Loopy

@rae

I like this a lot!! This section is good. I was trying to remember what happened beforehand. So far the stories have flowed, even though they are individual stories. This one seems a little out of place regarding the last one.

otherwise, i like this!!

@ellette-giselle @hybridlore @whalekeeper @keilah-h

Sorry for not posting in eight days. I hit Writer’s Block while trying to edit the next story to go on here and writing the next one 🙁

I’m not sure how long until I can post the full thing, but until then, I’m gonna post a snippet of the next…[Read more]

@keilah-h

Kinda random, but I wasn’t sure where else to ask this cause it technically is a drawing-related question: What did you guys imagine Old Hunter to be like? Did you have a specific appearance in mind for him when you read about him?

I think I imagined him looking like Sniper exactly older and some things off with his appearance like m…[Read more]

@liberty

Thank you!!

@keilah-h

Indeed lol.

@hybridlore

The first three chapters are pretty short because I wasn’t too invested in them lol.

Thank you so much for the critiques, I 100% agree with all of them. I used telling in this specifically because I didn’t know what to write to make it longer, so I’ll try using the suggestions for showi…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

awesome! Glad I could be of help.

I think we’re all a little defensive of our stuff. 😂

I remember when you kept criticizing Aaron I was crushed because he’s a lot like me and I felt like you were criticizing me and saying I was a cardboard cutout. It took a few weeks for me to separate myself from him and see your cri…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint you’re welcome! Looking forward to book 2!

@theducktator RIP pennies.

Although I heard the reason was because copper and zinc and whatever else they were using to make ’em was getting too expensive for a coin whose value is 1 cent.

@theshadow

I really like this chapter! Everything critical I was going to say @hybridlore already covered.

I really enjoy these characters. I like how Jack sticks up for his sister, and I’m eager to find out what happens and where Elina got her scar!

make sure to keep tagging me because I’m really enjoying this.

and those girls giving her a h…[Read more]

@theshadow

Sorry it took me a day to get back to you. Even though you said you didn’t like this first chapter much, I think it has potential. It introduces the characters and their world pretty well. It is a very short chapter. Is that normal throughout the book, or is this the exception? It’s fine to have shorter chapters, but I think it might…[Read more]

@esther-c Gotcha! A P.S. would be fun, but it might lessen the impact of the ending, so it depends on what you do. As it is right now, it doesn’t scream “actual letter” to me. It’s kind of like a thank-you-note (not exactly, but I don’t know how else to explain it.) or just a note. With a word count as short as yours, that’s fine, but maybe it’d…[Read more]

@theshadow hmmmm….Interesting! we’ll have to see where it goes.

My drawing from two days ago turned into a sort of comic. My favorite part is for some reason the feathers flying around the sound effect.

I was gonna say “slight unrealistic blood warning” then I realized my camera barely picked it up lol

Gonna use it as an illustration for my fic, specifically this scene:

…we sprinted past the window,…

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@loopylin yesss I remember those!!

@theshadow lol they’re nothing like each other but hey, that works.

@the_lost-journal funny enough I don’t find those guy names ugly.

They make me think of grumpy old men, but not necessarily in an “ugly” kinda way.

@the_lost-journal awww that’s cute!

@ellette-giselle @keilah-h @hybridlore @the_lost-journal

Okay, well here’s the first chapter. I’m not a huge fan of it, but the other draft first chapter wasn’t great either. So critiques are definitely appreciated.

Chapter 1

“You ever wondered what it would be like to leave Rosen?”

Elina’s eyebrows shot up, “Why? Do you intend to?”
“I…[Read more]

@hybridlore

Thanks, it’ll be a little creepy, though it’s not the main focus.

@keilah-h

Lol thank you.

@the_lost-journal

🤨

@keilah-h

Cool, lol. I’ll probably have him in the back of my mind now every time I write with my Emmerich XD.

@liberty

Sounds good.

@hybridlore

It looks great! This was a cool idea. I think you did a good job inserting a theme into such a tiny paragraph. Out of curiosity, how much do you have left in the word count?

Thanks!! Oh yes, that was so hard! I was going to keep it lighthearted and goofy, and then I was like, Hold on. And tried something a little different. 😛

Ummm… a…[Read more]