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@the_lost-journal awww that’s cute!

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @hybridlore @the_lost-journal

Okay, well here’s the first chapter. I’m not a huge fan of it, but the other draft first chapter wasn’t great either. So critiques are definitely appreciated.

Chapter 1

“You ever wondered what it would be like to leave Rosen?”

Elina’s eyebrows shot up, “Why? Do you intend to?”
“I…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Thanks, it’ll be a little creepy, though it’s not the main focus.

@keilah-h

Lol thank you.

@the_lost-journal

🤨

@keilah-h

Cool, lol. I’ll probably have him in the back of my mind now every time I write with my Emmerich XD.

@liberty

Sounds good.

@hybridlore

It looks great! This was a cool idea. I think you did a good job inserting a theme into such a tiny paragraph. Out of curiosity, how much do you have left in the word count?

Thanks!! Oh yes, that was so hard! I was going to keep it lighthearted and goofy, and then I was like, Hold on. And tried something a little different. 😛

Ummm… a…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

Wow, that was creepy. I guess I don’t like horror. But it was pretty well-written, I think. It was cool how you tied the ending into the beginning.

If you want feedback faster in the future, I would tag people, otherwise your post gets buried underneath all the other topics and we have to go scrolling for it. Although, if you e…[Read more]

@theducktator

Lolol! I would ask @jonas since he’s the leader of the Adventure one. I don’t know who’s in charge of the others… I’m sure @whalekeeper would know.

@esther-c

It looks great! This was a cool idea. I think you did a good job inserting a theme into such a tiny paragraph. Out of curiosity, how much do you have left in the word count?

Also, are you planning to add a name at the top?

@linus-smallprint

i really love the direction.

character development seems good and solid. But it’s hard to know that from just reading an outline.

again, it all depends on how you play it, but I was feeling Eustace and dragon change more than Kalmar and wolf. (Even though it is a wolf) I think you’re fine and should go for it. I can let you…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

I like this much better. I feel more comfortable, but it also plays into the allegory style better. (At least  in my opinion)

my only suggestion (besides fine combing because there were a few typos) is old be this paragraph.

I do not know what Alan thought as he used the spell, so instead of telling you that, let’s say he in…

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That’s not my art btw…..lol

And this is them in “modern” times (that is, at the time the story takes place)

Kinda surprised no one threw in a joke about these guys aging badly. Apart from Old Heavy, at least, who’s not shown in this picture but basically looks like the version above with gray hair instead of black.

For context, here’s his squad if you weren’t familiar with them. This is them when they were younger and the main team fighting.

@rae @theshadow

Kinda random, but I wasn’t sure where else to ask this cause it technically is a drawing-related question: What did you guys imagine Old Hunter to be like? Did you have a specific appearance in mind for him when you read about him?

I was thinking of drawing him interrogating Huntress as an illustration for the fanfic, and I…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint   @keilah-h

thank you both for the sympathy and prayers!!

Great timing!

thank you!! I was proud of that one. 😂

oh dear! I hope you end up liking Roland then. 😅

I promise it was completely coincidental.
this time.

@calyhuge it do be like that though

lol

@esther-c you’re welcome!!

@grcr

No worries!! :))

@elishavet-pidyon

Lol! Frfr 🤣