A Short Christmas Story…Critiques Appreciated

[Orielle2023]

@mineralizedwritings

If the stakes are low, that means there’s not much at stake.

Thanks for explaining. I probably should have used common sense but just wanted to make sure.

 

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[Orielle2023]

@arien

That’s a good point about reading old books and it influencing how dialogue forms in your stories…I guess it makes a lot of sense that what you read will have an impact on how you write…maybe???

Keep up the good work! I want to read more. I also like your characters’ pictures. Looks like James was having a bad day LOL ?

Thanks for the tips and encouragement. I am looking forward to sharing more. I stayed up late last night looking over a longer story that I plan to post in a few parts.

And poor James….he hates having his picture taken and only Jessica can make him laugh. ?

 

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[Orielle2023]

@esther-c

I think that was what I was kind of thinking in my head, I just couldn’t put words to it. ?

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[Koshka]

@orielle21

Fun story, and great job! I liked your Bensnickle (Or however his name is spelled). Writing wise there aren’t very many things I’d tweak.

But, do you want critique on the history side of things?

A cup of tea is cheaper than therapy.

[Orielle2023]

@koshka

But, do you want critique on the history side of things?

Sure!
FYI I got my info from The Battle for Christmas by Stephen Nissenbaum, in particular pages 99-101.

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