Liberty

@mineralizedwritings

Me like it! The armor and clothing is PERFECT. The face is a little unclear, but yeah, WAY to often I’ve ruined a picture trying to “make it better”. XD

@anyone

What would you guys like to see me draw? You’ve seen ONE drawing and my style is realistic (mostly), and I will take offers to draw someone else’s character if…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009 @esther-c @mineralizedwritings @rae @acancello

Kari

A bang from the basement drew Kari’s attention to the basement door. What could that noise be? A gunshot? Her stomach twisted into a knot, and as she looked around the room, she realized Ottoline was missing, and come to think of it, so was that new girl. Alarm bells rang in…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

So I read your epilogue and a few things stuck out to me…

(ordered by relevance)

1. I love it.

2. In the first part I almost think you use the Name ‘Great One’ a little to much.

3. While Rishona may grow angry, I doubt in such a perfect world she would try to slap someone with no respect. If Elysium is perfect, and the…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

Explain what a RP is to me and I’ll do it. I really need to jog my brain!

@savannah_grace2009

Thanks, but I feel like it’s to, to…undescriptive? I don’t know. It just doesn’t seem Nahim. It seems wrong, somehow.

@euodia-vision

Pretty much. (Along with plotting a new WIP for NaNo… 😏)

Good! I’ve been editing directly on the doc, but I think I’m going to print it out and edit it by hand. That might help me see things better.

Honestly, the style seems like I didn’t even write it.

@savannah_grace2009 @hybridlore @esther-c @whoever-else

There is something really wrong with this scene. I can’t figure it out at all. Help!

“I told you not to go anywhere.” Mandin was half-laughing.

Nahim turned around suddenly, forgetting his helmet rested in the flowers beside him. Mandin froze, a look of shock in his features.

“What is th…

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@aranel

Wait…I just saw you like purple and blue…Purple is my fAVORITE COLOR! Ever since I can remember.

I adore cats too, but horses steal my heart. I own seven cats at the moment.

I like to write fantasy and sci-fi. A historical fiction one day, but not yet. My WIP is sci-fi.

Pe-CONS

Am I the only one in the world who pronounces it…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I shall begin reading, but I can’t promise I’ll have tons of time to read all of it now. Thanks for the link!

P. S.

Don’t worry about the number of chapters, I myself have only gotten to about ten on my current draft!

@aranel

Sorry I’m late to the greeting party.

Call me Ru or Ruee. I’m a stubborn blue-eyed girl who has way too many characters, and story ideas swirling around in her head.

Questions…

1 what genre do you like to write?

2 how do you pronounce the word ‘pecans?’

3 do you like horses? If so, what’s your favorite gait?

4 what’s your WIP…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I like that a lot better! It’s really up to you, though. Rae had some good feedback!

@savannah_grace2009 @esther-c @whoever (I never know who to tag.)

NAHIM

Everyone before had seemed to see him as some scary monster with that sword in his hand, and when he had tried to cut down the door it had gotten worse.

Now he had let his sword dangle limp from its usual place on his belt. He had set his helmet beside himself on the floor,…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

I must be as blind as a bat!

Okay, I just read your revision of that last part and…I am never allowing you to change it. I have not had the same expierances as Sef, but I see myself in her. Sara, you’ve got this.

@savannah_grace2009

I get what you mean by clunky, I often feel like I have the same problem. Thses are the parts I think are the most in need of a little bit…

The air was pleasantly cold, nipping the tip of Sef’s nose as she walked in step with Lilitu. The sound of leaves crunching beneath their feet as they walked gave her a pleasant t…

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@savannah_grace2009

Aw, thanks! I love their friendship, too. I want to set up some more scenarios with the two of them.

@trailblazer

Yayy! Looks good! I don’t mind the summary kind of telling, I think it works well for this story.

@savannah_grace2009 @hybridlore

It’s been a bit since I posted more of my story, so here’s the next little bit. It’s a little fragmented and summary-ish in spots, but it’s what I’ve got lol.

As the fall months passed, Bert Hawley began courting Clara. Clara’s mood brightened considerably, and she willingly did household chores and helped in t…[Read more]

@loopylin

Sorry about the paragraphs, I have gone through and shortened them after people mentioned it. it should be easier to follow now.

Um…really whatever strikes you as needs changing. I often get comments from my friends like “It’s good.” “I really like it.” et cetera et cetera. Honestly, I get tired of hearing that, so if you got some…[Read more]