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@hybridlore

I’m like 95% sure they’re going to survive.

Wow.

This is all that came to mind.

@keilah-h

It’s a girl.

@ellette-giselle

Haha! I like Aelic too, but I really liked how you put us more in Julian’s mind than we normally get to be.

I’m like 95% sure they’re going to survive.

@linus-smallprint

I don’t need no Literary License.

I think so. It’s still early in the book. You could kill them all off and switch to a different character at this point as the protagansit, but that would be really weird as you have already established Leon and Julian as the protagonists.

hmmm.

@linus-smallprint

For the reason Leon mentioned. Reflexes happening faster than recognition.

Aha. Makes sense.

From this description, first the yelling and banging, then coming down to see everyone else only just standing there, I thought there was a riot outside. So I was surprised to learn that it was only snow and that there had been no…

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@hybridlore

Oh!

well this is a surprise.

First off, I had expected wails of protest.

Secondly, I was expecting comments about Aelic’s character, so the Julian remark totally threw me off. 😂

Thanks though!

@ellette-giselle

Love this section! You did a great job of bringing in Julian’s character and his thoughts, like when he remembered the burning building. Their last exchange is so funny. XD

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New chapters on the Part 2 doc!

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The next morning, Julian woke to the sound of voices and banging. He leapt to his feet and yanked on his boots. Leon was already pulling on his hat and beat him into the other room.

When Julian arrived, he found Marti…

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@linus-smallprint

I think you are pacing this well for a return journey

Phew. Thanks. 😅

Sneaky. But not wise.

why?

😁

@ellette-giselle

I feel like they’re not going to be happy. Particularly with Aelic.

@hybridlore

why?

@ellette-giselle

I’m worried for Aelic…

@hybridlore

yay!

why? what are you worried about?

@ellette-giselle

Ahh! I love it! I’m glad they decided to go back to the village, but… 😬

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Leon, Julian, Rolf, Aelic, and Roland remained with Heinrich and Johannes at the University for five days. It was a wonderful time of fellowship and encouragement for them all. The companions would have liked to stay lon…

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@ellette-giselle

Thank you! 😊

@keilah-h

Thanks! It’s actually a joust of sorts. The prince and his companion were at the tilting yard with a seasoned knight. Something just went horribly wrong, and Deniz is going to try to stop a galloping horse.

@ellette-giselle

Okay!

@elishavet-pidyon

WOW!!!

THAT IS STUNNING! I love the perspective and the action.