A Short Christmas Story…Critiques Appreciated

[Orielle2023]

@mineralizedwritings

If the stakes are low, that means there’s not much at stake.

Thanks for explaining. I probably should have used common sense but just wanted to make sure.

 

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[Orielle2023]

@arien

That’s a good point about reading old books and it influencing how dialogue forms in your stories…I guess it makes a lot of sense that what you read will have an impact on how you write…maybe???

Keep up the good work! I want to read more. I also like your characters’ pictures. Looks like James was having a bad day LOL 🤣

Thanks for the tips and encouragement. I am looking forward to sharing more. I stayed up late last night looking over a longer story that I plan to post in a few parts.

And poor James….he hates having his picture taken and only Jessica can make him laugh. 😍

 

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[Orielle2023]

@esther-c

I think that was what I was kind of thinking in my head, I just couldn’t put words to it. 😅

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[Koshka]

@orielle21

Fun story, and great job! I liked your Bensnickle (Or however his name is spelled). Writing wise there aren’t very many things I’d tweak.

But, do you want critique on the history side of things?

First Grand Historian of Arreth and the Lesser Realms (aka Kitty)

[Orielle2023]

@koshka

But, do you want critique on the history side of things?

Sure!
FYI I got my info from The Battle for Christmas by Stephen Nissenbaum, in particular pages 99-101.

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