Liberty

@rae

Great section!! 💕

@liberty

 

Ooh…we’re getting to see a little bit of Leon’s past!

YES!

Any thoughts on that?

No, they moved into the University for the winter. I mentioned it at one point, but you may have missed it. 😉

@liberty

I LOVE IT!!!

So excited!

@stephie

absulutly.

It just really matters how you go about saying that. If we are to speak truth and proclaim Jesus, that means we need to discredit false gods. God is not One among many. There is only ONE.

But yeah, it depends on how you go about doing so and if you’re antagonistic about it or do it in a loving and kind way. And again,…[Read more]

@savannah_grace2009

🤣🤣

Also, I’m so sorry I haven’t been reading! Life has been WILD!

@savannah_grace2009

Ohhhh my wordddd

Ok that actually makes so much sense. I felt like the story was moving too fast and wasn’t exactly sure how to slow it down.

Thanks for pointing that out!! <33

@grcr

Mmm. If that’s how other books do it, I guess it could work. I looked it up and some people say to extend the vowels and smooth con…

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@savannah_grace2009

Mmmm…that does make sense, I’m just not sure how to do that.

Instead of “hope”, my characters are trying to fix their problems themselves. Which might be a “false hope”, but I don’t really see it as hope. I understand what you mean, I’m just not exactly sure how to do that.

Ok! Yeah, again, do what you wanna do. But if you…[Read more]

@liberty

The blurb looks great! Very intriguing.

@whalekeeper

I use Pinterest or simply type what I want into a search engine and click “Images”.

@whalekeeper

WOW!! Those are awesome!

I don’t use references really. Unless it’s for outfits……….

@keilah-h

Nice!! I like it!

@linus-smallprint

I’ve been taking a swing at these documents.

Left several comments for you.

@linus-smallprint

Oh, so you did actually make them stay. But you’re zooming through this as well in order not to interfere with the pacing. That works.

Phew, glad it works. XD

I’m glad for this scene. Before I read this section, I was hoping your next section would have something like it. We’ve had many scenes of preaching the gospel, peopl…

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@keilah-h

haha! Nope, no electricity.

It’s a mix. The more advanced kingdoms have a middle-ages feel, while the others are more Roman, old Britania, etc.

@keilah-h

I see, that makes sense. XD

 I’m assuming this means your story’s setting is basically an alternate Europe. Is the Common Tongue an English equivalent or something else?

yeah, just about.

Yes, English.

ohhhhh ok! I like the style, it makes it different than the other two

Good. That’s the goal.

@hybridlore

Yes, I am.

@ellette-giselle

True, true 😂

And it has a lot to do with–––––

You’re just going to leave me hanging? XD

Ahh, gotcha.

@hybridlore

Yay!!! *dance of victory*

😂😂😂 Talk about a rude awakening!

Lolol.

Well, Leon was hit in the face!!

I’m interested in Leon’s backstory more now. He seems to be hiding something from Julian and the others. It will be interesting to see him go back to where he used to fight.

idk if I’d say hiding it as much as hates to talk abo…[Read more]

@ellette-giselle

Great section!! I think you pulled it off. It doesn’t feel too odd or confusing. We are told when the time is passing by, and given a few details, and then the winter is over.

and the other down Julian’s back while he lay sleeping.

😂😂😂 Talk about a rude awakening!

I’m interested in Leon’s backstory more now. He seems to be hidi…[Read more]

@hybridlore   @linus-smallprint    @koshka   @keilah-h    @elishavet-pidyon   @liberty

NEXT SECTION!!!

Imperial Winters are not very exciting, so I’m going to try to cover the whole time in this next section. We’ll see if I can pull it off.

The fifteenth year of Emperor Haidronias’s reign
December 2nd
The Empire

Early this morning, I wa…

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@liberty

they showed any arena.

Not my characters in it.

😉

We shall have to see.