Liberty

@rae

aw, I love his getting to know the horse.

BUT WHAT HAPPENED! HOW COULD YOU LEAVE US ON A CLIFFHANGER LIKE THAT? CRUEL!!!

@whalekeeper @ellette-giselle

Here’s your Baron scene. I’m sorry that it’s so rough.

After they had eaten, Andy took him outside, showing him about the barn, instructing him on basic duties, and telling him about the animals.

As Andy was talking about the cows, a brown horse with a white blaze trotted over to the paddock fence and whinnied. Andy…

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AHHH ELLETTE YOU SAVED THEM!!!

I was always going to. I was just having too much fun teasing you! lol.

How stressed were you? Did you think I was going to kill him?

AND IT’S DONE!! CONGRATULATIONS!!

Thank you!!!

Biggest thing I noticed, is that, in the end where Joseph and Amelia are talking,… seemed a little bit like i…

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@ellette-giselle

AHHH ELLETTE YOU SAVED THEM!!!

AND IT’S DONE!! CONGRATULATIONS!! (I know this is a later draft, but still xD)

Biggest thing I noticed, is that, in the end where Joseph and Amelia are talking, some of the things that they say, “I’m so glad that… etc.” seemed a little bit like info-dumping. It’s good for us to have all that in…[Read more]

@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @grcr

OKAY!

Well, thank you very much to any of y’all who survived all the way to the end. I’m excited to hear y’alls thoughts and I’m looking forward to lost of feedback. Here are some questions that I had. (I may have looked at your file for some question st…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

Woah! You’re signature quote! I love it! Do you know who said that, or is the author unknown?

@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @grcr

The hours passed, but there was little dread in them for Joseph. Beric slept most of the time, and when Joseph laid a hand against the boy’s forehead, he found it was still hot with fever. His own eyes burned, and he was sure Stephen was little better.

Afte…

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@theducktator

Sorry, didn’t get tagged! 😒

That does sound like fun! We always stay up till midnight too—last night we had a bunch of neighbor kids over, so we watched some YouTube videos and then played some games until midnight. I don’t think I’ve made any resolutions… but we’ll see, there’s still time.

@highscribeofaetherium

Ooo fun! First trip of 2025!

haha! I also go to bed at a decently early time. Eleven was LATE.

@highscribeofaetherium

Afraid not. I danced until eleven and then went to bed so I could still be up early. I slept in until 6:00

@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @grcr

well, it’s 2025, but I have one section left to post, so I think I kinda did it….. in a kinda didn’t way. lolololol.

Keep an eye out as I shall be posting THE END of TVON today!

2025!!!!!

HAPPY NEW YEAR!!!!!

Happy Almost New Year! What are you guys up to?

@keilah-h

Aww, your relationship with your brother sounds so sweet.

@elishavet-pidyon

Same—we played with our stuffed animals too. We had maybe thirty of them between us, and they all belonged to a “pack” with an alpha, and a beta, etc. (Me and my sister were Erin Hunter fans.) We acted out whole storylines—probably enough to fill a novel xD.

@ellette-giselle

Wow, that’s really cool. Definitely keep them in then.

@keilah-h

Yes, it’s supposed to be fictionalized early church. I read Foxes Book of Martyrs, The Martyrs Mirror, and Acts before I wrote these, so I draw a lot out of those. In fact, a lot of the situations are real from real people’s accounts.

@hybridlore

Some I wrote, some are old, old hymns from the underground church.

@hybridlore

Thank you so much for the feedback! I loved this! It’s super helpful.

Side note: interestingly enough, you said that the second book is your least favorite, while I’ve preferred it so far to the first one. We’ll see how the third and fourth compare.

You know what, Aaron will always be my favorite character, but I’m growing to lik…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Wait, you wrote the hymns? I thought you had just pasted them in. 😳

(There’s a lot of hymns I’m not familiar with, since we don’t normally sing them at my church.)

@keilah-h

same! It hurts! But I like to keep the story real.

@ellette-giselle

I finished! (And the art for the cover is really cool.) I gave answering those questions a shot, even though you might be past the point of feedback, I figured you might want to hear what I thought.

Were the characters believable?

For the most part, yes. At times, there was somewhat stilted (slightly forced seeming, or maybe a…[Read more]