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@elishavet-pidyon @whalekeeper @loopylin

“He gave the kids who had spoken to Viktor a cold look”

I want to see a book where when a character does that it actually makes ice start growing on the other person. Just something that comes to me when I see that phrase.

@grcr

How do you feel about another character, or you want a break?

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TWO NEW CHAPTERS!!

@grcr cool!! Can’t wait to see it when the image thingy works.

It’s okay if it took a while.

The plan was 10 pages, and I only wrote 4. *Sigh* I feel like the problem with short stories is, I can never fall in love with them unless I get into the nitty-gritty details of a scene, which isn’t great if I want to draft the whole thing in one night. Done for now, will continue.

@hybridlore

I know. It was so cute!!

My poor boys! They are in a sure fix.

Nonlinear stories are so hard. 🙁 Why am I writing this? My brain is tied into knots right now.

@liberty

Same here…

Drafting a short story. :15

@ellette-giselle

Aww! Jonathan and Amber and Leo were so cute. 🥰

Poor 618. And 621. That government! 😡

@koshka @keilah-h @elishavet-pidyon @theducktator @grcr @whalekeeper @power @hybridlore @liberty

TWO NEW CHAPTERS!!

@whalekeeper
Okay awesome! That is not really a feeling I want you to have. XD

@whalekeeper HAHAHA

it is though

Researching other ethnic backgrounds feels so much harder than I want it to be. So many different places, so many different people.

@ellette-giselle

Thank you very much!

Of course! *Tips hat*

That was really helpful about the description thing. I think that makes more sense. I wonder too if I over-did the “buzz” words in dystopian literature because I was trying to cut down on description. XD I’ll totally look at that.

I get that. Descriptive words have so many different quali…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Yay! I’m glad you liked it! Yep, Jonathan and Michael are back!

@ellette-giselle

Yay! Jonathan and Michael are back!!

These were great chapters. I can’t wait for 618 (Rory?) to meet the rebellion. (I’m assuming that will happen, anyway.)

@liberty, I think they were your comments? I really hope you’re wrong about Michael dying. 🥺😢

@liberty

lol. Well good.

@liberty

Ooo yay! So glad!

Yes… I did…. (I have an aspiring pilot of a brother with pilot friends, so yes. XD) but I also invented this plane so I have a little leeway.

why, did something stand out that seemed incorrect?

I was going to share my thoughts, but then this thread would start to become redundant, lol! I pretty much agree with what everyone else has said. And as for the passage people keep referencing about food offered to idols and becoming a stumbling block, that’s 1 Corinthians 8.