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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 2 months ago
I’m just trying to be super careful that I’m still honoring God with my writing. And I’m also paranoid about my writing XD
I’d say so far you’ve hit the nail on the head.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 2 months ago
But question– do you think it’s too dark?
Nope, not at all. I think I did worse in Against All Odds. (The one I’ve been posting snippets of in the Chat Chat) It’s good. I say keep it for sure! I mean, they did it in Wingfeather and no one complained about those books being too dark. Annnnd they did it in Green Ember, taking all…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 2 months ago
Oh man, this is gonna get rough. Not much to say yet. Sorry!!! I’m more of a plot critic then format critic. I’m still waiting to see how this all plays out.
Thanks for reading this because it keeps me from slacking off when people are expecting new chapters XD
SAME!!! And btw, did I tag you on Let There Be Light’s…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 2 years, 2 months ago
Thanks!! I’ll add that to my notes. Although, Turin isn’t really one for questions. Or talking. At all.
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic WIP: Let There Be Light, Book 1 of The Flames of Hope Trilogy in the forum Novel Idea Critiques 2 years, 2 months ago
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Ruth replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 2 months ago
@savannah_grace2009 @loopylin @whalekeeper
exactly. If I am portraying it wrong, I need to change it. I just don’t want to change it yet because something has changed inside of Chase, and I need to figure out what it is first. That was what I was trying to say.
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Ruth replied to the topic Art Challenge! in the forum Art 2 years, 2 months ago
Are you ready to post a description?
I’m sorry, I’m just excited to draw one of your charries 🙂
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 2 months ago
Ok then. You asked for it!!
Jonathan’s eyes widened in terror and his face went white. He had expected imprisonment and perhaps more interrogations. His mind had already been working through all the escape tactics he knew of. Now, he stopped short. Death? The thought had never crossed his mind. It was in that moment that Jonathan…
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Character Sketches in the forum Art 2 years, 2 months ago
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Hi! in the forum Start HERE 2 years, 2 months ago
Was competently blindsided. *picks slef up out of dirt and dusts off* “I feel like Calvin”
And as you love Peter Pevensie (from the BOOKS), and Smalden, draw beautifully, and like skirts, I feel an unavoidable obligation to join the welcoming team. So I shall have to make the most of it.
Aw, thank you! I’m so glad you like my…[Read more]
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic NEW and IMPROVED WIP!!!!! in the forum Novel Critique Requests 2 years, 2 months ago
Interesting plot turn! Looks like Sef and her mom are gonna have a forbidden child…… Interesting. I don’t have much to say yet. I would like to see how some of this starts panning out. I’m definitely intrigued enough to keep reading!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic Art Challenge! in the forum Art 2 years, 2 months ago
Um no. Oh wait, I can’t say that ’cause it’s Monday. 🙁 lol.
Well, It’s Monday! I’m ready!!! Shoot!
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Ellette Giselle replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 2 months ago
@princesachronicle22 @hybridlore @grcr @koshka
Ok. Wow, I’m off for one day and the whole world tags me. You should see my inbox!!! lol. Ok, because I don’t want to go back and weed through who said what, I’m just tagging y’all who tagged me and replying to the world in general.
So, for the cover, it looks like I’ll be doing style seven.…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 2 months ago
@loopylin @whalekeeper @savannah_grace2009
I blame all of you for the lack of sleep last night XD. Seriously, what Loopy said had me thinking.
I understand your concerns, but as of now, I’m not going to change anything with Chase and just keep him going on the path I have laid so far. The reason is there’s something different in Chase. I haven’t…[Read more]
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Ruth replied to the topic Couple RP! in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 2 months ago
Sure! Come join us!
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Jaybird replied to the topic Hi! in the forum Start HERE 2 years, 2 months ago
Welcome to the Kingdom of Pen!
I know this is an exceptionally late ambush, but when you asked what we did on here other than ambush newbies, I realized this is one thing I haven’t done in a while. And as you love Peter Pevensie (from the BOOKS), and Smalden, draw beautifully, and like skirts, I feel an unavoidable obligation to…[Read more]
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Koshka replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 2 months ago
I like number 7 best I think. The title feels like it is part of the picture.
Jonathan, you reckless, courageous, foolish kid. What did you think you were doing? (I think you’d get a long just fine with Vulkasin to the rest of the world’s danger)
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Esther replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 2 months ago
Aww, I loved it!!
The only thing I’d recommend is to really deepen Chase’s pov, especially after he gives up his sight. Because it still felt like he could see with the way things were described. I think if you describe it in the way in which Chase was experiencing it, then it will have a much bigger impact.
Other than that it was good! (:
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Ruth replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 2 months ago
I feel like the blindness bit was too much? I mean for Chase to give up his sight as well as his mobility. It’s too on-the-nose for Chase’s character, since he often gets marked with physical things like scars, stuttering, and the mobility thing. I felt less sorry for him, and more “oh okay that happened.”Idk, it felt like waaaaay…
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Ruth replied to the topic The Chat Chat in the forum General Writing Discussions 2 years, 2 months ago
@freed_and_redeemed @savannah_grace2009 I have a Chase scene for you
@whalekeeper @loopylin @grcr @theducktator @esther-c @kielah-h @theshadow @ellette-giselle @anyone
I have a really sweet but sad Chase scene. For context, this is after Chase’s last battle with Narsa Jeptune.
oh, and beware, I’ve barely edited this. Criticism welcome 🙂
Chase…
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