Liberty

Yessss! I’m in! Now that the holidays are over, I should be able to get back into a normal routine of writing again. (:

@jonas @loopylin @highscribeofaetherium

I’m gonna warn ya’ll (I know I spell that wrong, but that’s how I pronounce it so…) That Junior is getting on edge, I can feel him getting angry. Oh, and btw, when Junior gets angry, he starts dangerously throwing knives.

Nahim Jr.

“I’m afraid that boots are not allowed in this dance practice. You w…[Read more]

@whalekeeper

If Calvin asks around, he might eventually discover Chase was the last one with him, and then ✨drama✨

Ooooh…I like that idea!

@jonas @highscribeofaetherium

Nahim Jr.

“You watch it, Hugo!” Junior yelled, clearly agitated. He caught Nar giving him a “don’t do it” look. He leaned against the doorframe, crossing his arms and…[Read more]

@jonas @highscribeofaetherium

Nahim Jr.

“Yeah, I kill my own victims. I’m Nahim Nayhelm Jr., what else do you expect? A Warrior is the one who goes to war.”

@highscribeofaetherium

Nahim Jr.

“No, I have my own knives, my own wrist, and my own talent of being an elite. I kill my own victims.”

@highscribeofaetherium @jonas

Nahim Jr

“Barely any time! I spend my day sparring with Onyx and getting beatup, while I practise! What else is there to do?!”

@jonas @highscribeofaetherium

Nahim Jr.

Jr scowled at knew arrival. Jaz trilled.

“Sorry, I left my nice boots at home.” He turned back to the first lady.

“I ask because…wait, are you like my sis and only practise two hours a day?”

@highscribeofaetherium

Nahim Jr.

Jr grabbed her wrist steadying the knife.

“Can you throw that and hit a target dead center at fifty paces?”

@highscribeofaetherium

He was created in a lab, and had many injections as a young child. Because of this, he’s mentally sensitive. It’s actually one of his greatest fears.

Nahim Jr.

“A dragon. What else?”

@highscribeofaetherium

Because of Alpha’s background, he’s fine with sewing pins and needles but medical needles for shots make him go mad. That’s why Nar has knock out pills in her bag.

Nahim Jr. 

“This is Jaz.” Jaz trilled warmly, contrasting Jr’s cold words. She twitched her tail and looked longingly at the woman with her viridian hue eyes,…[Read more]

BTW everyone, Nahim really does not like being an emperor’s son often, and wishes he had a physical or mental disability. He also turns into a different person around medical needles. He almost goes mad around them.

@highscribeofaetherium

Nahim Jr.

“Seriously people!” Jr stared at her with his red eyes. “I don’t care about broken toes and silly rules. I’m not enrolled, and I may do what I like, the upside of being an emperor’s son.”

@highscribeofaetherium

He also has hidden knives and an unregistered dragon pet on his shoulder and back.

Not in armor.

@highscribeofaetherium

Also, Junior is by the door wearing boots too if you want your charrie to meet him.

@highscribeofaetherium

Like a horse. It’s a smell I can’t describe. Some hate, some love it, I find it pleasant. It’s a smell that doesn’t yell “Shepherd” like a goat or sheep smell, it yells instead “barn”.

@whalekeeper

I didn’t cry, but I had a sudden urge to find Marcel, give him a hug and just be with him.

Now I’m wondering if there is anyway Chase could find Marcel, because Chase has an urge to apologize. Like, an urge so deep that it’s one of the first things I feel when I put on his character cloak. But…I’m afraid that’s not possible rn, at…[Read more]

@trailblazer

Thanks! Yeah, I figured it was pretty obvious, lol. I wasn’t really trying to hide it.. I guess I was more concerned with telling the story than surprising the reader. And I’m sure most of us have read other stuff with basically the exact same plot, so it wasn’t exactly surprising anyway.

Got it, I’ll fix that. Thanks!

@hybridlore

Overall, it’s pretty good! Like Jonas said, I figured out right away who the king was, and I also recognized the allegorical elements pretty quickly, but I don’t think that’s a bad thing.

I also agree that the ending (as it was in your first post) was pretty abrupt and confusing. I think the changes you made helped!

The last thing…[Read more]

@loopylin

Yeah I think that can count! That is a good movie!

@esther-c

My grandparents used to give ornaments to each of us grandkids every year! They stopped once we reached a certain age, and started giving us money instead. I liked getting ornaments but it did fill up our tree lol.