweak.

But um, do you want critique on the history side of things?

@arien @starofthenorth @theloonyone @loopylin @lightoverdarkness6 @felicity @esther-c @whalekeeper @orielle21

@freedomwriter76 (Might want to go back a bit before reading this section 😁)

@booksandbeakers I post chapters of my WIP (“Afterthoughts”, working title) here if you ever feel like reading! Critiques are welcome, although I’d recommend…[Read more]

@booksandbeakers

I’m going to tag some other KeePers… 😀

@arien @orielle21 @starofthenorth @freedomwriter76 @folith-feolin @madelyn @theloonyone @loopylin @godlyfantasy12 @mineralizedwritings @lightoverdarkness6 @whalekeeper

@arien @starofthenorth @theloonyone @loopylin @lightoverdarkness6 @felicity @esther-c @whalekeeper

@orielle21

I post chapters of my WIP  (“Afterthoughts”, working title) here sometimes, if you are interested. I’d recommend starting at the beginning of the forum if you feel like reading. No pressure, just if you are interested! Critiques are…[Read more]

@orielle21

Oh! I really liked that. I wouldn’t change a thing! It seems like the kind of story you read when you need a pick me up. Low stakes, but still lots of fun, and the time travel thing makes it extra interesting!

I think that was what I was kind of thinking in my head, I just couldn’t put words to it. 😅

@orielle21

Fun story! I agree with @mineralizedwritings :

It seems like the kind of story you read when you need a pick me up. Low stakes, but still lots of fun, and the time travel thing makes it extra interesting!

Oof, the dialogue thing like @esther-c mentioned can be hard . . . I struggle with making it natural as well. (That’s what happens…[Read more]

@orielle21  @felicity

I am three years older. 😉 Lol. Sorry for the confusion. We just wanted to have some fun with it, as @felicity explained. *grins and looks at @felicity, who is on her laptop (LOL)* XD XD

LOL LOL that’s hilarious. My sister and I joined KP at the same time, otherwise we probably would have done something similar 🤣🤣 At first the…[Read more]

@orielle21 No, I’ve never read that! What’s it about?

@orielle21

Yeah! If the stakes are low, that means there’s not much at stake.

High stakes would be if somebody was at risk of dyeing or permanent damage.

Doesn’t seem like anyone going to die here XD

@orielle21

Oh, and I like the pic you chose for Joel XD

@orielle21

Oh! I really liked that. I wouldn’t change a thing! It seems like the kind of story you read when you need a pick me up. Low stakes, but still lots of fun, and the time travel thing makes it extra interesting! I felt like you did a really good job moving between the dialogue and the narrated sections.

Thanks for the great read!

@orielle21

I enjoyed it!! It was cute and simple!!

But for some critiques, here’s what I thought:

So, I noticed that the kids are going to school. But it’s Christmastime. So that would be weird if they were going to school that close to Christmas Day.

Secondly, I felt as if the dialogue was unnatural. So to help with the flow of dialogue, I s…[Read more]