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@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @grcr

12/28/24

Section 1.

(hopefully that will make it easier for anyone behind to organize these parts.) 😉

if this section was too long, then I can cut them down. Just let me know.

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The next morning, Joseph awoke to the banging of the back do…

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@freed_and_redeemed

This is good! I like this scene!

Wait, hang on……. you got him stuck there and now you don’t know what to do?!?!

Haha…… I may or may not have done that to a character before………

Honestly, George doesn’t seem very stable at the moment, If Riker gets out of the room and George follows and trips over something…[Read more]

@smiley

Hey girl good to see you back!

“I wasn’t created by Stark or Ultorn I am… I am” which as a Christian I know is a nod to the Old Testament when God tells Moses to tell the Israelites “I Am sent you”

if he actually says that then that’s kinda offensive lol. I think I might remember him saying ‘I am who I am’ but I can’t remember. Yeesh.

@liberty

Gotcha. Wow. It’s so sad writing about villains…especially their background. Does…*gulp* Hans have any redemption later on? *hopeful eyes*

I’m afraid not 😔

What @ellette-giselle said about him having several chances and accepting none of them is correct

@ellette-giselle @rae @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @keilah-h @mineralizedwritings @theducktator @grcr @anyone-else

Not quite sure where to take this scene after where it ends, so if anyone has any ideas, pls let me know😅

a scene snippet from Book #3 🤫 I didn’t realize these characters I spontaneously came up with would play a bigger role in…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint lol that raccoon

@linus-smallprint

You’re very welcome.

Also, why does that racoon picture have an expression that so fits what I know of you? lolololol.

@linus-smallprint

I have the same thought as Hybrid here. Beric has not only been independent for a while now, but he is also a teen. I’m glad you included the scene of his struggle to listen.

Thanks. It actually wasn’t in the first or second draft. I had a reference made to it in the third, but I thought I should flush it out into a full s…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Sounds good!

I’ll see if I can get at least one of your new sections done today.

Wonderful!! Thanks! Looking forward to it!

@linus-smallprint

Also, what about Andrew Peterson’s Carry the Fire? We both agreed on that one.

Okay yeah, we did. That one is a great song.

Oh, looks like you mentioned the editor question. Ignore my second offer. I thought you might have missed it.Glad you found a good person for the job!

😉

@linus-smallprint

I don’t know how to send doc. links. so, here are my answers.

The Narrow Path Trilogy: Book One – The Cost Feedback Questions

Character

~ Which character(s) did you find the most compelling/relatable/believable and why?

Alan. Because he was the redemption character, and I LOVE redemption characters. If you look at my…[Read more]

@whalekeeper yess Tyn is awesome

IDK why, I just like her.

Oliver is my other favorite but that’s probably cause he’s an Australian lizard and you know how I feel about both of those things.

@linus-smallprint

I’d give you cake, but that would be a lie, and then I’d end up being sued by GLaDOS, and that is a fight I can’t win, so sorry. I hope you had a good birthday though!

Portal mention eeeeeeee

I haven’t played the games yet (I like puzzle games) but I like listening to their soundtracks. They’re so weird and synth-y.

@linus-smallprint

Will keep questions in mind 👍

Glad to hear! Tyn was a character I didn’t like much in the first draft and I was considering changing her a lot until I got near the end of it and she went through some really interesting character development. I think in the draft two versions I understood her more.

I think she’s really fun, but I…[Read more]

@rae @theshadow

I’m going to guess neither of you minds what happens 😛

Barnes

Her sight flooding back to her, Barnes found one of her wrists was held by one of the magical tendrils. Her other hand was free, and Reid was recovering from a hit to the face.

In front of them, the snake lay on the ground. Its eyes faded from blue to a cloudy…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

My sister managed to get away with one-word answers for the questions I did for my first draft

lol. That sounds like my brother.

I’m on it. Give me one sec….

@liberty

one older brother

LUCKYYYYYYY!!!!! That’s why I like Phil so much. He’s my fictional older brother.

I’m the oldest with two younger brothers and a younger sister.

My friend actually had Summer of Suspense and lent it to me. I liked it so much I looked up the author to see if she wrote anything else, and then I discovered it was…[Read more]

@liberty

OH IT IS SO GOOD!

You must read it!

You won’t be able to put it down. It is stressful!!!

(Peder is my favorite character by the way.)

@liberty

No! I’ve never been to Highland games. That sounds AMAZING!

Have you?

My dad has the German. Our last name is actually German, and I look very German, though my brothers take after the highlander and irish side.

@hybridlore

Mainly just feedback. I have an actually editor who can catch typos, but if you see anything then you can mention it.

I hope Amelia doesn’t die.

Oh dear.

That would be an interesting twist—if everyone thinks she’s going to have the plague, but then she really ends up having a baby. But we shall see.

Hmm, it would be.…[Read more]