Liberty

@koshka

Wow!!!

*sits there and reads with mouth open* I had no idea I did all that!!

BUT ACTUALLY

*clears throat and nods* of course of course… it’s all with the flows of literary design and technique. 😂

It’s actually really cool seeing you lay it out like that, because I had no idea I had done that.

@linus-smallprint

You know what, I was thinking that while I was editing yesterday morning!! 😂

When I hear this name, I think of an old, kindly grandfather.

Um…… you’re off by like 40 years.

I would peg this guy in his late 30s. Maybe early 40s.

It wasn’t too long ago that he was still physically fighting the slave trade, and he was a…[Read more]

@linus-smallprint

No soup…….?

*paces around room. Tries to understand why that’s funny. Knows that once it is explained I will remember why it was funny*

@freed_and_redeemed

YAY!!! SCENE!!!

Oh dear. Poor Riker…….. This is a bit of a fix.

@freed_and_redeemed ^^

@freedomwriter76 Great scene! *sniffles* 💔😭

@the_lost-journal That’s exciting! Hopefully it works!

@ellette-giselle

Sorry this one is long. I just had too much fun.

Leo

A grin rugged at his lips. He turned to encompass the entire hall with it’s gold name plates and carved enamel in a wave of his hand. “Welcome to Destina Elite Lounge Rooms, also known as the administration offices. Here’s where the head of the school departments come to work…[Read more]

@freed_and_redeemed

*Visible anguish*

You just…leave us…with that?!?

Cruelty of an author. Misuse of cliffhangers. Undeniable suspense.

Ahhhhhhhh…

…

Great job! I don’t like any of these guys. Except Riker of course. And Leon, wherever he is right now…

And though I’ve felt sorry for Franz,  he abused a child.

So yeah. Anxiously…[Read more]

@the_lost-journal

Sorry for taking so LONNNGGGG to reply!

Well now we’re even because I took FOREVER to reply as well!! 🤣 So sorry!!! 😭

Oh, yeah I should’ve mentioned that! About how mega churches are almost always portrayed badly. (Ofc there are some awful mega churches.) But what I mean about “giving them a good church experience” is truly b…

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@savannah_grace2009

Yes, of course girl!! <333

@savannah_grace2009

Thanks!! <33

one thing I’ll suggest, is that I feel like you don’t really introduce the family to us in the first few chapters. At first I wasn’t even sure if Blake was their sibling or not XDXD

They do have a HUGE family, so setting a solid foundation and making all the siblings and the parents unique and established in ou…

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@freed_and_redeemed

Wyoh apparently doesn’t like to notify me when you tag me 😑 Anywayyyy Loved the scene! But also feel so bad for Riker!! 😥

@the_lost-journal

Oh cool! Awesome!!

@godlyfantasy12 Poor November and Ara😭

BUT I LOVE THE SCENES

Callan is…💀 and I ADORE Ara’s uncle already🤭

and I think you portrayed that scene very well without going into explaining it completely and rather leaving it vague.

Job very well done👏👏👏

@esther-c @keilah-h @ellette-giselle @koshka @elishavet-pidyon @godlyfantasy12 (btw, I’ve been LOVING the scenes you’ve been posting, girl🤩) @rae @theducktator @grcr @anyone-else-idk-lol

Y’all want a Riker scene for Book #3? 🫣

well here it is anyway (part of it at least)

What did Leon know?

As far as Riker knew, Leon had a good, loving…

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I also liked the way Leon realizes he’s dying, and that he doesn’t have much time left to work here. The urgency that comes over his actions was real to me.

And then the whole “you’re crazy but I still kinda admire your attitude” thing was funny, but unfortunately real.

@ellette-giselle

Okay. XD

1. It directly applied to today. Ian was hopeless. Utterly hopeless. And there really wasn’t anything better than Heaven itself to offer him. Most people today are already living in hell. They need to know heaven is real.
2. We saw that suicide attempt coming, even though you didn’t spell that out. And then you thwarted a…

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@liberty

I’VE BEEN WAITING FOR YOU TO READ THIS SECTION!!!!!!!!!

I’m so happy! I posted it and I was like, “Liberty’s gonna love this!!!”

Haha!!! I’m so glad I threw you a loop!!

Good! I’m glad you were scared for him! 😂

I’m so HAPPY!!!!!!!

So, this is really cazy because I never thought this scene was one of my best!!…[Read more]

@koshka

Oh my word!! 😂

Huh, this was never one of my best scenes in my mind. That’s funny how that does that. 🤣

Also, Ian’s conversion was one of my favorites to date for a number of reasons.

Ooooo!!! TELL ME!!

@ellette-giselle

Where did you come from?!?! 😂

*Wiggles fingers mysteriously* Narnia…

I wonder what is hooking everyone so much about this section?! Why do y’all like it so much?

I guess it felt well balanced to me, better than some of the others. You did more show than tell; your characters were interacting with each other and their own st…[Read more]

@loopylin

Chase

Chase grabbed one of the two, not knowing the difference besides their colorful packaging. Then he froze, turning the can over in his hand. How do you open this? He had never seen drinks stored in a metal can. He panicked a little. He could ask Felicity, but would she think him stupid? What did it matter? If she thought it s…[Read more]